Spike learns he's closer to home than he thought.
Just a short that was brewing in my head. Might get more chapters.
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Nice enough, though very sudden.
I can't honestly buy it happening that way, but the emotions play out right and that's what suspension of disbelief is for.
4075409 Thank you.
This was an exercise in saying as much as I can, in as few a words as possible. Playing with negative-space narration while I was at it.
I se
4075439 I see, well I hope you complete this little piece here anyway even if its very short.Im always in search of fics with motherly Twilight with Spike, so it would be nice for things to get sappy.
An enjoyable little vignette.
The tone of the following comic is considerably more humorous, but I couldn't help but think of it reading this.
http://www.derpiboo.ru/166532?scope=scpefbfb381249e201ebaeec3c078e0a5d85f4106c28
This is gonna get featured. Just ya watch.
Cool and interesting, but deserved to be fleshed out.
I'll check out this negative-space narration thing you mentioned. Learn something every day.
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...Ow...That hurt my heart...
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Credit, where credit is due.
That was the seed of this story.
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I appreciate your vote of confidence.
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I have two other scenes for this story in my head. When they make it to paper is a mater of mood. Yes, yes, I know "Mood is a thing for cattle and love-play", but writing too, sometimes.
Twilight Sparkle: Equestria's worst mother.
Always seemed weird to me that Spike's grandparent's and rich ass uncle never got him a birthday gift, but five mares he barely hangs out with, did.
Woah! He just found out! Spike and Twilight have been friends since he was hatched, but the second he finds out she's his mom, he wants to call her mom?
He must have forgot that he's attracted to her if she has Rarity's mane. 
Also, this completely changes the group's dynamic, I hope you explore it.
Okay... Interesting concept. I'd be interested in seeing it further played out, if you ever have a mind to do so.
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Ahhhh there it is. I knew I'd seen this idea somewhere before.
I look forward to seeing what you do with this now.
Cute, and a little squicky.
4 Derpy's out of five
Gratz on the feature.
MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
okay, terrible. This supposes that Twilight has spent all this time treating her own son as a personal servant.
and it's OCPD, not OCD, DAMMIT. There's a more fundamental difference than just a single letter. LOOK IT UP!!!!!
I...I'm...I don't even know what to say...
But it was rather cute.
More please.
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4077766 No, it's OCD. Severe irrational fears with fantasies of exaggerated punishment resulting from said fears being realized (being a bad friend (Winter Wrap Up, Lesson Zero, Boast Busters) or disappointing Princess Celestia (A Bird In The Hoof, Lesson Zero, Swarm of the Century) and systematic checking and symmetry compulsions in order to try to alleviate these irrational fears.
As somebody who lives the first and knows people who are the second of the two mental illnesses, I can safely tell you Twilight is an OCD.
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My understanding is that Rarity would be closer to OCPD. I never went past the 100 level psychology classes, and that was some years ago. Anyone better studied is free to correct me.
4081290 You are correct. Rarity hates dirt and feels a need to be a perfectionist because she's obsessed with her image. Twilight hates disorganization because deep down she's got a crippling fear of being a bad friend/student and that the only way to avoid being a bad friend is to be organized and aware of everything that may be a potential problem within the context of her life. Both are textbook OCD symptoms.
You need to build up a bit more bro
maor? pls?
in all seriousness I thought this was beautiful. it does seem a bit rushed from spikes pov but at the same time hes always considered her a mother figure, even if she acted as his sister/caretaker so I don't see it as too big a jump that he would be pretty accepting. for all his quirks he is possibly the most level headed character in the show
loved it, would like to see it continued
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Spike is easy to write, his motivations are on his sleeve. The most important thing to Spike, is his desire to be accepted. All his other motivations are facets of this; from wanting to be cool, to his crush on Rarity, Spike is constantly looking for the place he belongs.
THE FEELS!
More chapters please
More chapters please
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They're in the works.
4638434 k
MORE PLEASE
So ponies can have kids as children? Allowing that I can wrap my mind around that: How did Spike come out a dragon (rather than a kirin or some other half-breed) and exactly how old was Malachite when he 'plowed the fields' (if you follow my meaning)? I'll reserve further judgment until more comes out.
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Thank you for bringing Kirin to my attention. As big of a mythology buff as I am, I had never stopped to read up on them. Really, knowing them only from the Japanese beer brand.
4798890 To be fair, I hadn't heard about them until such works as 'The Witching Hour' and 'KAMI: Episode 1 - Malicious Edge' (spelled qilin there). Also in the respective works, they look and do things entirely different. (I highly recommend both of them by the by.)
Really not buying this story, sorry. It's just completely implausible.
do you think that because spike is half unicorn half dragon that he could use magic maybe his spines could glow like unicorn horns if so that combined with twilight sparkle being his mom he could become the most powerful magic user alive
Meh. The dialogue is too short to be realistic.
5333730 lolwut? It's not too short to be realistic! Think - how often are your conversations punctuated with long lines of dialogue IRL? Because if you say 'often', you need to get better social skills.
No, the dialogue is just right (though at some points it might have been better to use connectives like 'and', or otherwise use teh power of clauses).
My problem is with the suddenness. Everything happens all at once - Spike reads the letter, Twilight reveals she gave birth to Spike, dem big emotions, hugz, wubby dubby. It's all too fast and in to short a time frame, and at the end I'm just left wondering what the hell just happened.
And nothing is learned either, beyond the fact that Spike is Twilight's son. We don't see their relationship evolve (Spike asking Twi if he can call her Mom isn't evolution, it's a result of evolution - we don't see his reasoning or his thoughts or what leads him to decide that Twi is his motherly figure), we don't learn anything from this revelation, all we end up with is a reveal for the sake of a reveal.
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I can't really disagree with any of your points. This was just something bouncing around my head, that I had to get out.
sequel please
6507390 Sequel? It says "incomplete" so really, another chapter is in order. I mean... what. the. heck. The possibilities are there!
6722011 I wrote that before I saw that.
Please more of this
more
I love this story so much Please update
Please more I beg you.