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Fullmetal spike97


I have ideas for stories with either crossovers with other shows or non-crossovers, so if you don't know what else to write about then pm or leave a comment and we'll discuss things

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[Displaced] My Name was once Jack now it's Toshiro Hitsugaya.

I was attending an anime convention with my friends when I bought a replica of Captain Hitsugaya's sword, Hyourinmaru, from a shady merchant, and was transported to Equestria before the show began and made it my duty to protect the mane six from danger without them noticing me

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Not the shittiest displaced story out there.

Still a little edgy tho.

I was wondering when a displace Toshiro Hitsugaya might show up you just made my day. :pinkie happy:

"My costume consisting of shinigami black robe, Captain Haori, white socks, straw sandals, sky blue contacts (I have bad eyesight without contacts or glasses) and I dyed my hair white last night and a homemade replica of his sword but it was a bit ugly..."
Show, don't tell. It isn't complicated.

"I'm a closet brony meaning no one knows I like my little pony only my friend and other mlp fans at school)..."
Considering you're on a FiM site, there's no need to give the definition. We have low standards, not low intelligence.

'“I now."...'
Do I even need to say it?

"(Inside of the building)"
There's no reason for this. You're breaking reader immersion to tell us something we'll figure out in the next sentence.

"I instantly felt my eye twitch."
...
This is where I throw in the towel. Bad grammar, spelling, premise, and an OC we've all seen too many times to count.

All in all, not to bad a start. I'll follow and see.

Hey are you going to do a cross over with 'Shinigami In Equestria' story? Have your character meet that displaced and the Hitsugaya from that world. I think a meeting like that would be very interesting.

not bad, if it gets good enough i'll put a like in for ya :twilightsmile:

Are You Using the Blank-Memory Method From "Shinigami in Equestria"?

Either Way Nice to See an Update. Too Soon to say, but when Should We Expect To See Another?

Yaya bleach and my little pony crossover I can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update more soon it getting very interesting to read. :twilightsmile:

It is vary interesting to read keep up a good work update soon :twilightsmile:

Please publish more when you're able to. I need more! Pretty pretty please with sprinkles on top?:twilightsmile:

Not bad, although what are you going to do about Hitsugaya's bankai now that the truth about it is out? Are you going to add it into the story?

Update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update and please hurry

I believe there is a group for editors, can't recall the groups name though. :twilightblush:. Any way, this story seems to be doing quite well, despite the lack of an editor. Heck, I didn't notice any errors, but that is most likely me not knowing of any errors you may have made.

This is awesome, I have been waiting for the next chapter and you have delivered at 120% of what I expected.

Good job man long wait but still pretty good can't wait to see next chapter:twilightsmile:

the end felt rushed but nice chapter nonetheless

You really write your chapters in your phone? and kept it there without a copy? wow, ok i'll bite, anyway, hope you don't abandone the fic, Hitsugaya its my favorite captain too, so good louck with it.

It is an amazing story can't wait to read more.

I'm liking what ive read so far, BUT i will save my upvote until ive seen a few more chapters. This story has potential let's hope it doesn't fall into the stereotype, and if it does lets hope its done entertainingly.

Yes final new chapter I'm very happy with what you write i wounder what will happen next keep up the good work update more on this story soon :twilightsmile:

why he or she not continued the story I am like it the stories?

Luke said that he was going to dress up as Edward Elric from Fullmetal Alchemist, and his twin sister, Lucy, said she was going as Moka from rosario+vampire. Mark is going as Luffy from One Piece, and I was going as Captain Hitsugaya from Bleach. The reason I was going as Hitsugaya was not only was he one of my favorite characters but because I was a little short for someone my age (I'm 17 by the way).

He could have dressed up as Ed then. Especially with how he reacted to his height being mentioned later on! :rainbowlaugh:

I also hope that his tsundere crush will somehow find a way to him in the future! :rainbowkiss:

My, my. Sounds like things are about to get interesting! :yay:

COME ON UPDATE ALREADYI mean if you want to.

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Pinkie will start with the ice puns after the battle.

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i dont think there will be another update from the looks of thinks

Update the story bro. Please. Also if an editor is whats holding you back i can help you out.

I would like some more, when you have the time.

UPDATE THIS FUCKING STORY DAMNIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:twilightangry2::flutterrage:

This story is dead as shit, everybody move along, nothing to see here.

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