It's just a normal day in Ponyville. Everything is fine. But when Twilight sparkle finds a new spell, she accidentally becomes a strange creature. As far as anypony can tell, there's a hairless monkey in the library! Can Twilight fix what she has done? Or will she forever remain...a human?
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Interesting concept........I'll read it when I'm not busy
A little too fast, but cool nevertheless.
Keep going, maybe a little slower. This clearly has potential.
Yes, too fast. I also noticed just a few spelling and puctuation errors.
Still, I'd like to see where this goes.
Imagine how much could tease lyra after this.
A miserable pile of secrets.
But enough chit chat, have at you!
1821562 Symphony of the night, much?
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Yay!
Someone got it!
I read the comments. Don't feel the urge to read now. Maybe later. Though from what I can gather it is interesting enough to warrant a track.
Interesting concept, however the chapters are short and rushed
Alright, I read it. Yeah, things definitely progressed quickly.
Needs a qutation mark after 'said'.
Only mistake I found.
Otherwise, a extremely good start! Keep going, I want to find out how this ends.
good.
i'm still mad about shockwave though.
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CASTLEVANIAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAaaa
Sorry about shockwave.
I had finals.
I was about to comment on Rainbow's unusual enthusiasm, but then she passed out, so we're cool.
Eeyup
I see what you did there....
Ich habe nichts.
bra kapitel, min vän!
good,good chapter!
Lied mé!
Sorry about the lack of new chapters. I've gotten wrapped up in PART, so I'll get back soon.
Not meaning to sound rude or rushing or anything but do you have a idea of when the next chapter will be out, and remember you take all the time you need
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Now what I'm about ta tell y'all is the HONEST TRUTH. last night, I had me an idea! An trust me, it's gonna be a doozy!
So somewhere in the area of a week.
Short but good
This great but it would be wonderful if this was longer. maybe at least 1500 words, then it would be perfect
The larg blue box thing sounds like the docters tardise
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Eeyup.
So where is the docter? Or is twilight to become the new docter because she is a human now
Interesting concept, but look a bit rushed to me.
Hey I know you get caught up in new ideas but as advise FINISH A FUCKING STORY!!!!!
Your endings sound and feel kinda rushed and I know I do this too, but you rush through the action. Like with falling I felt like there wasn't any real peril, Quin was basically invincible. My advise would be keep your writing style, but make it longer. Oh hey and for all of you that are following him, don't worry I know him in real life and I will beat some sense into him
Oh and one last word of advise for you before every pony gets sick of my voice.
You should try what I'm doing, I'm publishing basically an outline of my story but when I get to the end I'm going to be revising and editing the crap out of it, trust me, it takes longer but you get a much high quality story from it.
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Ughhhh...yes. I know. I do need to continue.
Ohh! The sun just came up!
And he does see me every day, and will beat sense into me. But not if I make a bad enough pun firsts!
I just hope no one has an overdose of....alicorn-acova!
More?
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YES. HEAR ME NOW.
I AM BACK.
WOO.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm..................
Now what should happen next......
Yet another fool who doesn't know about biology.
Your dialogue's very difficult to keep track of. As my English teachers would say, "Always start a new paragraph."