Chapter 8
Zevera – Zebra Capitol City
The smoke and dust was cleared quickly by the wind. Once the United Lands forces had made up their minds to retake the city, there was not much the dragons could do about it. Many did not even try, escaping before the army arrived. The string of UL victories, combined with no communication from Terrorvane, had broken their will to fight.
The Zebrican government officials were able to return to their offices and begin restoration efforts. Rebuilding began, and there was a sense of hope for the future in the air.
There were, however, a few final details to take care of. One last mission was being put together to capture the dragon responsible for the war. Zecora volunteered.
Several dragons who had been interrogated said that Terrorvane was still in the area of Fireholm. The dragon city was located deep in the mountains of the north, and required a long strenuous march to reach.
When the assembly of UL troops entered the city, it looked abandoned. A few dragons who were salvaging what they could kept clear of the UL. Carefully, the area was combed for any sign of Terrorvane. The buildings all stood silent and dark.
Zecora led a group searching dwellings one by one. She bucked open a door and came face to face with the dragon.
Terrorvane had built his empire through intimidation. He could bully others to do his bidding. With his army gone, and facing angry UL troops, he didn’t stand much of a chance.
After a brief scuffle, the dragon was shackled and formally arrested.
“Take him away from here,” Zecora spat. “I hope he is locked up for a thousand years.”
Terrorvane would stand trial in a UL court. No one would pity him.
FOB Friendship
As the UL’s Forward Operating Base on the Zebrican shores was being dismantled, Twilight Sparkle received a letter from Canterlot. As a skilled student of magic, her presence was requested to help prepare the spell to send Wisconsin home.
The base had never been intended to be permanent, and work was going quickly. Twilight decided that she could leave it in the capable hands of her advisors.
Zecora dropped by. The zebra looked tired, but managed to smile. She’d just returned from Fireholm and had been traveling nonstop. Twilight asked if she was coming back to Equestria.
“Perhaps in the coming years, but for now I am needed here.”
Twilight understood. Zebrica was well on its way to rebounding, but there was still a lot of work to be done. She had confidence that creatures like Zecora who had passion and love for their country would do great work. She said goodbye to her friend and made ready to leave.
Teleportation required a lot of magic, and Twilight had never attempted to cross such a large body of water before. Instead, she decided to save her energy and catch a ride home on the battleship.
As it was not necessary to keep pace with the fleet any longer, Wisconsin showed off some of her speed on the return trip. The frothy wake kicked up by her four propellers extended behind the ship for nearly a mile.
A site along the Equestrian coast had been chosen to cast the spell. It was as close to Wisconsin’s point of entry into the world as possible.
A dozen of the unicorn scientists who had worked on discovering the secrets of the anomaly were hard at work preparing the location. Everything had to be just right.
A pony rowboat brought the two Princesses to the ship. Mittal met the two of them on the quarterdeck and invited them aboard.
Celestia spoke. “Captain Mittal, I would like to thank you for your service to Equestria and the United Lands. I consider every human aboard this fine ship to be a friend.”
Twilight said, “Princess, I have something to give them, if that would be all right.” She showed Celestia a small plaque. Affixed to it was the symbol of Equestria, a badge that was decorated with the sun on one half and the moon on the other. An engraved plate displayed the citation.
Celestia nodded. “By all means.”
“What’s this?” asked Mittal.
“I’ve been doing a lot of reading in the ship’s library,” said Twilight. “I know Wisconsin has received awards in the past for service.”
Twilight cleared her throat and read the engraving. “The nation of Equestria presents this commendation to USS Wisconsin for actions during the Zebrican War. Wisconsin came to the aid of United Lands forces on several occasions, displaying great efficiency and effectiveness. The ship refused to yield to attack, and was successful in all missions she was assigned to. Wisconsin’s actions reflect great credit upon the ship, her crew, and the United States of America.”
It was a surprisingly poignant moment for Mittal. He accepted the award on behalf of the ship and promised to display it proudly.
“Are you ready to begin the spell?” Luna asked.
Celestia nodded. “Captain Mittal, we are interested in pursuing diplomatic relations with your country. I have prepared a copy of the details regarding this enchantment.” She gave him a wooden box filled with many sheets of paper. She smiled. “We will await your return.”
The three ponies took the boat back to shore and joined the rest. Mittal went up to the bridge, pausing to put the plaque and box in a safe place. He watched from behind the bridge windows as one by one, the ponies began their magic, bathing the entire area in soft light.
The Equestrian shores faded away and the ship was oceanbound once more. There was going to be a lot of explaining to do, Mittal thought unhappily. He was not looking forward to it, but it could wait for the moment. He lifted the 1MC.
“This is your Commanding Officer. We’re on our way home.”
Author note:
Here we are. I’m still surprised at the extremely positive reaction FIMFiction has had to this story. The praise inspired me to write sixteen thousand words in four days. Funny what fame can do to you.
Thanks to everyone for reading and making my first story a success. I learned a lot about writing fanfiction, and I hope to use these lessons in the future. Yes, I promise to slow down.
I’m going to take a few days off to recharge and work on something new. I had a couple ideas for what to write next:
“Wings of Gold” – Rainbow Dash obtains US citizenship so she can pursue her dream of becoming a military pilot.
“The Truth” – As the Element of Honesty, Applejack knows when people are lying. The CIA wants to hire her to interrogate bad guys.
“My Little Black Hawk Down” – Ponies and Rangers and Delta, oh my!
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Yay!.....A return of the awful Dragons forcing the Ponys of Equestria to Seek the aid of the United States Navy and Britans?
The intro was promising, but it quickly devolved into the military curb stomping the dragons into powder. I thought you were trying to keep things from being to Suey?
Fascination - It's a Battleship. What did you expect?
234341
Trying to, and failing horribly. Sure was fun, though.
I loved reading this story and did'nt go to sleep because of it. Funny what a good story can do to you.
Anyway, I can't decide between Wings of Gold & The Truth
234366
There's always next time. Or you could tear into this one and see what you can do. 
Actually, the helicopter got much more action than the battleship. But wouldn't you think the dragons would have put up some fight? This was a flawless victory here, I haven't seen a single human casualty. But, at least there's effort in here. It has more potential here than most of the other bad fics around here. Not MPPT3K material, but it isn't something I would read again either.
234447
I just stole names from Hlissner's map of the world
Or you could have the Blue Angels come to Ponyville and give the Wonderbolts a run for there money.
is it weird that this made me giggle like a little colt?
otherwise, absolutely amazing.
but it was good
kind of a quick ending
honestly, i hope you make a sequel to this.
234542 why did you post the same comment 3 times?
234542 why did you post the same comment 3 times?
I rather enjoyed this story. It was really rushed in places but still a fun read.
Nice. Is this complete?
“My Little Black Hawk Down”
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make it happen... um ... if that is ok with you?
234612
Probably the same reason you posted the same thing twice.
>My Little Black Hawk
>My Little F-15
>Nuclear Fission is Magic
>My Little Abrams
Where am I going with this I don't even.
234341
Perhaps that was the goal, but I still had mental images of Terrorvane dropping bricks, and that made me smile. :P
235021
My little A-10A Warthog. Booooooom!
Why not write a little bridging story, after all, battleships don't just vanish off the face of the earth and appear later without some serious questions being asked, write something about how they get back to earth and how they manage to remake contact, no magic on earth remember so the spell's details would be next to impossible for scientists to figure out unless it is all science with some magical aid.
234341
The thing is that the story really couldn't have gone down any other way. A USN ship from any time past WWI would pretty much eat just about everything Equestria can throw at it for breakfast. An Iowa-class battleshp though? The villain could have sent every dragon he had against Wisconsin, and the very worst that could happen is that one of the ship's propellers could have gotten jammed on one of the hundreds of dragon corpses filling the water afterwards.
Still, a curbstomp being inevitable doesn't mean that it can't be handled well, and unfortunately this wasn't. There just simply wasn't enough description of what was going on at any point. 16,000 words is just not a story, not for this scenario.
235159
Why not write a little bridging story, after all, battleships don't just vanish off the face of the earth and appear later without some serious questions being asked
Another thing I've learned since joining FIMFiction is that commenters are very likely to guess your plans. I will be writing a bridge in order to set the stage for a whole bunch of stories I have planned, a few of which I described in the note at the end.
Write ALL the sequels, as well as Gytrash's bridging story idea!
235021
>Nuclear Fission is Magic
I totally want to rewrite The Hunt For Red October with ponies
My Little Black Hawk Down!
But goddamn, will anyone ever include the amazing Canadian JTF2?
Will there be an epilogue?
Yeah, I would have liked to see more meat to this story, but I liked what was there. Besides, this was kinda how Desert Storm played out, with the Iraqis hardly putting up a fight, right?
By the way, are the stories for the future connected to this universe, now that the US and Equestria will have diplomatic relations? Though Dashie getting citizenship will most likely be an uphill battle, even by US standards, as no doubt the far-right nutjobs will make a huge stink what with her not being human, and how "we'll have to grant citizenship to our pets now!"
Yes, quite enjoyable. A little sad that this story has come to its end but such is life. Best of luck to you in your future stories!
235388 Your acting like more than just a grouch. You're one of those people that only sees mistakes so they can't get a feel for the story as a whole, and that irritates me. Okay, so he's made several mistakes, Great. He is still telling a very interesting story. Yes, he is rushed. But he's just writing as he goes. It's what makes fictions interesting; how a writer thinks on the spot. You irritate me so much because you can't at least see the story for what it is. I understand critique is useful, but that's constructive criticism. What you've said can best be described as destructive.
Sorry for arguing on your comments section totallynotabrony, but great chapter if a bit rushed. Keep up the great work.
>>SovietBacon
Dude, not trying to harsh you or anything but the set of jets and pilots performing aerobatic tricks in the air are called the Blue Angels, not the Blue Angles.
235376
Please do.
An battleship dissapearing like that would drive the military insane, and may even be noted by the press. I would love to see the reactios of US navy admirals to the new badges.
i would love to see a sequel to this...maybe introduce other military hardware, naval, air and land.
otherwise, this was a really fun read. a little light on descriptions, and not much true "conflict", but a good read all the same.
235267 I agree. This did feel very rushed with not too much description of what was going on in between the events. He might have well wrote "And then all the dragons proceeded to die" the second the Wisconsin decided to help the UL.
Don't get me wrong, I still loved this... but it could've been better.
this was good, but the ending could've been better.
235946 Well somebody would make a stink regardless.
i would have prefered a longer story with more detail
but this was still good
and i want pony rangers all the way
that is all
kthanxbai
The ending left a little to be desired, IMO, but I still loved the story and am looking forward to any future stories.
+watch
234840
I agree.
I liked it. I was thinking Final Coundown when I first read it though.
PIE?
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242856
OH MY GOD THAT'S AWESOME
235267
I don't think it would be that cut and dry, at all. People keep seeming to think of ponies as "Tiny horses in Renaissance times and tech", rather than "Tiny horses capable of blistering fast flight, full weather control, and mind destroying spells". I don't know about anyone else, but I don't think a (current day) human army would do too well against an enemy that flies at 100+km/h with insane agility (And half the size of a human) that can drop tornado's, blizzards, zero visibility fog and gale force winds. Or one that can teleport, transmute matter, illusions or cause mass mind disruption.
Not to mention dragon's are as large as a small-medium sized skyscraper, and 4-5 landing on a battleship would probably leave it in ruins. Or if not, at the very least cripple it.
For the story, it felt like it had too much tell, and not enough show. I didn't really like the 'Humans come in and save the poor defenseless ponies' cliche, but that's personal preference. Not enough description, as everything sort of flew by. However, the premise is very interesting, and the contact with human society in the next one sounds even more so.
Wow. That ending quite frankly blew. I'm not saying that to be mean and I hate to sound like a jackass, but this story is in terrible need of some actual drama. I have absolutely no emotional connection to the characters and quite frankly no need too. Why? Well one example would be the marine who got hit by dragon fire and yet wasn't even that hurt. Basically there's no challenges for the heroes to truly overcome. Not one of the heroes is ever truly inconvenienced and the ship itself is never truly threatened. Yes a battleship is a very tough thing to destroy and likely anything the dragons could do directly wouldn't phase it. However several multi-ton boulders being dropped by full grown dragons flying at their flight ceiling would do some serious damage. A dragon could have handicapped the ships targeting and forced the to rely on information from pegasus if it had eaten the UAV. One of the things that people mentioned time and time again is it is rushed. Horrifically rushed. the big dragon behind it all is hunted down within a paragraph and the expected final battle with the king of dragons is brought down to a minor scuffle. So the story with no real drama ends with a severe anti-climax. the only thing I liked about this story is humanity not being portrayed as immense jackasses, but now I kinda wish they did as it'd give them some characterization as most the characters feel kinda flat to me. Anyway that's my two cents.
226593 dude thats bucken awesome ill have to play that while im in the navy
256210 aye i understand what your sayen but why'd ya reference me?
256243
I think because you asked a question about why FoE was mentioned before, and that got me started on my whole rant.
256283 aye the guy was just refuering to the word count really.
256293
sorry about that
256415 its cool i find it interesting with what other pplp have to say
256557
I think you just doubled my wordcount