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Oh, and Trixie. There will be Trixie.
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Glad to see the protagonist finally grew up a little,.
..Hmm...Trixie could go good or bad...
And if Blueblood dies..I'm going to guess it's because he attempted an attack on Sunset...Maybe tried getting her thrown in a zoo.
5173658 I would have thought it would have been because he choked on himself.... but that might be giving him too much credit.
5173902 Well, i think that he doesn't have a soul and is just a magical construct of assholery... So he can't die by asphyxiation by his own ego. It requires a nice long incineration by angry Sunpone. Or angry Moonpone.
Unless Fae is sitting on top of Dash (which I don't think was happening at this part of the chapter), there's a mistake there.
Okay, I was expecting something bad to happen when Nightlight pulled out the cider. At least some sort of reprimanding from Fae for poor parenting. Really, the entire meeting went surprisingly well.
Now who was doubting me when I said that Fae would patch things up with Spike?
... Celestia gets cancer? How... How does that even work?
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Pet crab.
Because killing off Celestia is just not a thing that a fic writer can do lightly without making the entire audience go 'What the hell' and (usually) not in a good way.
So... best answer? Pet crab. A giant star-filled pet crab.
That was fun. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
5174342 All that sun was bound to catch up sometime. She's about to get the mother of all sunburns.
wow the Alicorn of Love is really a sex freak
You really do have a bit of a hate-boner for Spike, huh?
Besides, I don't believe any of that stuff will happen. That'd be ridiculous, and make me completely lose my interest in what's already on its way to a farce.
Less lovecrap, more politics!
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I feel bad for the thing when Philomena finds a bucket of water... it wont tend well for the little guy... does anyone have a pair of those shell crackers and some ketchup or butter?
dont get the stars part but I understood the sea crustation bit
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Cancer is a stellar constellation and Equestria has at least one form of critter made of stars based on constellations (The Ursa Minor and Ursa Major). It is therefor possible that there is a stellar crab named Cancer. I am proposing that Celestia is going to adopt it as a pet!
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I sincerely doubt anything beyond the thing involving Blueblood was actually a 'thing', and the Blueblood one only at some point in the story. As for the 'hate boner' for Spike, it's actually lessening and we're seeing some character growth here for Fae. S/He is still a snarky pessimistic psuedo-jerk at times, but despite really disliking Spike... Well I won't spoil this chapter but consider the venom of earlier chapters and Fae's behavior in this one.
I actually think it's a step in the right direction.
5173911 try angry moonpony that has drunk about 100 espresso's, and by flicking a quill with her tongue ends up destroying the entirety of Canterlot.
(just in case you don't know the reference, here, it's a one shot, http://www.fimfiction.net/story/163537/1/the-reason-luna-isnt-allowed-coffee/coffeezilla )
EVIL HYPERLINKS DON'T WORK
5176831 Nah. Blueblood would be thrown off a cliff well before Luna got to her fifth.
I do hope Twilight isn't going to help Spike exactly like Celestia...
And then two years later Celestia asked me to marry her so we could make out like rabbits all night long.
5176644 I've lost most of my interest because of the vitriol...and the romantic relation presented in the first story. If Blueblood dies and I'm subjected to more vitriol of what could be a developed character, I'll just quit the series.
Even the storyteller/editor couldn't convince me not to drop it. (Mostly because of the 'Death of the Author' theory.) These are faults with the story, not really questions I'm asking to be explained. It's bullshit that shouldn't have happened in the first place that only serves to lengthen out what should've, would've and had-to've been a complete work of fiction before the call for 'Sequel!' had been raised. Frankly, this story never should've been in the first place.
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Well, I suppose here we differ in opinion. I'm enjoying the story, even if I don't like the actions or bigotry on behalf of the main character on occasion. Still I hope you find a story you can enjoy.
5178090 I'm enjoying it too...the bigotry just kills off my interest bit by bit.
Thanks anyways, same to you.
Am I the only one surprised that Fae hasn't borrowed Sunset's body, even once? Just to have some fingers? Quite frankly a Human Ear Scritch would probably be just the thing for dealing with Twilight during her super OCD moments. Or the whole 'use it or lose it' nature of skills as applied to manual dexterity.
Plus all the kinky things that can be done with human fingers. Plus that super-kinky thing that you can do with the human forearm. Which Fae should know about since (IIRC - unless I'm getting my male-leads mixed up) he has worked at a horse ranch, and really should have a passing knowledge on horse breeding.
Though that might even be a kink too far as far as Celestia would be concerned, even if it was really Fae. (I hope. ) And sadly the only other mare who would benefit is Luna. Who does actually have quite a lot in common with Sunset. Hmm. Where's my geiger-shipper sensor...?
Hate Spike, always have always will.
I say kill him and replace him with a tiny changeling or something.
Cadance's complete devotions to all forms of "love" is scary, imho. Kinda like a religious fanatic.
Im pretty sure she's not into it as to be "insane", but the scary vibe is there.
The way i picture it, she's "high" with her powers/belief/ect on love and all that and it seem to hold steady "up there".. but what if she "falls"? That's what worries me for some reason.
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Don't forget belly rubs.
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Fae kind of handled this in the worst possible way for the long term. Awesome!
Ok, LordBrony2040 decided not to play the angle of Twilight's parents being unreasonably paranoid about him, so they actually created a pretty good environment for Spike to change. The irony is that Spike was in the perfect environment for the Spike problem to be solved and Fae just fucked up big time.
If you're put into a situation in life you're not comfortable with, eventually you become comfortable and you adapt to it. That's been my experience. It just becomes normal. That's almost the only way to genuinely change yourself. You have to force yourself into a different mold, and then let time do its work. Spike has now become even more aware of how things could change in a way he's not comfortable with, so it's like he had a wound and now it's been irritated and infected so it's even more sensitive.
Spike hasn't had enough time in a different environment to change.
You can talk to someone about an issue, but that doesn't change the emotional structure of their mind. That requires a long time and lots of sleeping and getting used to it, and being forced out of the pattern of behavior that you were used to. For the longest time, you'll feel like crap and uncomfortable, and then one day you wake up and it's normal.
And that's a common thing when dealing with a friend that has a psychological issue, whether it's a pretty common one or an abnormal one. You explain to them what the problem is, and they might even understand, and it doesn't change anything. I have seen this pattern many many times. I've experienced it. Deep seated issues don't change with talking unless some abnormal miracle occurs. The inertia is just too strong. I wouldn't even put it down as a problem of wisdom or intelligence. It's just how minds work.
If you have an issue from childhood, it almost never completely goes away. It's very hard or even impossible to break out of those patterns, even if you know about them... To the point where I've seen people just give up on it and say 'that's the way I am'. It doesn't even have to be a psychological problem; it could just be changing how you decide to live your life in some way.
The best way to change someone is to get them out of an environment that facilitated the old behaviors, and then don't let them back. The worst way to deal with Spike is to put him back into the environment that facilitated his problem.
Spike has an addiction. And even if someone gets over an addiction, the trigger is still there even decades later.
I think it's one of these situations where the road to hell is paved with the best intentions. You feel emotional about something, in this case Fae feels pity for Spike, I don't have to explain we're pretty much wired to empathize with children, but Spike hasn't gone away long enough that he's changed. Fae is colluding with him even recognizing that to some degree... Oh... I find this so ironically entertaining.
I've been in situations like that before, where I tried to be merciful to someone and it blew up in my face so hard and it was just because I felt emotional at the time, I felt pity for someone and I forgot to think about the long term consequences and the big picture. Honestly, these situations blow up in everybody's face.
That's what being 'mature' is. It's keeping your eyes on the big picture rather than being caught up in the emotion of the moment. And Fae got caught up in the emotion of the moment. Yeah!
And people who are delusional, they don't really lie to you; they lie to themselves. So, they tell you what they think is the truth, but their behavior is contradictory. And the smarter they are just makes them better at rationalizing.
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LordBrony2040 decided not to go the route of Twilight's parents being unreasonable, at least that seems the way things are the way it's been portrayed. I feel like something is missing in the behavior of the ponies in general. It's been stressed that ponies in this story are able to get over issues better than humans, but allow me to explain this scenario that is in my brain.
Martin the deathclaw is a part of your community.
Martin is perfectly civilized and he wears a top hat and a monocle. He's polite and he has no criminal record. But at some level you recognize how scary he could be.
It's like you know on Tuesdays that Martin the deathclaw goes shopping at Publix for groceries, so you just decide you're tired that day and you'll go on Wednesday. You don't have anything in particular against Martin the Deathclaw.. It's just.. He pays his taxes and he's polite... But... He's a fucking deathclaw. You don't want to be in the same room with the guy.
And imagine if your daughter were married to Martin the deathclaw. You don't have anything against him, but you're still going to have nightmares about Martin filleting your daughter like a fish accidentally when he wakes up in the morning.
It's less about Martin the deathclaw than you just want your stress to go away.
You might even tell yourself that you're being horrible and unreasonable, but still that doesn't make your cognizance go away.
It'd be like sitting in a room with a dangerous power tool like an angle grinder going. If there is a dangerous power tool in the room, I have to have it in a vise or bolted to a table and not just turned off, but the power cord detached. I know that power tools don't just mysteriously turn on when their switches have broken the circuit, but I just have to have that power cord detached to feel safe, to feel like I'm in control.
And that's something that's been bothering me. It makes sense to me that Twilight or Celestia or Shining Armor or any of the 'heroic' or military types would feel secure with these changes.. They're powerful and used to dealing with danger. But the average pony deals with less ambient danger than the average human. It just doesn't make sense to me that they would be comfortable being taken out of their comfort zone like that. They live with no danger on a day to day basis. It's more about what they're used to than what changelings actually are. If I lived in a grimdark world full of monsters at arm's length, and I had to live with the threat of death walking down the street to the big box store, a changeling next door wouldn't even make me bat an eye. Ponies have very little crime, probably even less violent crime. The development of dangerous monsters living in their neighborhood is a new thing. It's even been addressed in how you've mentioned that ponies do not want to live in Ponyville because of the Everfree Forest.
Ponies don't seem to be afraid enough of changelings.. And they don't seem to want to control changlings enough. That's another aspect of it, you fear something, you want to control it. And as I said, it might not even be something that targets you.. Just because it is dangerous you want to control it, put it in a cage, make it predictable. It isn't enough for it to 'control itself' for you to feel secure.
This isn't the same thing as the crystal empire reaction. This is like the underlying tension that never goes away if you had giant dangerous monsters walking around in society. I just feel like it seems strange there hasn't been enough of this. It doesn't even have to really come from the ponies; it could come from somewhere else. And that's another thing, there are more than just ponies in this world. I couldn't imagine that all the other species are not having some sort of reaction over the unveiling of the changelings.
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It just seems to me like the story needs some of cross event to make it more interesting. It doesn't feel like there are enough tangents going on.
Ok, here's an example. It's just out of the blue. Ponies do the herding thing, it works wonderfully, but the griffins see this as a complete fucking monstrosity, a perversion of nature. Ponies start getting snubbed, and it even harms trade. Griffins take their lucrative grain deals to the minotaurs as a supplier, even though they are more expensive, and the price of griffin steel jumps 20% which is a nationwide disaster. Ponies start getting mocked for their impropriety. Obviously this isn't a particularly uncommon plot tactic. I'm just transferring the expected reaction to this sort of social change from the ponies to the griffins in this case, and the griffins are playing the role of the asshole bigots who have a problem with something that works.
You can still play this direction of ponies naturally adapting to these things in a way that would be cause more resistance in humans, but there needs to be something. It just feels to me that the past couple of chapters have just had the gears grinding on issues that had already been presented.
Every chapter, I don't feel surprised. It's not just an issue of predictability. For instance, I thought that Twilight would end up having the most problems with the herding thing because she is the least attractive and it's only natural for the least attractive member of the herd to get the least attention. And the difference between her and Celestia is just staggering. In my free time, I wrote a couple of pages for my private stash thinking about this where I had some fun making 'Celestia is so hot' jokes. The way you portrayed it didn't play out that way, so I was surprised at an alternate interpretation of the possibilities.. I wanted to interpret Twilight as being less sublimated, and instead being played like an emotional pinball between the fact that she was essentially a sexual pauper who had won the sexual lottery who had the insecurity of an unexpectant winner who didn't want to mess with her golden goose but had at the same time learned to start wanting needs she had suppressed and dismissed before, and so she came out as awkward - both hesitant and overly excited at the same time. The scenario you presented wasn't the same as what I would have expected.
It's the issue that there are no tangents. The issues that are to be handled are being handled. There is no walking around on the world map to the big bad's castle and "Suddenly a wild tortagon appears! You take 10 damage and you're poisoned!" Damn, tortagons don't even show up around here. Nothing is going on sideways, it's just following a linear path. It just has to be some new development or some event that changes the circumstances of the current foci.
You've got a good dish going here man, but where's the hot sauce...? And splash it in my goddamn eyes! That's where the hot sauce goes!
I liked that you had Night Light drinking. Ahh, man, that's great. Just like that scenario I outlined in that previous post. He starts drinking because his daughter is in a serious relationship with a changeling, a changeling queen!
"So, Mr. Night Light, when did you start drinking... heavily?" asks Dr. Schopenhoofen as he taps his pencil against his clipboard, keeping a squinted eye on Night Light. Night Light gets up from his seat and paces back and forth. "Well... It could have been around.... It could have been around..." Night Light stamps his hoof and grits his teeth, pawing at the floor of the office. He takes a deep breath and looks up sharply at the doctor, shouting through clenched teeth with equally strained bloodshot eyes, "It could have been around the time my daughter basically married a bucking soul-sucking changeling queen!"
Hah, hah, that'd be great to play that angle. He needed a drink to calm down his frickin' nerves, not to try to make Fae feel comfortable.
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Spike is a tool. He doesn't freaking exist. Same idea applies to Blueblood. They are tools that the author uses for your amusement. We suspend our disbelief so that we can play with these toys in our imagination.
You want to create distance from the author and his work by subcribing to the 'death of the author' theory, yet at the same time judge an author for using Spike as antagonist to create problems to make his story more interesting. If you're going to have the mindset of that theory, then you would judge the story on its structure and meaning. It's not just 'my interpretation is just as valid as the author's'; it's 'anyone's interpretation is just as valid as anyone else's.' You follow that mindset and you reach a multiplicity that gets closer to a deeper understanding of a work beyond any single interpretation, and the last thing you think about are the biases of the author. But at the same time, It doesn't give your interpretation any special powers. It just means that the special powers of the author's interpretation are taken away. It means he or she cannot universally define what the work means. Those are not the same thing.
It also doesn't mean that the author's ability to define what the work means to him or her is taken away.
If LordBrony2040 told you that he didn't hate-boner for Spike, then you're basically saying it doesn't matter. But the death of the author theory does not apply to someone's actual intent. You want to equivocate two things that are entirely different. And it's first thing you jumped to comment on.
It's like you wanted to put the death of the author theory out there as some pseudointellectual justification for being stubborn, for elevating an interpretation that you've decided to stick to. What if your interpretation of the story is just plain wrong? You're asserting that there are deep inherent unfixable flaws in this story, but what if you're just plain wrong. What if you are being incoherent while not realizing it? You certainly aren't making arguments beyond, 'The author has a hate boner' or 'this story has obscure flaws and should never had been continued' or 'I can't stand how some characters are criticized and not redeemed'.
Not every interpretation is a special snowflake. Sometimes an interpretation doesn't make any sense. It's not a matter of taste. It's just incorrect.
And what is this hate boner thing... Because he's given Spike a character flaw to improve his story, your conclusion is that he has a hate boner for Spike. That seems such a silly conclusion.
And you can't tell if someone has a 'hate-boner' for a character, or if they are just using a character as an antagonist, unless they tell you.. Because the end result in a story is exactly the same. If I tell you that one side of an equation was 3, then it doesn't tell you whether the other side of the equation was 1+1+1 or 1*3 or 9/3. There are multiple scenarios that lead to the same result. You don't need to take a foundation of mathematics course with fancy symbols or advanced logic to realize this.
If Spike ends up drinking scotch in a ditch wearing a newspaper hat and a dirty diaper during the day, begging for bits that he uses to buy zebracaine to snort off a changeling hooker's flank every night, then I will applaud LordBrony2040 because I did not see that coming. Just as long as it makes sense; that's the caveat. Even the empathy or indifference you feel towards a character is something the story constructs, whether it makes them into a woobie or a villian.
I wouldn't be thinking to myself, 'The author must hate Spike!' I would be thinking that Spike is a douchebag in that story.
Why have a problem with characters with flaws being criticized or inspiring anger? There is nothing personal about this.
This is no political or religious allegory. The only manipulation here is entertainment. There is no deeper meaning to Spike's dependency in this story other than it is entertaining. Spike has a problem, and characters are interacting with that. The reactions are not forced; they make sense. There has to be problems or the story is not interesting. And if there were a personal issue, that'd be something you'd find in the author notes or in his blog.
Instead of 'death of the author', let's aim for 'death of the reader'. Try taking your own biases out of your interpretation of this story and see it for it what it is. The reactions of the character to Spike's behavior made sense.
Every time a writer writes a character, and in every new story they write, a new character is born. This Spike has a genuine problem.This isn't a secret smear campaign against the Spike you have in a corner of your brain. I stopped watching MLP around season 2 or 3 because I started finding it less entertaining, and I thought fans were doing a better job so I just stopped watching it, but I don't remember Spike having any problem like this. This is a new character development as far as I know.
If one character reacts to a problem in another character, that isn't preconceived bias; that is a reaction to a constructed reality in a story.
And as for the stuff in his author's note, that is obviously a joke. Why are you taking it seriously and with anger none the less?
Although, if he accomplished those things and it made sense, I would be pleasantly surprised. But the reason why it's funny is because it doesn't make sense. Of course it's ridiculous.
5191450 When you refer to me doing something in your...rebuttal, you are entirely wrong on all accounts.
The tool that is the angst against Spike throughout this sequel is meaningless. It only draws your(my) sympathy away from the protagonist, and it's only a attempted to be resolved recently. It's not interesting, it's deplorable and uncomfortable. It brings you out of the mind of the story if you even so much as slightly disagree with the notion. If the writer doesn't have ambivalence against Spike this wouldn't exist in the first place.
'Death of the Author' is a theory that the author has little to no bearing or 'defence' against his/her work once he publishes it so that s/he can't muddle it up, or provide an explanation that makes his/herself feel better but ends up resolving nothing. It's an invocation to protect the story above the author's own concerns and justifications. I judge the actions against Spike in the story by the Protagonist, not the author, for this very reason. I realize the original statement is careless, but you need to hold a certain distance before you start judging others. Before you realize all your judgements are false and end up hurting yourself more than you intend to hurt another.
(Yes, you have offended me, sir. No, I don't judge you for it. I'd like to ask you to be more careful in the future. You may have offended me, but I tend to forget what's offended me in favor of pleasant conversation. )
Back to the tool point, tools are made to improve or create something. It's not interesting when a tool is only used in order to break that particular tool down. Slam or throw a wrench down on concrete hard enough and it'll fly back to hit you in the face in addition with being unusable for other projects. Every tool may break in the end, but it's important to get plenty of the proper use out of it before you send it off to be recycled.
Spike's story was meant to garner sympathy or development for the protagonist or the story, it's not my fault neither happened. Sue- I mean, Omnifarious got what s/he wanted in the end, no matter what s/he did. The only thing accomplished was Spike being retconned. The author didn't have to drag this out for however many chapters just for garnering sympathy for Spike in the character. I personally feel that the arc was just to avoid the common cliché and trope of 'Spike is Main's best bro'. This might not be true, and likely isn't, but this is just a justification of something that was pointless to the narrative. It could have been resolved more quickly, more naturally, and more wholesomely than how it has been.
Anyways, I'll likely get nowhere with you. I personally don't care about Spike is a character, he's just a character. But you have to accept that he exists in order to use him in the first place. For the few times we get to see him, it's like looking from the perspective that 'Spike never should have been a character in the first place' that writers use for either pushing their own views. Spike already has a character, and Blueblood has none. You can't exactly change canon and expect people to be happy with it, and you run into the problem that you might be wrong if you judge a character before they exist. Blueblood could be a jerk...or he could be (though not a paragon) an actual person as a character. I don't want to see the potential of existence be destroyed just because someone doesn't care for what little the show shows him to be.
I took it seriously because one established character got shit on enough already. I'm not going to stand around reading something that would put down an entity on the one visible mistake a 5-minute antagonist (I'm not sure how much screen time Blueblood actually got, but I'm pretty sure it wasn't greater than the time mentioned) made. This is based on a show who's main virtues are 'Love & Tolerance'. And like I tolerate the existence of every story in the group I run, I'll tolerate this story until it gets far too bad and then some.
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I don't think he's that flexible... or well endowed.
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Well, it seems like you formulated your opinion before you started writing anything specific down.
It's not meaningless because it drove the story forward, and it created a conflict. I already explained this and you basically ignored it. Spike was given a flaw and it drove the story forward. If you give a character a flaw, it doesn't mean you hate the the character. It doesn't bring you out of the mind of the story; it draws you into it unless you have a preconceived bias. The inconsistency doesn't exist in the story; it exists in your mind. And I don't think you're using ambivalence correctly. Ambivalence is mixed feelings. I think you mean bias.
It means more than that. I wrote about that.
Here a wikipedia quote because I'm lazy:
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I don't intend to hurt you. I just think you're wrong.
And how could I possibly hurt myself here? You're projecting your own concerns onto me. I say stupid shit all the time; that's how I make progress. Oh, if something thinks I'm so stupid.. I'm just going to cry and cry and cry. The tears will more vast than the ocean. My fragile ego is an empty eggshell just waiting to crack.
Well, thank you for your magnanimity. However, I'm not particularly concerned with whether I offend you or not. I just pointed out why I thought you were wrong. It's not personal.
I am concerned whether I offend my family, some of my coworkers or my boss. You are not even in the rankings. It's so bizarre that you mention that. Why would you think that I care about this?
I have nothing invested in this. If I thought you were right, then I'd say you're right. I have been wrong so many times in my life that being wrong is no longer personal to me.
I'm doing this because it's 3:30am in the morning; I'm bored and I can't sleep, a dangerous combination.
This analogy is too vague to say anything. There are great stories which are tragedies where the only point is to break the tools down. Think Shakespeare. Think Greek tragedies. The hitting me in the face thing you mention? It's so nonsensical I can't even reply to it. It's just like a strained attempt to insert some aggression into your description. I know when I write these characters if I push them too hard, then they are going to bounce back and break my fucking nose. And not every character is special snowflake, sometimes you need a faceless stormtrooper to get shot in the face; you don't want him to secretly like kittens or have a family and two kids. You want to be able to feel good about shooting him in the face, and not distract the heroes from being heroic. He's better as a faceless minion.
Sometimes a deplorable jerk is just a deplorable jerk, and that's the best thing for the story. And then they disappear, because they are not worth the attention of the story. They don't need to be reused; you get a new character.
I'm trying to understand what you're communicating. No, it's not your fault that you don't feel that Spike's conflict created sympathy or a development for the protagonist. I don't think that this was really about that. I think it was a problem that was presented that drove the story forward. And I'll be honest, I don't think that the definition of a Mary Sue is based on what happens to them, quite so much as if reality forces itself into a myopic pretzel to make the main character look good. If a main character looks good, but it makes sense and doesn't seem forced I don't think Mary Sue... But I don't think Fae always looks that good all the time in this story, so... Uhh..
Ok, so next point... These past couple of chapters haven't had much Spike in them. Other things have been happening. And Fae's reactions make sense.. You get angry, and then your anger cools, and then you feel sympathy for someone if they got punished if they seem like they're hurting or if they pitiful... If they aren't acting defensive. It's really not that complicated.
It's a fanfiction. What's wrong with retconning the original series in a fanfiction? Second of all, it's not really retconning if it's a new character development that doesn't conflict with any established history.
You feel like he's avoiding a cliche. And you think it could have been done better, and you're not even certain he's avoiding a cliche. I don't know how to respond to this. I don't know what you mean by 'more wholesomely'. As for more quickly and naturally.. I don't get how this is unnatural. As for quick, umm.. shrug?
Again this assumption that the author is trying to avoid a cliche, and he's doing it poorly instead of judging the story in the context of its own conflicts.
Why can't this be a genuine conflict? Why does this have to be some bizarre conspiracy to avoid a cliche? Certainly if you are thinking in the context of the story as a story, then it is what it is.
Oooohh, burn. Your cold passive aggressiveness brings me back to sweet childhood memories.
No, I don't. I don't have to have to accept he exists. Heck, you don't have to care about real people, much less fictional ones.
Changing and extending canon is the point of fanfiction. Spike had character development? That's what happens in a story. That's what makes fanfiction interesting. If you want to see MLP, go watch MLP. That's why I mentioned the Spike in your corner of your brain, and how each author creates a new character.
I loved that story where Blueblood got stuck in a time loop and he went from being a massive jerk to being a great guy. But this story is not about Blueblood and his character development. You don't want to spend time on every character in a story, and sometimes some characters just serve a purpose, and if you try to develop them beyond that purpose then they stop serving the purpose well. As I said, you don't want stormtroopers to have friends and family. You want them to be warm bodies to get shot by blasters and look menacing.
Responding to your last sentence, you can't explore the myriad possibilities of Blueblood in one story. He can be ultimate jerk. He can be secret superhero. He could be just a nobody who doesn't have an effect on anything with a royal title. He is what he is in this story, and he serves his purpose. Blueblood is the main character in many other stories.
I don't even remember what happened to Blueblood. It's like no consequence in this story. I went through My Secret Life as an Evil Insect Overlord, doing a browser search for blueblood wondering in which chapter does Bluebood get shot in the face. I used google to quick search the sequel and I couldn't find it.
If he hasn't shown up then he's still usable I guess.
I typed both the original story and this sequel into google with blueblood and I didn't get any matches.
It seems like such a minor nitpick. Why aren't you judging the story on its quality of a story rather than nitpicking idiosyncratic things you're concerned with?
A few paragraphs back, you said it's not personal and Spike's a tool for entertainment because I said so and you wanted to seem like you don't care as much as I do. And then he's real you have to acknowledge he exists. Now you're going on about how it's personal because Blueblood's being shit on and you won't stand for it, implicitly going through the same mental contortions with Blueblood that you did with Spike.
Make up your mind. I can't respond to contradictory positions.
This was what I was talking about. It's silly to judge a story based on the character you have in your brain, when an author makes a new character when they write a story. He's not shitting on Spike. He's using Spike. My Incredibly Convoluted Life as a Changeling Monarch isn't an essay of a character analysis of Spike in the show and how Spike is stupid or bad in some way. This is a story where Spike had a negative character development and it's being used as part of the plot.
And Spike isn't even being portrayed as an unsympathetic character. He's coming out as more desperate and confused. And Fae's reaction makes sense, when you first deal with someone who has a serious problem, you get angry. Then, as you realize how little control they have over themselves, you alternate between pity and frustration.
Your response here was basically... "I totally don't care about these characters in the way that you say I do, but it's totally the only thing I care about."
Ok, so you don't like the story because you don't like how Spike has a character flaw and because Blueblood doesn't get enough screen time. You can have idiosyncratic tastes like that. It's fine. But you have not mentioned a single thing that an author would go back, and say 'I made a mistake here and I need to correct this.' You have not said anything valid about the quality of this story. You're just explained your biases and how they conflict with this story, and then you tried to rationalize that your biases are reflected in an objective loss in quality for this story.
Just be honest. You don't like stories where Spike is a bad guy and Blueblood isn't redeemed or developed. Just don't say something silly like the author has a hate boner for Spike because you don't like that he gave Spike a character flaw. Don't say the story is just horrible and irredeemable and should have ended in its conception because you don't like that Blueblood wasn't developed. Say you don't like stories like that, and that's fine. Something like, "I'm not saying it's a bad story, but it's just my personal preference."
That's what I meant about trying "death of the reader" instead of "death of the author". Try to enjoy the story and judge it within the context of itself with an open mind without bringing any expectations to the table. Or don't, but don't bother to poorly rationalize bias into something else with some inflammatory statements mixed in for fun, unless you like someone occasionally pointing out that's what you doing and you're into that.
And so I reach the end of the posted chapters... and favourite yet another of your stories...
I find it hilarious that the Author's Note spoilers are ACTUAL spoilers, and not just fucking about, trying to be misleading.
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A.... Shining Shotgun?
Well Spikes not going to like that
I'm in no way shape or form related.
DEATH BY SNU SNU!!! there were no crushed pelvis's in the making of this story. (Mabey)
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You mean the same seamstress that has saved Equestria a couple of times and should be considered a national hero?
Omniferiouse might have very dark sides but compared to others? Hes a fucking saint!
I would get Spike a 3 Changelings crew in rotation to keep observation on him. Keeping him save but also occupied. Plus he will be not longer alone in a room.
Has a direct link to Omniferiouse if needed.
Perhaps fill his time with boardgames and slow learning. Cardgames for helping him work on tactics and boardgames for prediction etc.
Beautiful chapter.
Geeze, Twilight’s parents are terrible in this world.
And what’s with the ten-page comment posts?
That teacher thing got nowhere