Haiku of the Alicorn
Haiku of the Lonely Alicorn
Why did you make me
face eternity, princess?
I would have said no.
~Twilight
I love thee like night
My dearest Twilight Sparkle
Please look upon me.
~Luna
I don't understand
All of my friends are dead now.
These wings are a curse.
~Twilight
You may be sad, yes
But not forevermore, no
I shall be thy friend
~Luna
Oh Princess Luna
How can you stand seeing them
When you know they die?
~Twilight
Oh Twilight Sparkle
Ponies all shine so brightly
With their time given
~Luna
I miss them all so!
Rainbow and all the others!
They grew old and died!
~Twilight
Thou art ageless, yes
Heavy is the head with-crown
We are merely four.
~Luna
Please stay here with me
I don’t want to be alone!
I’m so lonely now!
~Twilight
Come Twilight, come now
Away from this dark graveyard
Thy bed shall be warm.
~Luna
Twilight, welcome home.
I hope you can find good rest
Your room is waiting.
~Celestia
Come your majesty!
Your room has been readied, ma’am!
I’ll lead you to it.
~Random Guard
That won’t be needed
I will take dear Twilight there.
Her room is near mine.
~Luna
Yes Princess Luna,
Princess Twilight, I am here.
Should you need a guard.
~Random Guard
Wow, these hallowed halls…
They’re so big and now they’re home.
Am I really here?
~Twilight
This is thy home now.
My sister and I are here,
For comfort and love.
~Luna
Oh thank you Luna.
It’s one less thing on my mind
Knowing I’m welcome.
~Twilight
Come, yon door is thine.
We thought you would enjoy mauve.
It matches your coat.
~Luna
Oh, it’s beautiful!
Golden Oaks was not so grand,
Is all this all mine?
~Twilight
The curtains are yours,
Yonder bed is meant for thee.
And a private bath!
~Luna
Haha, that’s so nice!
I had always shared with Spike!
But no more, he’s grown…
~Twilight
Worry not, Twilight
He’s a big dragon now, yes?
Purple, just like you!
~Luna
He thought he was mine…
Small, purple and magical
He was like a son.
~Twilight
Linger not on him.
Thy weariness will subside.
Rest now, in your bed.
~Luna
Luna, will you stay?
I meant what I said before.
Not to be alone…
~Twilight
Such tears, my Twilight!
Very well, I shall stay here.
Shhh, shhh, rest thy brow…
~Luna
Oh, I’m so sorry!
Look at me blubbering here!
I’m a great big mess!
~Twilight
Twilight, we all mourn.
Rest beneath my wing and hush,
The night will soothe you.
~Luna
Is… is it selfish?
Being warm and alive here?
While others just die?
~Twilight
Never feel guilty!
Long life should be cherished, friend.
We live forever.
~Luna
Luna, I’m so scared.
Eternity is so long!
It all seems so cold…
~Twilight
Friends are like flowers,
Dear one beneath my dark wings.
They blossom, then die.
~Luna
And we should enjoy?
They will all be so brief, though!
How can I love them?
~Twilight
Feel my warm feathers.
For I will always be here,
Tender for thy woes.
~Luna
You’re so warm, Princess
Will you promise to stay? Please?
I’m so lonely now.
~Twilight
Now and forever
I will warm thy bed and heart
Perhaps… as your love?
~Luna
Princess! You’re so fond?!
I had no idea, truly!
My face is so red!
~Twilight
Do not be alone
Embrace me Twilight Sparkle
I will keep thy heart.
~Luna
Oh Luna, you’re warm.
Will you really keep me safe?
Now and for always?
~Twilight
Yes, my beloved.
Why, ever since Nightmare Night
I have pined for thee!
~Luna
What? Really, that long?
Gosh, why didn’t you say it?
I would have loved you!
~Twilight
Tis mine turn to blush
I was angry and tender
The moon was so harsh
~Luna
Luna, just stay here.
Snuggling with you is nice.
It makes me feel safe.
~Twilight
Curl thy wings my love
They are still new and lovely.
Feathers are fragile.
~Luna
You’re so soft and warm
Oh Luna, I feel so good.
Knowing you are here.
~Twilight
Give me the covers
I will comfort thee this night
With kisses and warmth.
~Luna
Princess, hooves like fire!
Your fur is like liquid night.
Your heartbeat is strong!
~Twilight
My little pony,
Embrace me with kisses, now!
I desire thy heart!
~Luna
Take me, oh take me!
Your kisses are like fire!
The bed is too small!
~Twilight
Thy lips upon mine,
I shall return many times.
Your heart is mine.
~Luna
Oh my Princess, yes!
Now press me to the pillows.
I must have you now!
~Twilight
Do not blaze too bright.
There is nothing but time now.
Let passion simmer
~Luna
Forgive me, Luna
I was caught in the moment.
Your body is hot.
~Twilight
I desire thee much
But merely kisses for now.
Lovemaking for later.
~Luna
Please, nuzzle me then.
I feel safe in your embrace.
Your velvet nose, ohhh…
~Twilight
Hush now, quiet love.
We shall share this bed tonight.
I will cradle thee.
~Luna
It’s so soft and warm,
My eyes are barely open…
I’m so very tired…
~Twilight
Sleep love, in my night
Right here in my strong embrace
Mine love will shield thee.
~Luna
Your fur is so plush
It’s like the softest pillow
Ohhh… I’m drifting off…
~Twilight
Look into mine eyes
I wish to see thy beauty
Oh Twilight, my love.
~Luna
Such a tender thing,
Mother give me strength for her
To love a pony.
~Luna
She is my heart now,
Oh Faust, she is my heart now.
Faust, protect Twilight.
~Luna
My breast doth quiver
Her breath is warm and alive
The blanket hides her.
~Luna
Her bright, fledgling wings
Such a burden for such youth
A newborn goddess.
~Luna
Tia will love her.
I shall promise even more.
My eon-beating heart.
~Luna
Unto thee a boon
The great love of a goddess
For thy heart and bed.
~Luna
I shall always love
For I shall never leave thee.
Always at your side.
~Luna
Mine eyes grow heavy.
Oh my Twilight, I love thee.
Be here on the morn…
~Luna
END
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dang
Mad props, dude. This is pretty cool. I don't know how you wrote such a long one.
THIS must of took a while to make.
I can barely write 3 lines of a haiku, and then you come out with this
It looks good, but the description isn't the format of a haiku
2086613 I agree. I didn't get first post
but... why?
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dem immortality feels...
Amazing how you used the haikus to create the story! Now that's art (In literature form).
I want to see more creativity just like this!
Aegis.
Like.
Whoa.
Edit: I've had a bad day. This nearly made me teary. Then they started to make out, and it was gone.
Props to you, Aegis. I don't think I could even manage a Haiku anymore.
Well...Uh...*Hides Japanese homework from years ago*
Very nice!
I'm not much of a Haiku guy, but the rule is 5, 7, 5 syllables right?
That last sentence had six syllables.(Everything else was perfect.
)
Love It
One problem:
That's six syllables if read as: "Hush now, qui-et now, love."
Taking out the last word would keep it as meaningful and keep the line's pentameter.
Same with the description.
Seven syllables:
"Im-mort-al Twi-light mourns, sad."
Don't know how to fix.
that was freaking adorable, and funny at some parts. enjoyed the read
Quite possibly the only Twiluna I've enjoyed as of yet.
Would Twilight get her own guards, or share Luna/Celestia's?
Commence read.
Pleasantly surprised.
Thanks for this.
2086692 Whoops, must be my southern accent. "Quiet" has one syllable where I'm from. I'll fix it. XD
2086680
2086692
How did you notice that? What manner of sorcery is this!
2086740
Didn't see the next?
You have seven syllables
In the first line, sir.
2086680
Perhaps, in this case
A contraction is needed.
"We'll live forever".
2086620 fix'd.
2086680 fix'd.
2086692 fix'd.
Hah, well that's a fun exercise
2086748 Heh! I guess I could have counted some more. At least people participating in this can see it as practice since there are so many in one page.
*sees One shot by Aegis Shield and opens it*
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2086767 1st line has six syllables now
2086758 I was thinking the same thing. Guess I should have pointed it out though.
2086767
You still have six sounds.
Synonyms for "im-mor-tal"
I cannot think of.
Still quite well written
And still a much larger feat
Than I would attempt.
You did this to my feels
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2086787>>2086795
FUCK IIIIIIIT!
*changes it entirely*
2086806
Apologies, sir.
I meant no disrespect, just...
Tried to help. Sorry.
2086806 What about deathless instead of immortal?
Hm.
Marginally impressive. Then again, I don't really care for haikus. Or shipping. And I'm not really a fan of death-fics, either.
So, honestly, you didn't stand much of a chance. Still, I can see how this would probably have been rather difficult to achieve, and I am quite willing to admit talent when I see it
2086901
Why don't you read it?
Give it a chance before you
Judge by the genre.
2086740
How do you pronounce "quiet" as a single syllable? Where I'm from, it's pronounced "qui-et", with a very sharp divide between the two syllables, so I'm having a bit of trouble figuring it out.
Also, have you submitted this to EQD? I'd really like to see their response. The way I see it, they'd either fail it on sight or theme their website around it.
2086913
Perhaps he says it
Similar in sound to "quite"
It's just a theory.
2086913>>2086920 "Quahht"
.....
warshin' machine!
oh god...
2086911
That _was_ after I'd read it.
I've simply never been a fan of haikus (or poetry in general).
Romantic sub-plots are acceptable only so long as they are well developed, and don't detract from the main story (Thereby indicating that they cannot _be_ the main story) - otherwise, I'm just not interested.
And unless there is a foe to seek vengeance upon, I am not all too interested in hearing about the deaths of characters I like.
So, taking all these things into account - he really didn't stand all that much of a chance of winning me over. Perhaps if it had been put to music, and been able to be sung as some sort of chant...
Of course, I'd be more than impressed simply by the technical aptitude of a writer who pulled _that_ off whilst in this format.
THIS WAS WONDERFUL! It was bittersweet in all the right ways. This is gaining a fav and like from me.
And "~Random Guard"..... Pffft...... LOLZ!
Lovely.
*Jaw drops*
I...I barely got to Twilight's room when I...
How is a mere mortal to compete with this!?
I'm just gonna leave my like and be on my marry way... Don't want no spoiler till after S3... Hope you of all ponies could understand...
Wow, you are VARY good at writing Haiku's. I'm jelly. But my feeling's aside GREAT story!
What the hell! I heard some of the Haiku's in his voice.
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My brain! over all good stuff heels and stuff.
very nice Faved and Liked
(Like most of your works
)
So guys, I noticed when we were talking earlier we've been speaking in haiku. Isn't that funny? Um, Luna, Twilight? What are you doing?
*several seconds pass*
You locked the door when I came in, I can't leave. Hello? Wh-oh, oh dear. Uh, I think I should be going!
*minutes pass*
La la la la la! I don't hear anything! Blah blah blah!
– Celestia
... I thought I was going to read the first ever clop scene written in Haiku there for a moment. And I would have been completely okay with that.