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TAW
Hi, I'm TAW. I write terrible erotic my little pony fan fiction about cartoon horses having sex with each other, or vaguely defined human audience-inserts, for fun. Because... uh. I have no shame?
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>implying Daring Do isn't a Mary Sue
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Hey now, Daring Do is a protagonist in a series of adventure novels, she's allowed to be off-the-wall awesome!
Not bad. Please, continue writing this. I look forward to seeing more of it.
I think imma keep this tracked until its complete :O
Can't wait for it to be done though
this is great, but 2 things...
1) whats the point of using a pen name if your self insertion character has your real name...
2) you had a fishing rod set up by their camp... ponies are herbivorous creatures and therefore can't digest fish, therefore have no need for a fishing rod
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Dash considers herself famous enough that it's plausable somebody else would write fanfiction about her. Nobody else does, but Dash does. And the fishing rod is useful in constructing makeshift camps.
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You're a mary sue, dick.
It's a great start, but do you think you could italicize the passages that are part of Dash's fic? It would make it less confusing to read.
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Thanks for making Dash's story in italics, that really makes it nicer to read
...don't stop.
Oohh I can't wait for Twilight to edit her work! Imagine that, having to change the wording of a clopfic written by your friend.
Why do I want chocolate now...?
Great, now I'm horny and hungry.
I like where this is going. *waggles eyebrows*
Dude, best story EVER. I love it. It's so amazingly absurd!
:megusta:
Honestly, Rainbow. Constantly trying to turn this into a clopfic. That is not proper etiquette for a young lady.
Why can't I be a Rainbow Dash
Why
Yup, this is a pony fanfic.
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None of us are cool enough to be Dash. None of us.
and hey, Twilight hasn't said yes yet!
And then we read this fanfiction only slightly edited.
I came for a hilarious clop and got a touching rejection scene. What the hell is right with this world?
OMG this is so awesome lol I'm purposely sounding stupid right now I'm going to go read chapter 6 now yayz
You've done something great with this story, TAW. It managed to combine the right amount of lulz with great characterization and a realistic relationship. I am, of course overanalyzing
, but the fact that I am proves that I am enjoying this a lot. Keep up the great work! 
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Well, this was very difficult to read. There was absolutely no divide between fiction and reality, and in both cases you swap names around every other paragraph, so I spent the vast majority of the chapter with no idea what was supposed to be happening. And then, total clop out of nowhere. I know I should have seen it coming, but the rest of the story was so much more tasteful compared to this. And pudding? Really? I thought that was supposed to be an intentionally absurd joke, not the payoff of the entire story. A very disappointing finish.
It's OVER!? No no no! I wanted to see so much more of the 'Trials of Temptation'
! Oh well.
The pudding was hilarious, I loved it. In case you were wondering, Mr. Nonagon complainy-pants. *sticks tongue out childishly*
It was brilliant how Twilight thought that she had hidden her self-insert so well. It wasn't obvious at all.
P.S. IS it over? Please say no!
"mare, ee-su-ooh-rely"
I see what you did there.
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That was the point, it was bad fanfiction. And yep, pretty much, tasteless clop was about the name of the game. I guess if ya'll dislike it that much I could do an alternate ending, but I have no idea how I'd make that ending satisfying. "The Twilight and Dash kissed and made up and everything was okay" isn't the most dramatic plotline.
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'fraid so, though it does mean I can now go and write other things.
That was funny, sweet, and chocolatey.
Of course I would have loved more godawful Sparkle-Sue action -- especially Twi trying to write explicit sex -- but it was hilarious and worked well in context.
Yay!
There was not nearly as much Twi being a terrible writefag as I wanted
Welp, it's over. No no no no no when is your next thing going to be out I need a reason to wake up every day
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Sorry, I'd have loved to do more, but it was a choice between doing that and finishing in two chapters, or not and doing it in one. This was I can continue on to other things I'm not quickly growing to hate :D
It'll also have Twilight in it
225717>>225801 Haha! Alas, I will take it in stride. If you weren't into this fic anymore there's nothing to do about that. Thanks for doing such a hilarious story while it lasted though TAW. I
you~
Keep on rockin'!
You had me at: " lewd descriptions of Daring Do's plot hole"
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FINALLY!
192476 They wouldn't be using fishing poles for anything they wouldn't have invented fishing poles, it doesn't really make sense. They could bring something like twine, string, use the vines in the forest, use sticks in the forest, etc. But fishing poles, I don't think so.
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Hah! I found you on a clop fic Dash! Crap...you found me on a clopfic if you read this...uh.
Nvm carry on
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My, you'd almost think it was bad fanfiction with plot points that didn't quite make sense! ;)
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How can you stand to write a bad fanfic on purpose? Gah! I don't get it! Whatever floats your boat though
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Dash wasn't meant to be a particularly good author, that was the entire point. If the fishing rod was the only thing that came out as a little absurd then I failed.
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I had to skip the daring do parts lmao, they were too terrible :P
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Then you may as well not have read the story, really.
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There are ponies that eat fish. They are Icelandic.
After the first sentence of Rainbow's fanfic, I started t wonder if she'd taken writing lessons from a certain General Jenit Sulla (retired)... (Obscure references, yay!)
I commented in the first chapter that Dash seemed to have taken lessons from General Jenit Sulla (retired), but it seems Twilight is a much better match... (and her own Ciaphas Cain to boot!). Obscure references aside, much laughs were had reading this story. If I had one complaint, it would be that the story didn't really put me into the mood for clopping. And that my face hurts from cringing at their attempts at fanfiction. Wait, that's two complaints? Anyway, good work.
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Yeah, the story was really done more as a writing exercise than anything else - though you may enjoy the sequel which I'm taking a little more seriously!
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how dare you besmirch the biographer to a HERO OF THE IMPERIUM!
Overall, I think it was quite good. Some odd parts, but the idea as a whole was interesting. Will be a bit more sloppy review then deserved but xP
Will first say I rather liked the concept, it was a visible, but still amusing idea, it had a quite good pace, some parts were a bit off, but good overall.
As for the last scene, it was quite good. Personally not a to big fan of "pink insides", but in the context of just "insides", I can see it more logically... although, not sure why she'd be looking inside her vagina when the rest of the vulva is there xP
The whole chocolate pudding felt quite amusing, since it was a bit of a running gag (imo) throughout the series. It was a "serious" erotic aspect, I just found it to be rather funny. Gotta say it was quite a tad bit too phallic focused for my liking, (the sex scene) then again, not really a fan of the "super overly sensual horn" jig so... but I guess I can see why some are appealed by it. The Rarity part was odd and kinda out of place, but had some humor to it. Can't say to much about it though since I tend to do rather similar things in my own ones xD
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Yeah, this piece has a lot of problems. An explanation (not an excuse) is that I wrote it primarily as a writing exercise, to see what I could do allocating exactly 45 minutes to each chapter, so... no time for editing, woo!
Personally, I like the horn thing, but I agree it was badly used here (and actually, retconning (sorta) it was the first thing I did in the far-more-serious sequel), and really it needs a lot more explanation (preferably of the sticky kind) to be worthwhile. Thanks for the words!
468322 Yeah, I think I recall seeing that in the description :P
I know how my stuff really needs editing to be presentable haha.
I don't mind it minorly, like with wings, ears or cutiemarks, but when it kinda over-shades the real deal it goes a bit "~eh..." imo. When it's used as an ergonemys zone (or w/e called), that's chill, but here it was used as a second sexual organ, seemingly better than the actual one. Something I can just randomly note I've noticed some artist do a bit "odd" imo (haven't noticed it to strongly from you though) is that when doing f/f, they seem much more inclined on having m/f sex. Ie: The characters instead of aiming to please the other with what they got, they instinctively aim towards getting a phallic object. I can state that yeah, some do this, but for most females, the most pleasurable zone overall is the clitoris, and the "least effective" (but by all means not "bad", just worst of the good) is vaginal penetration. In terms of getting pleasure and getting off that is, some prefer the feel of it.
Kinda messy reply, but in a hurry ^^'