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Thousands and thousands of years have passed since the return of Nightmare Moon. Not much of anything remains in the barren land of Equestria. On the hillside of a forgotten town, overlooking the dusk of sundown, lay two sisters holding the only thing that remains to them; each other.
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I can't read something this sad! It is just..... Well it is just too sad of an idea to me.
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I'm glad to hear that this is actually an emotional piece, thank you!
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:D
Very good read, impressive amount of detail. Loved it.
I loved it. One minor issue:
"Almost without thinking, I started towards the small fauna. "
Flora. Plants are flora, animals are fauna.
>That feel when you see a fic that has the same name as the one your writing.
Damn it, I guess I'll call it Sunfall then.
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Sorry, bro. Do you mind giving a synopsis of the fic? Maybe a different title will pop up.
I apologize, I thought I had gone back and fixed that already. Thank you for pointing that out!
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"Nocturne of the Sun", perhaps? You want something to do with darkness/the sunset, correct?
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A synopsis? Well alright, without giving too much away... Celestia gets complacent and does something stupid. A city far away ends up paying the highest price, and Celestia, in trying to fix her mistake, only makes things worse. She then has to seek the help of the very few in the city that don't hate her.
They team up and fight crime.Edit: I think Sunfall will be okay. It's less to do with darkness, more a play on words meant to suggest both sunset and Celestia falling.
you sir have acomplished a not really easy thing. Showing us the pain that Celestia and Luna are going through in their (not that) immortal lifes. And you actually made me cry a little as I read this. Nothing short of great
I wish I could write this well. This was beautiful, evoking all sorts of emotion.
BRAVO!
So sad.
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It's all I could think to post... Because I'm a child, it seems. Fav'n for a later read.
Ouch, I always have trouble with stories like this. Ultimate ends so to speak. I rarely have the steel to read all the way through. It’s also why I avoid tragedy tags like the plague. But then such a tag would be out of place here wouldn’t it? Not a happy ending but an ending I suppose. Tragic in of itself but at the same time… it’s hard to describe in words? You know? (Damn it, I’m probably going to be a little catatonic for a while.)
Well I suppose you do if you managed to wright it so well. I wish you the best of luck with future works.
That was beautiful...
Dude! You put it up! The finished product is beautiful. I legitimatly cried a little. Thanks for he mention! Job well done!
Well even the description made me depressed, so I shall definetly give it a read soon...
She still haves Skippy right? Sorry, had to put a silver horizon on sad stuff...
Poor Luna, what a horrible fate ...
all alone...
Damnit... I told myself I wouldn't read anymore sad stories like this
As bone crushingly depressing as these kind of stories are, I love em.
....
I dont know what to say, I liked it.
Fave
This is amazing... So sad. But such a TwiLuna fic that pretty much never menions Twilight and yet... sooo emotional...
I shed a few tears thanks to this... I don't usually read sad fan fics (as I tend to stick with my cute Flutterdash and TwiLuna ones) but since I haven't really read many sad TwiLuna ones, I decided to give this a go. And you certanly gave an amazing read. Especially so for only 5K words. 
The blending between times was nice even if it sometimes took a few lines for me to work out that you had changed from one to another.
Celestia was amazing and I've never read a fic where they die of old age... normaly they are simply immortal... So nice touch.
Damn. I left this sit open and unread for two days. A small part of me wishes i'd never opened it, but most of me is just cheering and applauding your writing skill.
The feels you've invoked in me, i've not truly felt for quite some time. Like when 'Letters to Luna' (the only fic i can even compare to this, too) was new was about the last time i've had them. For invoking these kind of feels... (i've not read any of your other works, assuming there are some, i've not checked at this point) have a thumb, fave, and a watch. I feel like that isn't enough to give you, but that's all i can, at this point. Letters to Luna is one of the few fics i can read and cry at the end, no matter how many times i've read it. This joins that list, today.
I-I'm... just going to go sit in the corner and cry now. It's about all the composure i've got left to do at this point.
so many thoughts running through my head on what to say,so ill keep it simple, wow.
Damn you, you have crushed my fragile confidence as a writer with this beautiful story.
I must agree with 1946781, this story is to sad to read, right now at-lest.
Such a beautifully sad story.
I love the mentioning of the lilacs. They are my favorite of all flowers. Growing up, I would sit on my porch right next to the lilac bush, reading or writing, and just become lost in the afternoon.
I miss those times.
Damn.
Just...
Damn.
I don't care if they think I'm an idiot for clapping in front of the computer. You deserve it. This. Is. Art.
1950107 This was so sad... Why couldn't they have gone together indeed... Poor Luna...
Forever aluna... a.deviantart.net/avatars/f/o/foreveralunaplz.png?1
Well, one word: beautiful. I really applaud the way you can convey such deep emotions in such a short story. The story really touched me, bravo.
At first I thought this was a prequel to Moonrise, but apparently not.
If there's anything sadder than death... it's knowing that someone wishes to die.
This whole thing was sad, but these two parts stood above the rest:
and
There is one big problem though: semicolons. You don't seem to know how to use them, going so far as using them in the place of colons and periods. I found this to be very useful. It uses humorous sentences that easily stick in your head to illustrate the finer points of semicolon use.
Should be a period.
This one's an extra space.
This one should be a comma.
Should be a period.
Should be a period.
Should be a colon.
Should be a colon.
this.... this is art. in the raw it is art. it brought emotion and caused me to choke on my heart. my mind played the story out like it was on the screen in the stead f the letters.
you have gained a fan. you have gained a fan.
Well done, that was a fantastic story that truly made me tear up.
I wish I had died with Cel next to me.
I wish I had died at sundown.
That was so sad, you truly are a gifted author. Especially that you were able to get those emotions out of me in a short story.
Reading this was like walking into 2001 just after Hal gets shut down. It feels like the last chapter in a much longer story. Though I suppose it's too late to fix this now. Hmm, I need to check out the book version of 2001.
Also, you aren't supposed to capitalize a word after a semicolon.
Congratulations. Not only did you make me cry, you have also been awarded my first FimFic comment. I'm going to go use up all the tissues now.
I never thought I'd be so disappointed to see a story not end with a character's death. Really great, though I personally found the whole "light turning to fire turning to flower" thing to be a bit much, kinda heavy handed with the symbolism there. It was also rather densely written, and a little hard to follow in comparison to the rest of the writing. I still liked thought it was great, though I'm honestly surprised that in the end, the third alicorn was not part of Celly's memory. Twilight was special, yes, but she was a mortal pony. Her life would've been the blink of an eye to Celestia. Cadence, on the other hand, was another alicorn; Her life, if it is to be presumed already ended, would still have been much longer, and made more of an impact. Still, that's just a cannon nitpick and doesn't detract from the story.
sad as fuck man :(
Have my thumbs!
That was beautiful. *sniff*
I know...
Hug?
*wipes away tear* Hug.
i don't know, if my two cents matter much, but i guess comments are made for it right? i read this story, honestly not expecting to be affected, and on large while reading it i wasn't. it wasn't until i stept away from the story that it hit me. she was alone, in a world devoid of life. it made me think how everything around us is taken for granite. how life busily goes by from one day to another with no one really stopping to say "what if it didn't?" now one wants to think about being alone, but here its thrown in your face with a being that has seen so many die...even her sister, and being like herself. she knows not when it will happen or if it will happen to her so really...all she can do is wait...i don't know if it speaks to story writing or the idea of the story to make this reaction, but the tale enthralled me. very good writing and good subject, expertly executed. thank you for the tale of Luna and Celestia.
IhateyouIhateyouIhateyouIhateyou! >.> I haven't cried with a story in ages. This... this was heartbreaking. And the worst part is how methodical you were about it! It wasn't a sudden plunge into misery; it was a calm, controlled spiral into the deep sense of grief and loss. I really wish I knew what had happened to Equestria, but I'll go read the story you mentioned now.
This... is one of the more touching stories on here and in general that I've read. You really did this story justice and it was amazing. Thank you so much for the read.
This reminds me of "The Mare at the End of Forever" where Celestia has only her memories (some of them not so good) to keep her company for a very long time.
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH MAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA SO MANY MAN TEARS DEAR CELESTIA WHY
You have drove me to this with the amount of feels felt today.
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This what your story did to my feels
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I can't feel my feeeels. SO cold....
This is owingly good.
Absolutely beautiful
I NEED A HUG NOW
it was so beautiful.
The feels...
oh my....
I love your stories :3
... I think you just broke my heart with sadness
. I was planning on going to bed since it's 4 am here, but now I have to read something happy so I don't go to bed in a sad mood