Dawnstar, Princess Luna's son and heir to her night, isn't too happy about being part of the royal family; not because of the responsibilities that comes from it. No, it's because every time he decides to look for a special somepony it turns to be a run for power or wealth. After his mother convinces him to go to Ponyville to relax and center himself; Dawnstar finds himself talking to a gorgeous mare who may seem to be the one he's looking for.
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Pretty nice so far. Putting it in my Read Later for now. Hope to see more :3
I really like this so far.
I like it and blueblood is a dick face here and dawn seems like a gentleman to rose and it seems like it is still going to be a good read glad I faved it when I first saw it
Not a bad chap my friend, I what to see where this is going
Cool chapter, and blueblood is a dick like always, but cool none the less can't wait for the next one
Damn, I like where this is going, hope we get to see Dawn kick some flank, and good use of the skyrim music their it really made me more focused on the story, just like in the game. Good job man keep up this great story man.
-Emerald Knight
Yes, Yes, Yes. LOVE THIS CHAPTER!!!!!! can't wait for the next chapter man keep it up man
Dude, can't wait for more, its hitting a climax point and I can't wait for more its getting awesome can't wait for more
is that blood I'm I'm starting smell
Good story. Creative OC. You have great potential as a writer.
Nice man its was awesome man can't wait for more
Well, it's a bit... formulaic.
The heroic Alicorn OC (surprised you haven't gotten much backlash for that), villainous Blueblood (though I'll give you props for using him in what was at least somewhat believable), the backstabbing, the fights... villain begging for his life, then turning around to backstab again, the hero slashing out and killing with newfound moral justification (because of said backstabbing)...
I must admit I began jumping ahead at times. It didn't really draw me in, you see.
So, I'm simply going to abstain from voting. It definitely doesn't deserve a downvote (that you got any is a shame), but I can't really upvote it either.
I hope this won't sound too much like an attack; it's not meant to be one.
Best of luck!
Nice man glad to see blueblood got his in the end, and I feel like Waxer is from star wars, I remember a clone called that
4481374 That's pretty much how I came up with his character. There was going to be a chapter dedicated to explaining his role, but obviously I ended up scraping it.
4478812 I'd rather have an honest comment than a down vote and an attack. Thanks, it helps a lot.
4482528 Well I knew something in a story for once in my life, and he was one of my fav clones in any of the star wars movies or TV shows
I'm going to guess that you didn't mean to use the enter key where you did.
You have certainly caught my interest with this prologue, I will read more.