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Hyper Atomic


Scientist, Student, and Storyteller. If I've written something that made you smile, that's good enough for me.

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Everyone has done it at some time. Made that wish upon a falling star, or otherwise gazed longingly with hope into the night sky. Though maybe, we've just been doing it at the wrong time.

Maxwell is a physicist, on his way to finally having his Ph.D, and getting tired of the seemingly minimal impact his work will have in the field as a whole.

That is, until he makes his wish.

Now he's in a bright world full of bright ponies. Also they can talk. And do magic. And fly.

Having hooves is going to take some getting used to.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 224 )

the possibilities makes this worth the following for now

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:pinkiegasp: Wasn't expecting comments so soon! I hope further chapters keep you entertained. Thanks for reading!

Interesting start, and fairly well written. You just have to watch your tenses, you switch from past to present a bit after you introduce the MC.

I really enjoyed the description of the dying star.

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Ahh yes, Tenses, my old enemy...

Thanks! That means it's been far too long since I've written anything, and I'm glad you liked the star. :pinkiehappy:

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I'm sorry, but I'm not sure what type of "Blackstar" you are referring to. :applejackunsure: Is it something specific or just the old idea of a star whose surface has fallen below its Schwarzschild radius and no longer emits light? Like a black hole, but not a singularity?

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Ahh! Thanks for clearing that up for me. And that is a nice looking picture. :coolphoto:

Awesome story, liking it very much so far!! I'll favorite this for sure!! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! :twilightsheepish:
I'm glad you're enjoying it. It's my first and I haven't written anything else in years.

Scientific guy in the land of the magical talking ponies....:pinkiecrazy:

3094918 You're a darn good writer, that's for sure :) I'm liking the concept of this Supernova, not many stories "blend" well when mixing science with magic, but you pulled it off very, very well :D

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Thanks!

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Yeah, understanding why something shouldn't be possible just makes it worse! :raritydespair:

pinkie: Anybody else hear something shatter?

:rainbowlaugh:

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Sanity is such a fragile thing, when bereft of the protection of ignorance. :moustache:

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:
What amazing timing! Just as I published the next chapter.

Comment posted by Synonym Toast Crunch deleted Aug 25th, 2013

oh my Celstia, im sorry.
i was reading a plane story and i thought i was reading it first...

forgiveness?:fluttershysad:
plz?:fluttercry:

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This is the
WORST.
POSSIBLE.
THING! :raritydespair:

Seriously though, don't worry about it. You can delete your comment if it bothers you. :twilightsmile:

Off to a great start so far I hope you keep it up! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks. :twilightsmile: I wasn't sure what I wanted to do with it for a while, but the hubble always makes for great photos.

you got to do, what you got to do to keep a hold of yourself.. I guess

Nice chapter, looking forward to the laughs from the upcoming chapter

Oh how it pains me to reach the end of the newest chapter of a great story... :applecry:

Eagerly awaiting next chapter!!!! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks! I'll do my best. :raritywink:

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Surety of self is the most fundamental. Without it, where would we be?
Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:

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:twilightblush: It can't be great yet! I've only just started!

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Thank you! You can bet I will. :twilightsmile:

I do have one question for any readers: Is it actually funny? :applejackunsure: I seem chronically unable to laugh at my own jokes, and I've been so nervous about living up to the comedy tag.

Good job probs one of the best really funny can't hold down the.excitement for the rest

“Dr. Trotson,” I mumbled through the floor, “I think I found that concussion.”

:rainbowlaugh:you don't say?:rainbowlaugh::pinkiecrazy:

loved the update

Dam, I love this story. I wish there was a little more meat to the chapters. You could add a bit more to them, but for the most part you are doing a awesome job.

Keep up the good work and stay awesome! :rainbowdetermined2:

~Lightfox Lowell

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:heart:

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:twilightblush: Thanks! And I agree with you that the chapters could be longer, I'm just not the fastest writer. I tend to do most of my editing in the moment rather than on multiple passes, so each line is a challenge to get it how I like it. If people would prefer the chapters to be more substantial, I can try, it would just slow down the frequency of updates.

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:pinkiehappy: Yeah!

GMP

Very good story so far, I have read it from the beggining to this chapter and so far I am impressed. Yes it is cliche and done before, but I like to see veriations and see what people can do with that. The main character was made very well in which it did not feel that he was a one minded character. The progression of the story is smooth and easy to understand as well as a very enjoying experience. Though I do hope you make the chapters bigger, at least 3000 to 10000 that way it be easier to get into the story, to many short chapters can really break up the experience. So keep it to that if possible. Overall I love this story and cant wait for more.

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Thank you for the critique! :twilightsmile: If all goes according to plan, the next chapter should have a bit more length to it. I'm glad you're enjoying it! :pinkiehappy:

Interresting so far.

Usually a human turned pony is shit, plain and simple. The MC don't care, and is already able to move, talk, use magic/fly or interract with anything or anyone a few minutes after the transformation.

But YOU managed to describe the feeling of having an alien body, with a new set of members ( the wings ), how weird is it to have a set of mobiles ears or how illogics and intriguing is it to be able to grab objects without digits. And very few authors bothers doing that, wich is a shame, because it's a good world building/characters interractions material.

My main complaint is what GMP said :

Though I do hope you make the chapters bigger, at least 3000 to 10000 that way it be easier to get into the story, to many short chapters can really break up the experience. So keep it to that if possible.

I fully agree with him, your chapters are way too short to really feel immerged in the story, but overall it's a pleasant story so far.

You know you've done something right when the reader whispers "Brilliant" to himself while wearing the widest grin he can muster. I love it, sorry I can't offer a more critical analysis.

Very nice so far. Definitely an original concept for an HiE, the scientist turned pony. I'm loving the way he is trying to analyze EVERYTHING! Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

3173450all considered though doing pretty good to keep the story both excellent AND moving along at a nice pace if somewhat slow, I'll take it

“That mare is either not planning on sleeping tonight, or is really good at what she does. I think I'd bet on the latter.”

considering he's talking about Twilight, I'd bet on both A) AND B):rainbowlaugh:

I tightened my grip, willing my nonexistent fingers into action. The cup closed the gap and I smiled. Whatever muscle group I was flexing was directly responsible for the field. I wonder how far this effect extends?

and so he ends up being one of the few pegasi to be able to actively manipulate their magic, past flying, and cloud manipulation

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:twilightsheepish: Thanks! I'm just trying to have Maxwell follow a thread of logic that makes sense, with respect to reactions/expectations. I am going to work on increasing the chapter sizes too, immersion is very important for an engaging story, after all.

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The fact that you smiled, makes me smile. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading!

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Everyone has their own coping mechanism, though perhaps one that doesn't lead to more trouble would have been nice. :twilightoops: Hehehe, Thanks! :raritywink:

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Yeah, he doesn't know her very well, does he? :ajsmug:

and so he ends up being one of the few pegasi to be able to actively manipulate their magic, past flying, and cloud manipulation

Maybe! But don't you mean their 'inherent radiative attractive field muscles'? :trollestia:

...and now my mind is stuck on the possible use of balloons to get earth ponies 'in position' with pegasi. Thank you Hyper Atomic, I'd never thought about such a possibility before. I don't know how I was able to live without such a concept rattling in my brain.

In other news, very good story, thanks for the read.:twilightsmile:

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Sounds like someone's got their head in the clouds. :trollestia:



ohmygod that was so bad...:facehoof:
ANYWAY! Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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