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Thorax


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This story is a sequel to Equestria's Crazies


Part of the Equestria's Crazies Universe

It has been over two hundred years since Discord, the god of chaos, and Nightmare Moon - or Pleasant Dreams as she's now known as - bringer of eternal night, were released from their prisons. Surprisingly, everything went better than expected; they have become successful co-rulers of Equestria. But that's not the shocking part. Twelve years ago, they had a child; Lucid Dream, a Draconequus filly with the powers of a god at her disposal. She'll be driving everybody up the walls, though she'll have to be careful; her aunt Princess Celestia has eyes everywhere and her teacher knows all the tricks of the trade. But Dream has many friends, and whether or not her parents want her to, she's going to she's going to be stirring up quite a bit of chaos.

Because sometimes Equestria is just crazy.

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Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 504 )

This man is the hero that fimfiction.net deserves.

GENIUS!!! Lucid is best Draconequiis/Alicorn hybrid. ^_^ :twilightsmile:

oh this is great. pinkie messing with celestia from the other side :pinkiehappy:

wait its been 200 thousand years and twilight sparle is still alive, and so is pinkie? did the princesses make them immortal? and why was princess cadence acting like a hippy? :derpyderp2::derpytongue2::derpyderp1::unsuresweetie:

Interest Levels: 98 Percent and Holding.
Character Design Flaw Scans: All turning up Negative at the moment.
Entertaining Enjoyment Levels of Joy: Holding at safe levels.
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Sorry, but I had to get that outta my system. Being technical and all, I just had that on the brain. And when I mean character flaws, I mean how close to Mary-Sueish is your character. Lucid seems to be well designed. I wonder, is she going to meet Sweetie Belle? And if so, is she going to create a Canterlot Branch of the Cutie Mark Crusaders? Because, that would be totally awesome.
On another note.... Wouldn't that mean (I realize that NMM is another part to Princess Luna's personality, and that she's another totally different character but I still have this question), that Discord is with Princess Luna on the side?

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twilight's magic might have grown so massive it rejuvenated her youth.

Wow so much funny:pinkiegasp:
Also how is Twilight still alive or is it her decadent:twilightoops:
And now we know how Supernatural Equestria ends :trollestia::trixieshiftleft:

Not bad. Supernatural Equestria reference there at the end?

Lion King Reference.
You win.
You just win.
And I KNEW there would be a Sparkle involved in all of this! :twilightsmile:

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As far as I know Thorax we don't know how Supernatural Equestria ends.
We only know how royalty said it had ended.

One little thing. I just found one sentence that is... awkward.

Half an hour later, two dead toasters and one broken door they were ready to leave.

Shouldn't it be...

Two dead toasters, one broken door and half an hour later they were ready to leave.

Or maybe...

After half an hour, two dead toasters and a broken door they were ready to leave.

Aside from that this is going to be good.

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Good point BUT we do know a part of how it'll end or towards the end

"Hello class, my name is Miss Sparkle. I'll be your teacher this year."


Does she have a long white beard or is she still using the charm to look older since Celestia likes underage filly's.

I take a note from Relevant Heavy Metal and post this:

"So pound the drum and strike the chords of chaos. And scream unto the skies: Of chaos and eternal night!"

Ooh, this is promising.What time is this set in?

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maybe shes just in family with her i mean, i dont think twilights family would grow away from the princesses, as for pinkie discored did mention that not even the dead can escape celestia, so yeah. but then again you never know

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Um... Dunno. Maybe 200 years later from previous story. It is not like it is said so in description. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Story so far: :rainbowlaugh:

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No not realy. I think that the tartarus incident could be just the beginning.

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OH never thought about it that way :facehoof: because they made a statue for it so I was assuming it was the end or the climax of the story :twilightsheepish:

Im rather enjoying this. May i ask if you have an update schedule?

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Not really, with College starting recently I don't usually have much time to write. Though, if I were to give a rough estimate maybe a new chapter every 2 weeks.

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Think Powerful Wizard, though I'll explain further in the future.

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Roughly 200 Years after the events of Season 1 & 2


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Don't worry, things will be explained eventually

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I was trying to figure out how to start it, my original plan consisted of the entire intro to Circle of Life but then I got bored.

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It's okay, it doesn't count if they aren't actually first :P

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Hmmm, I never thought about that. Could actually use that in the future for a couple of jokes.


I thank all of you for taking the time to read the first chapter, I know it might not seem like much and I've already noticed a few who Disliked it,
I don't really have that much time to work on stories lately (This entire thing was wrote in a Lecture Hall) Hopefully, I can improve the chapter quality with a little more planning.

When I return, I'll do my best to answer any more questions in future chapters.

Thank you all once again.

Looks like you made the featured box.

So apparently some people think this story is okay, and that it deserves a spot in the featured bar.

No.

As soon as I started reading this, I noticed that the grammar was very, very off. Commas were in places that they shouldn't be, they weren't in places they should be, and half of the sentences are run-on and describe things in a weird, unnatural way. A few sentences don't even have a period at the end of the sentence, which makes me feel like the author either doesn't care enough, they need practice, or they aren't a native English speaker. An editor could easily help get rid of all the grammatical problems, though they'd have to work really damn hard to work out the insane amount of kinks in the story.

Next up, this sentence: Tip toeing across the room, the filly managed to navigate her way through the objects scattered about without managing to alert the targets.

Is it just me, or does the wording imply that her goal was to alert the targets? Because if she "didn't manage" to do something, it means that they were trying to do something and failed at it. Which is the exact opposite of what I was supposed to understand from that sentence.

I wouldn't take issue with this story if it wasn't for the fact that everyone is applauding this story as genius. If anybody can shed some light as to why this is the best thing since sliced bread, then please, by all means, tell me.

(Oh god, I hope I don't sound a complete ass-hat. I'm not that good at correctly typing the right tone.)

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Meh, you don't sound like an Ass, I'm well aware it doesn't deserve a feature.
I write stories out of boredom and don't actually have any background in writing.

If anything I should feel like an asshole, there was story on the front page earlier that easily deserved the slot more than this one.

1242563 that doesnt tell me why you made cadence sound like a hippy with that one-liner

1242588 thats a creepy picture, and i never heard of an alicorn hippy as a meme

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I'm just being honest, I would have to be a pretty big douche to call you out on the truth.
The story that was on the list before mine was easily better than most of the stuff that flows through here on a daily basis. Sadly I believe the only reason he didn't get the feature he deserved was due to my story showing up after his.

I'd also be an asshole if I argued against you when I know that you're correct. I don't put as much care into my stories as other authors, I don't plan ahead. I think of one joke and base the entire story off getting to that point, usually only giving it a few hours.

The real people who deserve the slot are the ones who take moments out of their lives and plan the story. The authors who think the story through and don't shape the story to fit the joke, but instead the joke to fit the story. I know I shouldn't have a slot as it takes away from those authors, the ones who put all their effort into their work.

Tasteless. Without point. Bad grammar. Every character is out of it, even though the back story is fine. You seem to lose the exact point of how a filly thinks, five hours before you thought of it, and above that, it just doesn't fit together.

Listen. The idea is wonderful, in fact, I've gotten somethign similar not too long ago. But. No, you can't just easily do something, and think it will be liked.

This is the hardship of a writer. If you pass this one stage, and eventaully, become better, I will congratulate you.

Flaws here: Everything, ranging from grammar, to the very filly that was made by the two.

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No, Feelbad.jpg (The image I posted) is the Meme and that's usually the quote "Feels Bad Man"

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In the end it is your fault that I think it could not end there.
Your stories remind me of many good cartoons and animes ("Fairy tail" for example) so it comes naturally that it came to my thoughts that if those two 'sacrificed' themself or whatever to close the gates of tartarus they may just be stuck in there.
You know playing cards ,dealing with the devil ,headbutt deamons or play board games.

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You have posted something in no relation to what I am saying. Meaning, you are either oblivious to keeping one point together, or you are not explaining yourself.

Advance towards me brethren.

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I mostly posted that as a joke.
Have some quotes from my answer to another persons correct criticism

Meh, you don't sound like an Ass, I'm well aware it doesn't deserve a feature.
I write stories out of boredom and don't actually have any background in writing.

If anything I should feel like an asshole, there was story on the front page earlier that easily deserved the slot more than this one.

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I'm just being honest, I would have to be a pretty big douche to call you out on the truth.
The story that was on the list before mine was easily better than most of the stuff that flows through here on a daily basis. Sadly I believe the only reason he didn't get the feature he deserved was due to my story showing up after his.

I'd also be an asshole if I argued against you when I know that you're correct. I don't put as much care into my stories as other authors, I don't plan ahead. I think of one joke and base the entire story off getting to that point, usually only giving it a few hours.

The real people who deserve the slot are the ones who take moments out of their lives and plan the story. The authors who think the story through and don't shape the story to fit the joke, but instead the joke to fit the story. I know I shouldn't have a slot as it takes away from those authors, the ones who put all their effort into their work.

Trust me, I write out of boredom and for fun. I have no intentions of being the next, Kit or Pen Stroke. I don't have the time for that kind of deal.
I'm aware most of my stories are bad and when I read them, I usually end up hating myself for most of them.
When I write, I have no intentions of ending up with a featured story. I'm also well aware there are so many stories that deserve a featured slot much more than this one.

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Aye. Understood.

I, too, write out of boredum, but never without a good storyline. I have 5 original storylines that I have started on, three which have the ability to be posted, but none have been spell and grammar checked, yet.

Love this, but I have two questions is she bipedal like her dad or quadruped like her mother, and who's horn(s) does she have?

Um... I read the description and my brain farted. :pinkiecrazy:

Wait. If Lucid is calls Celestia Aunt, what happened to LUNA?!

Well now I have to make fanart.

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Aliconequis? Draconicorn? Alicodraconicornonthecobequiis?
Regardless, yes she is.

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Well, I would say that technically speaking Nightmare, being a former part of Luna, is Celestia's sister as well. That makes Luna and Celestia Lucid's aunts.

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