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I am an pretty filly.

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After another stunt gone wrong, Rainbow finds herself cooped up in a hospital room again. But when she ends up getting roomed with a nine-year-old colt, her stay at Ponyville General takes a turn that's worth just a little more than reading a book about an archaeologist.

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Oh my god. This is definitely the best story I've read in a long time! Even though it didn't make me cry it got really emotional towards the end.:heart:

this is a great story and it makes you see just h ow much you should appreciate the life that you have.

:fluttercry: damn, I want more

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HI again bro!!!

2941931 Seriously?

Read this!!!

2941937
I will, just not quite yet. There is other stuff on my list to read.

2941949 read it now or I will hurt you :rainbowdetermined2:

2941988 :ajbemused: I wil find you and I will kill you

I actually started on a book based off of this video a while ago, should i finish it and post it though? this kind of makes me upset. :ajsleepy:
As soon as lightning said ice cream my eyes watered. I know they're not your words, but thanks for making this.

I gotten a copy of this and I will review it in the next few days
here's a link to my page
https://www.facebook.com/pages/Slash-wing-my-little-pony-FIM/339895572794546?ref=hl

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That's because this story is inspired by The Crickets Have Arthritis. I reference it multiple times. I'd like to believe I did Shane justice with this, but it's a good catch and it's nice to see another fan of his. The poem has done a lot for me and I personally believe it is one of the best things ever written. It matters more even so that it is a true story.

Edit: I'm going to add a video of the studio version, the one you posted is done live and not as clean as this one.

Bloody hell... I think my heart just died.
This has to be the most emotional thing that I have read on the site in a very long time.
Congratulation you have brought tears to my eyes.

I feel like you jut sucker-punched me in the feels just by writing this.
That's a good thing.
No.
Seriously.
Instant fave.
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God

That ending. You know, it wasn't too long ago I realized that children facing death are some of the most mind numbingly greatest examples of bravery and courage ever. Liker, ever ever. There's just something in their stories that you can't really grasp; something those kids have that no one else seems to but you don't know where it comes from, and you want to say it's just because they're a kid, that's what makes them different, but that's not really it. I don't know. I loved this story, LUC, and I think it's one of the best things you've written. That last line really got me, and I wanted to be Dash so bad and just follow that kid wherever they took him. I listened to the actual piece/poem this was based off of, and I'm glad you switched the ending around--that it was Lightning who left, not Dash. The reason being it would've forced Dash to break her promise that she would never leave him, and even though lightning leaving her still kinda breaks it, it doesn't really and so it's better. I'll be honest, and say that it took a bit for Lightning to really grow on me. Like, even though he was, part of me still didn't like him. I guess a part of him just felt, I don't know, fake. Until the scene where Dash overhears the doctors, and then when she talks to Lightning about it and he opens up to her--I just wanted to save him. The doctors came to move him, and all I wanted was to save him. And the story ended.

Great job, LUC.

I will admit, I kinda want a Steady HoovesxRainbow Dash fic now haha. I demand it. There's only one other fic that had an OC who I wanted to see shipped with somepony (another OC, as it turns out), and it never happened. Dangit, this isn't happening twice. Write that ship fic!

I would demand in that fic you find a way to save Lightning--but I won't. Because I know that's not what happens in real life. Not always, anyways. And it sucks.

I was also kinda peeved the whole time that none of the other mane six ever showed up. I mean, I get why, from a story telling standpoint; they would've interfered, and Rainbow needed to write her letter. But still...jerks.

OH, and also:

Baltimare saltwater taffy.

:rainbowkiss:

This story did not make me cry, but only because I knew Lightning would tease me if I cried. :rainbowdetermined2:

So I didn't.

For him.

The hospital was truly bigger on the inside than it was on the outside.

The Hospital is a Tardis! Who is/are the Time Lord(s) there?

You actually changed my perspective of life and that's a hard thing to do. Your story was beautiful and as much as I would like to comment the most awe-inspiring comment ever, I can't. I could think of a thousand word comment in reply to your story about the meaning of life, lightnings bravery, how you changed my view on he world, but I can't. I can think it but I can't turn it into words. My thoughts have beautiful paragraphs and amazing ways to say this was amazing, but my words will never express that beauty. You did an amazing job on this story and I found its message to be moving. Author, you have a talent. A talent I will never know. You have the talent to turn words into something beautiful. A well written masterpiece. You have moved me and you have made me recall the times I went to the hospital and the people I met there. And for that author, I thank you.

all my feels...
this is probably the best fic i've read in months. that ending...
really good job to you, mister writer. i must say i let some liquid pride flow on this one.
you have earned my fav and like. i wish i could like multiple times

That was beautiful. Thank you. :pinkiesad2: :heart: :fluttershysad:

Amazing story mate,:heart:

So much liquid pride :heart: Brilliant story mate:heart::heart::heart::fluttercry:

I feel really......embarrassed about this, but I don't get that last line. Something I'm missing? Somepony explain to me please?

That was amazing! The best story I've read in a while :D

This is the closest any story has had me to shedding a tear. Bravo.

That ending was a masterpiece. I can easily say this is one of the best fics i've read on this site. Fantastic job!

Hmmmm.....I wonder if this half-sister Steady mentioned has taken to wearing an eye-patch.

It's not frequently that a story makes me reflect on life, but when I finished this one, I had to take a walk around my apartment to gather my thoughts. This strikes a particularly personal cord, as two of my closest friends (unrelated) both recently found out that they're going to lose their only remaining parent soon.

There's a lot I could focus on, but what sticks in my mind most is how engaging Lightning is as a character. He's abrasive, but goofy; annoying, but charming; kleptomaniacal, but only because of taffy. (And not just any taffy, but Baltimare salt water taffy!) He's ... a kid. A very well-rounded, very believable kid--and, hell, I like him. Rainbow likes him well enough too, even after only three days, and towards the end you really feel how hurt she is that he's leaving her.

This is one of the better stories I've read on this subject in a long while, and it certainly earned its spot on Equestria Daily.

I... I don't have words. I'd have to be just as good as Shane to have them. This is one of the best stories I've read in a long time. It made my emotions run from one end to the other, from laughing, to near tears, to cheering Rainbow and Steads on (that was kinda adorable and stuff). I'd be begging for a sequel if I didn't know that the story had to end where it did. So... Great story. Now, I'm gonna go watch what this is based on and try to keep myself from crying. Have a follow and a fave.

Well. That was... Goddamn.

Well done, dude. Just... Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

...I don't even know what to say. The words "Moved" and "Touched" just don't cut it. Not by a longshot. :fluttercry:

I have a personal Hall of Fame folder for Pony fanfiction where I put the most amazing, funny, and impactful pieces I have read. It's mostly filled with comedic stories, and shipping, and adventure. There is very little sad in there. I usually avoid sad, because if I read pony fanfiction, I want it to make me feel better, not worse. This story is the first sad story that made it into the folder, and it might change the way I look at sad fiction in the future.

You just made a literally (and I mean truly) emotionless person almost cry.

Good job.

And with this...my mind, my heart, and indeed my very soul cried out to the characters in this tale. Very well done, and nothing and no one will ever tell me different. You, have made me cry, made me smile, and give me crushing and elated feels all at once. I love good Rainbow Dash fics...and pall, you delivered in a way that makes me proud to be a Brony.

Again, well done, keep it up and never stop being awesome.

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I might be wrong about this, but there is a fanon idea circulating around that a Pegasus offers their first grown pinion to some they care about deeply. It's mostly used to signify the desire of a romantic relationship, and is an enormous decision on the part of the Pegasus which they rarely take lightly . Here it seems to be used for a sign of incredibly large admiration. Or maybe love as well

Comment posted by Solace Chaostra deleted Aug 30th, 2013

3128558 Thanks! That makes this and several other fics make sense now! :)

This was incredible and my whole day is ruined. XD

But seriously this was perfect. Touching, warm, and just omg perfect.. :pinkiesad2:::fluttercry:

Normally, stories like this simply don't appeal to me for a variety of reasons. However, the incredible characterisation of little Lightning caught my attention and held it. Sometimes, courage is continuing to smile when all around you are weeping. In that criteria, Lightning is probably the bravest pony Rainbow Dash has ever met.

Thank you for sharing this work with us.

This was a really nice read, and a very touching story.
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:fluttercry:

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Beautiful. This story was fucking beautiful.

Was listening to this while reading...

THE FEELS!

First off, great story. Perfectly rounded: Sad. Happy. Hilarious.

The best part?

"I'm gay. Really, really gay. And I can prove it."

Ohmygod I was laughing so hard.

Hnnff. I'm crying. D: I just. That ending. :raritycry: Poor Lightning...

Aaand liquid pride. :fluttercry:

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I don't even know what to write, really, `Fucking Genius`, yeah... thats pretty much all that comes to my mind right now.
I know that a continuation of this story would be pointless since, well, it all explains it self in the story, its fairly obvieous what happens to the little guy and Dash obvieously gets better, but a sequel to this would be so awesome. :raritywink:

Then there's THIS guy. I liked it.

... Words can't even begin to describe how deep that hit me... That was some very powerful writing, and it taught me a very valuable lesson. Enjoy your life, and live it to the fullest, because one day you may not be able to, and like the 9 year old colt in this story,I hope that my life will be filled of happy stories to tell and share. I know this is a true story from a poem, and that hits me so much harder in the feels... Good job man, I'm Impressed :pinkiesad2:
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There are things that we don't want to accept but have to accept
Thing we don't want to know but have to learn
And People we can't live without but have to let go.
~Anon

^the friendship lesson to the princess

Predictable but well written. The ending was a bit of a surprise. I wasn't expecting Lightning to be moved to another room. And once it went there, I was also surprised that there is no mention of Rainbow coming to visit him. He is still in the same hospital, so it would seem likely.

All in all I did enjoy the story, even if it is not my usual fare.

The first one he grew? Is he growing his feathers back?

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