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"Yes, your eyeballs will grow back" ~A Proud Father

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Celestia writes one final letter to her student, Twilight Sparkle, with one very important message. Celestia is dying, and Twilight will be the one to take her place.

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Welcome to the Fourth Age.

That was beautiful. I.. I... this was the best story I have read today

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:rainbowwild:

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Thank you, that means a lot:twilightsmile:

Tell me why...
It ain't nothin but a heartache!
Tell me why...!
Ain't nothin but a mistake!
Tell me why,
I never wanna hear you say-
I WANT IT THAAAAT WAY
:trollestia:

"I was born eons ago. For 1,000 years I've ruled as Equestria's ruler. But for all these years I have never been the ruler of my own dreams. I have seen the Gates of Tartarus, beyond which no waking eye may see. Behold, in Darkness a Doom sweeps the land. This is the 27th of Last Steed; the Year of Faust 433. These are the closing days of this era, and the final hours of my life." < My immediate thought... (Did I just?...)

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Hell yeah!:yay:
Somepony caught the reference:rainbowwild:

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No:twilightangry2:
No boy-bands allowed:flutterrage:
(:trollestia:)

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: that. was......:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftleft:..............AMAZING!!!!!! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::raritystarry::raritystarry::twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish:

Very good story, marvelous and critique in detailing the Princesses inner feelings towards the lost Twilight. While this piece was a great haul and an off-key moment for you during your sleep deprived state, it shall be remembered (at least by me) as a more modest and unique structure in your on-going legacy as a writer on both life and fanfiction.

That was my review right there and the final score is; 4.5/5

Luz

I love this story, it's so magnificent. Have my like and fav, 'yo :moustache:

Also, noticed this on the description:

Tiwilight Sparkle

Might wanna fix that out. Again, pretty nice! I love it!

Oh god the feels, they are escaping through my eyes, one day they may, BUT THAT IS NOT THIS DAY.
But seriously, good story, gave me feels.
Edit: Writing.

Magnificent story!:fluttercry:

Celestia should have read a few fanfics before leaving Twilight alone to, well, lonelyness. Then again at least she told her up front what await her which is more than can be said about 90% of the other stories. Btw shouldnt Luna have at least like 1000 years left because of the time she spent on the moon? And if thats not the case and she's as old as Celestia then why is she the "little" sister?

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In Celestia's perspective, a few centuries is soon.

3739473 Well, I guess^^ Eternity does that to ponies^^

i just... I just cant keep the tears in :fluttercry:

oh god i'm crying now :raritycry:

just.. you have written such a lovely story... I just cant explain it!

I definitely feel for twilight... poor her :applecry:

if you will excuse me... I've go some serious crying to do...

thankyou so much for such a lovely story.... it makes me so emotional.

I just cant explain how much I can relate to this story... thankyou so much... you've given me a brighter perspective of things...

again... thankyou so much. :twilightsmile:

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Wow. You're very welcome. I'm glad you liked it:twilightsmile:

3753244 im just glad you wrote the story!

im still crying! my emotions seem to have taken over me!

do you mind if I take some inspiration? I'm thinking of making a short story of when twilight writes celestia a letter before she dies... but don't worry, it will different from this :pinkiehappy:
I'll put you in the description and in the authors note, I just wanted to see if you were ok with it first.
its ok if you say no... ill completely understand

-Planetaria

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I have no problem with that. I'm actually quite flattered that you're using my story as inspiration:scootangel:

3790790 THANKYOU!!!! im so happy! :twilightsmile:

ill be posting it soon since I already half wrote before you approved it!

ill let you know when its done! :twilightblush:

~Planetaria

The review is up, Here is the link!

Thanks for making me tear up. lol Its an awesome story

Congrats, your story is the first to go into the ~~*MASTERPIECE*~~ folder!:pinkiehappy::rainbowwild::derpytongue2:

A great story.

Okay, I liked the set up for this and I loved the letter that was written by Celestia. I've seen this story come up many, many times, but this one I felt was one of the better ones. The letter was very well done and it showed how kind Celestia was and always had been. I loved that you told of the relationship between Celestia and Twilight evolving into something more than teacher and student. I thought that this is exactly the kind of farewell letter a mother would leave her child. Something that conveys how truly proud they are and something to remind them when they doubt themselves, which I'm sure Twilight would.

I liked the ending with Twilight. It would have been so easy for her to be distraught by grief and I don't know, take her life or something. It is so nice that Twilight is able to move on. I mean, she's still hurting, but she's dealing with it. She's living her life. She's trying to be a good ruler for her ponies. She's trying to be the best that she can be. Again, it would have been so easy for it to be a tragedy where Twilight takes her life and I'm really, really glad it didn't go that route. It shows just how strong the character is and how precious life is to this character and how precious life s to live for this character.

A great story. A short, sweet, cute story. I wouldn't have added anything. I wouldn't have taken anything away. Great work. I can't wait to see more from you and I'll catch you later. Take care. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. Also thanks for the fav:scootangel:
I am planning to make this the first story in a trilogy, so I hope you come back to read those stories, and that you'll enjoy them just as much:twilightsmile:

3846543 I'll keep my eyes open for them. :pinkiehappy:

This was a nice little story. Celestia's voice felt a little bit OOC in the first few chapters, but she soon came back into something that sounded much more like her. I won't comment too much on the feels of it, because even though I read Dark and Romance for the emotions they pull up, Sad/Tragedy never really hit me like they do for some others.

Also, upvote despite my dislike of the Momlestia interpretation.

Not bad. Not bad at all. This wasn't schmaltzy or sappy. Sad, but not melodramatic. It had heart and soul, two things that every kind of story needs for it to hold my attention. This has earned an upvote and a watch.

Awesome story. I enjoyed this a lot.

Celestia died as she lived: dumping an enormous task on Twilight with neither warning nor information.

It's not terribly kind to the departed, but if I were Twilight, I'd feel just a tiny bit hurt that my mentor had plotted out my entire life without bothering to ask or even tell me about it. There's a specially hurtful lack of trust that Celestia knew this was coming and made plans, but specifically excluded Twilight from having any say or knowledge about them. "I told Luna everything you need to know. I could have spoken with you personally, but I assumed that you would have no worthwhile input." Celestia shows every sign of desiring to continue to pull Twilight's strings from beyond the grave for as long as possible by denying her preparation time and information, leaving her little choice but to follow her mentor's predetermined plan.

She writes of love and admiration and pride and trust in her student, but she simply can't let go of her role as Chessmaster or give up any control even in the face of death. It's sad that she couldn't bring herself to have the kind of faith in Twilight that her student always had in her.

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I take it you are displeased with the story?:unsuresweetie:

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On the contrary, no. It's a wonderfully written letter, full of heartfelt sentiment. I'm merely reading between the lines to see Celestia's actions in this fic as opposed to her words.

I'm not necessarily trying to paint Celestia as cold or heartless. She's guided Twilight - and possibly othere - for so long by exactly the methods described in the letter that she may see what she's doing as normal or even caring. If Twilight never challenges this behavior, her final interaction with her mentor may well be wholesale manipulation delivered as a fait accompli.

I guess I'm displeased with the methodology Celestia employs, but not you or your fic. Heck this wasn't even the first fic I'd read the same day that involved Celestia dumping her crown on her student from her deathbed without warning despite knowing far in advance. So, in case I've managed to imply something else, good work!

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Thank you and thank you for the fave:twilightsmile:

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"(I) I am the one (the one)
Who lost control (control)
But in the end I'll be the
Last man standing.
(I) I am the one (the one)
Who sold his soul (his soul)
Forever gone to be the
Last man standing."

HammerFall - Last Man Standing

Spotted a few grammar errors, but I still shed a tear, so I'll let that slide.

DAMN. It's wonderful, especially with music playing that serves to amplify the mood...:pinkiesad2:

I think it was it beautiful, but I' dash it's a 9/10

Dash is supposed to be deemed btw

6414065 oh, it was in the "masterpiece" folder of this group, and that was the a BIG stupid autocorrect.:twilightblush: hehe, sorry:trollestia:

Nicely done! But the feels! :fluttershyouch:

This truly made us think, thank you!:pinkiehappy:

*feels.exe has stopped responding* Wha...

Nice one shot, though I do wonder what happens next?

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What is this The Ugly Barnicle?

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