• Member Since 27th Jun, 2013
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FinnPony


A writer from Finland. Don't know if there's anything else to add really.

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Pokey Pierce, a unicorn stallion with unique horn. He likes to pop balloons with it, and he enjoys it so much that he even got his cutie mark by doing it!
An accident happens in one of Pinkie Pie's parties. Pinkie says something she shouldn't have said, making Pokey's self-esteem drop.

Pinkie Pie finds out about it, and feels quilt by what she had done. She goes to cheer up Pokey, and they become friends. Years go by, and their relationship starts to get a whole new shape..

Thank you Jmaster, for proofreading my story.

Cover art by Mn27 on deviantART

Chapters (11)
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Comments ( 93 )

Eh. Not terrible. I enjoyed the plot, but the pacing was a bit muddy and the first chapter somewhat meandered around through past and present, subplot to subplot, and character to character in a way that felt somewhat awkward. The biggest problem, however, is the grammar. You need a prereader. As in NEED a prereader. I can try, if you want, but it will likely take me anywhere from a few days to a few weeks between chapters.

I like this story a lot, and you should pursue this story! (You also might want to pursue an editor :pinkiesmile:just say in') very good chap otherwise :moustache:

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Thanks. I'm looking around for a proofreader right now actually.

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Yeah.. Like I said in the author's note in the second chapter, I didn't quite like the first chapter either. I was just too lazy to start writing it again.
Now I have clear idea of how things will go. I'll continue writing after I find a proofreader.

3586689 One more thing: the title sounds like the title of a clop.

Alright folks. I have found couple of proofreaders who have agreed to help me with my story (I'm more than grateful to them). I plan to revisit two first chapters with them, and then post my third chapter. I'm not sure how long it will take, but I promise that there will be much more coming for this story.
Currently writing fourth chapter.

And thanks to everyone who has favorited or liked this story. :heart: :heart: :heart:

Feely feels. That was so sad. :pinkiesad2:

Oh God why so many feels of sadness :'(

i don't know what it is but i really like this paring. can't wait to read some more chapters.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Hope you write more!!

Eeeeyyyyyhhhh, look at Caramel! Aint he just one smmmooooottthh muthafucka!:ajsmug:

so sad for Pokey... I love it!

This story is getting GOOD. Keep it up :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks everybody. :heart: I will be updating soon. I hope to get the new chapter out before next Thursday.

3586689 I would be glad to take, the position, if it hasn't been filled!

Why u make me cry man. :raritycry::raritydespair::fluttercry::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::fluttershysad::pinkiesad2:

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Sorry.. I didn't mean to... :fluttershysad:

*Sighs deeply*
It seems that my timetable with this story isn't going as I planned. Sorry for the long wait between chapters.

That was fun to read. :pinkiehappy: Great job. I can't wait to see what is going to happen to those two. Great idea with a prank in mind, that is so Pinkie Pie.

I Like the picture you drew its not bad its better than what I can draw

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Thanks :twilightsmile:

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Glad you liked it. I'm going to start wrapping up this story now. I pretty much have it all planned, so I can start working with my princess fics right after I get this one done.

Awwwwwww! That was really great what Pokey did. Great chapter and full of feels. :pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy:

THE FEEEEEEEEELLLLLLSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!! It hurts so bad

Aaaaasahhhhh!!!!!!!!!! It's too much! the FEEEEEEEEELS!!!
i wish pokey was canon now. he is just too awesome!

Chapters 6 and 7 are ready and waiting to be proofread. I'll be posting them soon!

Nice chapter. I like how you had the relationship mature and Pokey stood up for Pinkie. Suggestion though. Have a chapter for their marriage or engagement and maybe future children, but I 'm bias. Best of luck.

YAY god chapter man, I love it bro its great I hope you make the next chapter as good as you did the rest.

Sorry, I really like and really dislike this chapter. On one hoof, comedy, story and personal reactions was perfect as usual... but on the other end, I have a hard time believing that AJ, RD and Rarity are all idiots about colts. One or two of them maybe... I just think that AJ for example would be more on the ground then the other 2. Oh anyway, I don't think I have to worry about that to much since you put out another chapter today and I can read it now as well.:pinkiecrazy:

And here it was. This is something I love about this story: The author understands that there don't have to be tons of dialog to make a story work. You can just have a few spots of talk, explain quickly the emotion of the characters and then with the rest explain the action and surrounding of the plot to let the reader picture what happens in their head. In short: ya are a damn fine writer! I wish I had your talent to implement in my own story I'm currently writing right now

I hop I get to see a new chapter soon. Keep making great stuff and keep being awesome!:pinkiehappy:

Oh and btw... PINKIES THE BEST PONY!:pinkiecrazy:

ooh sexy discretion shot. Stuff be happening :pinkiehappy: Great chapter.

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*blushes* You're flattering me... :twilightsmile:
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About AJ and RD, they're both... you know... fillyfoolers in my stories, so I thought that they would be the ones to give Pinkie some bad pieces of advice about stallions to Pinkie (And Rarity's just Rarity).

3837351 I only flatter those who deserves it.

And I guessed that was the case. Like I said, I still really like the chapter. The great thing about this fandom is that you can really created your own stories and expand the characters the way you want.

AJ and RD aren't the main focus of the story, so I wasn't a so bothered with it. It was really a minor nickpick and I made it sound harder then I intended to. The way you made them act made the emotional part of your story go forward, and thats all that matter, right.

Exept my apologis for being a snobby critic and not judging the story in the proper way: as a pony loving reader.

I love your story and I'm actually a little sad that it ends soon.

Amazing Chapter! :pinkiehappy:

Fantastic chapter! I wouldn't mind if the next chapter does have some more action between Pokey and Pinkie! I look forward to whatever you come up with and here is a video for all of your efforts! :heart:

OMG... to... much... sweetness...oh no... it's coming...

THE FEELS!!!

Haha, all joking aside, it was a very nice, sweet and fantastic chapter! Please, do not let me wait to long for the next one... please?... for the feels!?:raritystarry:

Nice chapter man can't wait till the next chapter man Great job

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Thanks!
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Don't worry. I've had some good days now, and I'm writing with rather good speed at the moment, (About 1k words today) and I have a clear idea of how things will go so it won't take long before new and sadly for the last update. :fluttercry:

3907053 No... no no no no... NO. Really? The last one? But... but the feels... this is my favorite Pinkie romantic story! No more Pokey?... But... but... it's not fair.... I want more. I mean... you have the proposal... and they will get their own place... then the wedding... then they will have kids... and they will get old together! It's... it's not fair. I love this story. I don't want it to end! I'm... sorry, I have to go and shower my manliness away now :applecry:

3907095 I'm in agreement here. But I can't wait for the proposal. It was funny when the girls realized what the two were doing upstairs. I liked this story. One of the best. Best of luck with the final chapter and future stories to come.

POOOOOOOKEY!!!!! Will he appear again? Maybe? Please? In another story perhaps? :fluttercry:

Great job here. I would suggest that I know what the last chapter will entail. Depending on the outcome I hope the the Mane 6 apoligize to Pinkie, Based upon what you described, Pokey and Pinkie did in fact "do it" I'll probably make an expanded chapter for myself if that's okay :pinkiehappy:

Popping her balloons

Sounds like a name of a clopfic :twilightoops:

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I known... Maybe I'll change it someday, or not. Who knows?

Dan

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Balloons actually aren't an uncommon fetish.

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