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Once upon a time, in the magical land of Equestria, there were two regal sisters who ruled together, and created harmony for all the land.
Unfortunately, such a peace could not last forever. A feud arose between the two rulers and the kingdom was divided by more than just boundaries built in soil and on paper.

When Luna became jealous of her sister's glory in the eyes of ponies, she saw what it might lead to, coming to her sister for help. But, when scorned and pushed aside, Luna's jealousy became anger. In a fit of rage, she spirited herself and all of those under her rule, those that would follow, to her domain: The Moon.

A thousand years is a long time, though, to be holding a grudge. And now the means to mend an immortal's bond to her sibling rest in the hooves of one of Luna's subjects: Twilight Sparkle, who must descend from Luna's moon unto Solar Equestria to right a thousand-year-old wrong.


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Chapters (17)
Comments ( 66 )

Intriguing... Please do go on.

(Why are there no Luna emoticons!?!)

2061767 I don't know! Luna is best pony (in my oponyon....) and is greatly unappreciated :P

I wonder what the food is. Moon Fungi so yummy nummy.

Why you cliffhanger me?! :flutterrage: Update again immediately!

Thank you for the quick update! I pushed you once, so I will be nice and wait mostly patiently for the next update at your soonest convenience. :twilightsmile:

Love it! :pinkiehappy: Keep up the good work man! :moustache:

I love how often you update! :heart:

Please don't banish me... I still haven't read all the books in the library!

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: classic Twilight:rainbowlaugh:

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But of course :twilightsmile: Can't have a story featuring Twilight without tossing in a little book obsession. :P

Great update! Very scholarly of our dear Twilight. I can't wait until she meets Celestia! (Hint: I really can't. Update again please)

yay update!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: and now truely the first step has been taken and Twilight once again is given the hard part. there are those that would say that others have done the hard stuff, but really all they did was clear and then point her in the direction of the path

I love bookgasms. They're the BEST. :trollestia:

2095471 Yeah, it's always fun to show that Twilight, deep down, is still that enthusiastic filly that is eager to learn, no matter the AU.

to short:flutterrage: oh well that just leaves us waiting for the next one:fluttercry:

You gonna update again tomorrow mebbe? :duck:

Y u no make longer chapters?

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Because I try to update on a daily basis and with a scene-by-scene pattern. My chapter length is growing in size as I go farther into the story, but I do not force longer chapters.

Daily updates?:pinkiegasp:

Okay. Proceed, good sir.

well, thank you for the update:pinkiesmile: just wish it had been longer:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

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Next chapter should be longer. Keep in mind that some chapters will be shorter than others due to the scene-by-scene style. I may put out a second chapter today, depending on whether or not I can finish it.

I would have expected Twilight to instinctively refer to Applejack as a moon pony, rather than an earth pony.

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Well, in preparation for her journey, she had done some brief research on Equestria before her departure from the moon. And she had time to compile her thoughts before making her report to Luna.

2116989 She still should have instinctively used "moon pony". Even assuming that she would have learned such a tiny detail, old habits are hard to break.

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Possibly, but this was a day or so later when she reported to Luna. Not to mention she'd have a few hours to think about what she was going to tell the Princess in the time before night fell. Instinctively, she probably would have. Out of habit, but my logic seemed alright when I wrote it.

Thanks for updating! Looking forward to the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

hmmmm...... oh I hope they are going to give them a surprise party!
But that is not likely to happen is it?
Oh well then, back to reading......



And Great Fic!! :twilightsheepish:

"I the great and terrible 'marked one' shall calmly follow the directions of a random guard pony... (dead pan evil laugh)"

Yes, very much the actions of a evil hostile pony. Do I detect the presence of high explosives ahead? :pinkiehappy:

Lovely work.

Hmm... I like this. I find it a little odd that you made Twilight a lunar pony, yet left her brother in Equestria, but I don't know what you're planning, so...

Regardless, I'm really liking this alternate universe so far. I'm only hoping you don't have plans for some evil tyrannical empress Celestia or something silly like that. Those stories always bother me...

Keep up the great work!

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*Rubs hooves together diabolically* All in good time, my good reader, all in good time.

But no, not a Tyrantlestia. Like you, I'm not a fan of that warping.

The background history is nice, but yes, I am looking forward to a proper chapter. :twilightsheepish: Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

and this is why when confronted with a "Law Enforcement" officer getting whats coming to them it's best to no see a damned thing, because if you give a helping hand you are SO damned screwed in so many ways

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But... but... that chapter was longer than most of the other ones... :P

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But I want more chapter. See how that works? :pinkiecrazy:

To misquote the Bard;

"Something's rotten in the state of Equestria."

Two Twilight Sparkles? That and something about her Cutie Mark is notable. I doubt it was recognized as Lunar pony, maybe it matches one of the elements in Celestia's possession? And the marks were published, hence the question about living under a rock.

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*winks* You're guessing closer than most, but still wrong on some points. Some of the questions you posed will be answered in the next chapter.

*rereads your comment*

In fact, I think all of them.

well well, whats tia up to? nothing good for the populous obviously

And thus the tension rises. *starts to patiently wait for the next update*

2063939 don't forget the cheese. can't have a proper moon meal without real moon cheese.

cant wait for next chapter can you give me a rough estimate on when it might be up

2344958 Still working on it. Took a short break while working on the first chapter of Neighlander, but will try to balance the two stories equally, when I can. Work takes up the majority of my week, but I try to squeeze in writing when I can. Rough estimate? Hmm... Might be a week. Yeah, somewhere around there.

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