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When Fox goes away, Foxy comes out to play.

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Guys, what are you doing. It's not that good of a story.

It a good story story so we shall thumb and fav :twilightsmile:
Also how tall/big is he if he can left Celly up even if she's light to him without it feeling uncomfortable?
I'm going to assume that she is the size of a earth horse

4508930 Jesus, an earth horse? Earth horses can easily weigh from 800-1000 pounds. Celestia is about 5"5', with her horn adding another 5 inches. These are by no means proper measurements, I just didn't like thinking of Celestia as a full grown horse. Thaddeus is about 6"5'. A bit abnormal, I know, but I like to think of the ponies as short and cute.

Watching to see what happens :)

4509218 Fair enough. I wouldn't get your hopes up though.

I'm certainly enjoying this so far and am definitely looking forward to more.

Vorki #7 · Jun 7th, 2014 · · 1 · II ·

This is good:ajsmug:

4512272 It's mediocre at the best.

4510427 I might be able to get a chapter out today or tomorrow, depending on how I'm feeling.

Just figured I'd let you all know, Thaddeus' personality is loosely based off of my own. Also, he has the same last name as I. Fun fast facts.

When I see the name 'Thaddeus', I immediately thought of 'Thaddeus Thatch' from Atlantis XD

4514502 Oh? I haven't watched the movie, so I didn't know that was the name of a character. I got this name from here: Clickity Click

4510427 think you could tell me what Artemis is? Like dictionary meaning?

I think you made your human character too tall. Seriously? Taller than celestia? That's a new one sure, but I think it's safe to assume that Celestia is equal to the size of a horse and horses are generally taller than most humans. At the most around the same height.

Okay, so I'm liking this so far, looking forward to more.

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Artemis was the Greek God of the moon, she pulled a silver chariot across the sky which symbolically was the moon. Incidentally the chariot was pulled by reindeer which was one of the places Santa's sleigh comes from. Oh and her brother was Apollo, God of the sun who likewise pulled a golden chariot across the sky to make day. In brony terms though Artemis is the male equivalent of Princess Luna. This shoooooooould answer your question :)

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GMP #17 · Jun 8th, 2014 · · · II ·

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I agree its okay, but there are a few spelling mistakes and errors. Also size seems out of whack for me, but thats my opinion. Also the story seems to be very rushed and weird at some parts, heck I would freak the heck out if I learn I am talking to beings that can move the sun and moon. I suggest going over it before you get to far and not want to do so. Take your time making your chapters, cause a rushed peice of work is not going to last as long as a well made work.

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GMP #18 · Jun 8th, 2014 · · · II ·

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Also be very careful with self inserts, they tend to overglorified themselfs in order to boosts there own ego. Instead of a complex character, we get a super saint that can do everything.

4515513 I'm not trying to self insert, so to speak, but Thaddeus' personality is based off my own, nothing else is similar to me, I'm actually a 14 year old 5'8" high school student. So... yeah... Also, I don't like thinking of Celestia as a normal sized horse, it just makes me think of that story a few years back, where the guy died from fucking a horse. *Shudders* Anyway, onto your last point, he IS NOT going to be a super saint, he is still able to be killed, and who knows, maybe a tragedy tag will work it's way up there.

4515127 Gonna give you the same answer as the others, I don't like thinking of Celestia as a full grown horse, it irks me. Hence why she's shorter then our boy Thaddeus.

4515507 Also, FINALLY SOME CRITICISM!!! :pinkiehappy:

I'm just gonna expand on the height of Celestia. The average height of a horse, from their hooves to their withers (Where the neck meets the back) is 62 inches, or a 157.5 cm. Which is equal to about 5'2". That being said, presuming her head is averaging at 90 degrees, let's just say that gives her... fuck... God damn it, you guys win. But since Thaddeus is 6'5" he at least meets the base of her horn, if we're going off of this chart; cdn.derpiboo.ru/media/BAhbBlsHOgZmSSIB0zIwMTIvMDgvMDMvMDFfMzlfNDBfNTcwXzY1NjAzX19zYWZlX3R3aWxpZ2h0X3NwYXJrbGVfbnVkaXR5X2x5cmFfaHVtYW5faGFuZHNfZmVldF9jbG91ZHNkYWxlX2NvbXBhcmlzb25fY2hhcnRfbHlyYV9oZWFydHN0cmluZ3NfaGVhcnRzdHJpbmdzX2FuYXRvbXlfY2FuX3F1b190X3RlbGxfaWZfcXVlc3Rpb25hYmxlX251ZGl0eV9vcl9qdXN0X3JlZ3VsYXJfaHVtYW5fYW4GOgZFVA/65603__safe_twilight-sparkle_princess-celestia_lyra_human_meta_hands_feet_cloudsdale_comparison_chart_anatomy_size-chart_size_inches.jpg

God damn it you guys. I just wanted to write a story, not be realistic about it... I'm kidding, but I'll go through and make the changes where necessary.

EDIT: I made any changes I saw necessary. Post a comment with the line if you find one I missed.

I was not expecting such a positive (I can't think of the word that should go here.)(The word I was looking for was Response), Thanks guys for supporting me. I was only expecting 20, maybe 30 views, not 270. I love you all! :pinkiehappy:

4508620 I'm thumbing your comment down because you said that. It's an awesome story man, keep it up.

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No tragedy tag! Mkay.

I cut a large chunk of my dignity and threw it in a blender as I used them. I smelt like cake. It is not right for a man to smell like cake.

work in a bakery long enough and you'll start to smell like cake and or what ever else is baked there no matter what you do or do not do

As to the smell, my guess would be poor little tia is getting turned on:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy: Sentient, personal preferance and willing, what more do you need?:rainbowwild:

4555112 I would imagine.

And who knows, maybe it is, maybe it isn't. I guess you'll just have to wait for my procrastinating ass to finish more chapters.

AAW! Poor Wunna:pinkiecrazy: and the tyrade begins in 3... 2... 1

4558199 It was your idea to begin with...

4558624 :rainbowlaugh: I know and I'm also looking forward to how you work through the up coming...... let's go with 'situation'.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy: I can't come up with many that will not end with me not laughing

This will not end well for him. Nevertheless this is gonna be good. :rainbowlaugh:

Oh god why.

Correction. Get the fuck out of existence.

4560235 Yeah, if my dumb ass can accomplish it.

i hate bloody noses they wont ever stop and they mess up my shirt and pants when it drips

How did this slip off of my fave list .-.

Well time to catch back up :D

4646980 Yeah. Beware, crappy rushed story ahead.

Tia gets all freaked out at blood, Luna gets all ticked off.:rainbowhuh: interesting reaction out of Lulu:derpytongue2:

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Yeah. Beware, crappy rushed story ahead.

A sense of rush, yes. As bad as it could be? NO, considering that it wouldn't have taken much for it to have been an okay speed to being to slow as well.

more please:pinkiehappy:

4647341 In reality, I have no idea what I'm going to write in the next chapter, actually that's a lie, message me and I might tell you. But any chapter after that is all freestyle.

Man...if one of them threatens me I would have just bailed.....whew

4656274 I'm perplexed. When did someone threaten who?

Guys. I swear on my life, if you guys don't stop favouriting my stupid story, I'll cancel it.

Good chapter, but you changed from first- to second-person perspective and back again. Be careful and stick to one or the other.

4677046 No fucking way. There is no way you're reading my story. My heart can't handle this. You were one of my earliest role models in this site. Holy shit. And I'll fix that relatively soon.

Comment posted by XxXImmortalFoXxX deleted Jul 13th, 2014
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