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While the elements search for Big Macintosh's missing cousin, they end up being dragged into something...bigger. The Three elements now have to deal with the ongoing war between the outlawed necromancers Trixie and Twilight Sparkle.

Part of a Discordverse AU.

Chapters (8)
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I had written this, because I was discussing another alternate universe with several other bronies.

The name of the game in this one was the progress of technology and science in ways that canon Equestria, or some of the other alternate universes, did not use.

While I would usually post the counterpart to "Mare in the Moon" first, this was a little note in the proposal that people loved, so I decided to do it first.

sense the over all feel of the series was going to be magitek, and mad science, why not include a few background ponies as homages to classic pulp/turn of the century Sci-fi.
so Lyra Heartstrings has become Heartstrings the Science Pirate, and Gilda has become a tilt of the hat to a rather obscure 1900s German Dime novel series.
You probably figured out who the Conqueror is already.

Von Trotter is a griffonized version of General Lothar Von Trotha, who was in charge of German forces during the Boxer Rebellion in China, and responsible for the wars with the Herero, Namaqua, and Maji Maji people in Germany's African colonies.

More soon, I hope.

I'll get to this... maybe.

I just wanted to comment on the wonderful sexual innuendo of the pic.

Ok, I have to go to bed, but you ARE in my read later. I'll get there sooner or later~

Clever idea. Hopefully Regidar doesn't ninja me, though.

okay you said this was part of an alternate universe, is this the begining of a universe or is this part of a series already in progress, sorta seems like it starts in the middle of something

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It's really testing the waters.

I had this part of the idea more fleshed out than the counter part to "Mare in the moon/Friendship is magic" sense I had some trouble figuring out who the Elements would be.
I didn't want to use all the canon elements and wanted to avoid some of the more popular choices of Trixie, Ditzy/Derpy, Lyra, Bonbon and so on, so this was easier to flesh out sense it used the ones that I did have set, and gave me time to figure out the others.

However, I do intend to write the counterpart to "Mare in the moon/Friendship is magic", once this is finished.

This story has a really heavy alternate universe, so make sure you tell about it with great detail.

I am interested about how this story goes. Keep going on.

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I'm not sure who that is.

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It will.
I don't want to go into too much detail about the one big change until the last part of this.
we have to keep some things a secret.

and now we learn more.

Interesting that the sheriff refers to both a "Kingdom" and "Equestria."

bravo interesting

I still think Twilight should technically have some link to the Elements of Harmony and Celestia, its an alternate universe but at least part of her backstory should line up. Like she diverged at the point of going to Ponyville; already obsessed with necromancy in secret she forces her guards to take her elsewhere but still inadvertantly helps the new Mane 6 find the elements. Or somewhat younger taking advantage of Celestia's trust in her and her curiousity for necromancy drives her to her now present state. Regardless, she must have been Celestia's student for some time due to Spike will being her loyal companion meaning she still does have a connection with the other 5. Trixie though was honestly exiled while Twilight who was found out at a later time was just exile post her own personal option to leave.

Just my 2 cents

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Give the point of departure is nearly 1000 years earlier, I cannot, in good faith, make that happen.

While I will explain things in a later chapter, I will say right now that Twilight was Never Celestia's student, Spike's not Quite loyal, and Twilight has only met one other member of the Canon Mane 6.

What?

Who said that Element of Magic couldn't be an Earth Pony or Pegasus?

YOU HAVE TO MAKE MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:raritystarry:

I apologize if this chapter's a little rough. I recently lost my proofreader, but I've gone over this chapter enough times to catch most, if not all of the errors.
I hope.:twilightsheepish:

I was listening to Creature Feature's Dr. Sawbones or Grave Robber at Large for most of the writing.
Very catchy, and very appropriate.

wow..... bravo bravo

and let's give a big hand to my new proof-reader, Dusk Apollo.

I'm slightly unsatisfied with why Spike is helping Rarity, but I suppose we can chalk it up to he still has some feelings for her.
so the Undead cyborg Dragon still has a crush on the Pony.

....that was not a sentence I expected to ever type, but such is life.

A Unicorn with an Electric Blue Mane, Magenta eyes, and white fur.

....erm, at least she died for science?

...if it's really her.

(Joke) Alt. Title: Dr. $awbones (Or How I Learned To Stop Worrying And Love The AU War)

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I like it.
Sounds abit more like a comedy, though.

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Well, Dr. Strangelove was a comedy. A black comedy, but one nonetheless.

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I was actually referring to the $awbones part.
If you're gonna spell it that way, it sure as hell sounds like a comedy.

Feels a bit anticlimatic, don't it?

Well, that's sort of how things are.
Not everything ends in a dramatic struggle between good and morally ambiguous.

Almost over.

If you don't know who Lemon Hearts and Dizzy Twister are, that's fine.
they have had a grand total of Three Lines in all three seasons, Dizzy got one in Season 2, and Lemon Hearts had one in Season 1 and 2.

...I guess that's about it.

...oh, right.
Discord.
...well, did you figure it out?

2155668 Ey-nope. Fun read though.

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You know, you Can say more than that.
I like to get feed back so I can see what people liked, so that I can improve.

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Indeed.
here's hoping the follow ups are just as fun.

2159537 it's well written, characters, though clearly from an AU, are believable and not to OOC, over all this was a very good story

What is a Discordverse AU?

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Discord as the "Ruler" of Equestria.

"Nightmare Moon Over the Republic" will clear something up.

So far I've only read the first chapter but it seams to have good potential and I'm planning on reading more.

This story has been reviewed by The Equestrian Critics Society

Story Title: 2986 Steps

Author: Dramatic Spoon

Reviewed by: Sirius_Face

The devil is in the details. On the subject of a famous dark art like necromancy being practiced by two well loved characters, the reader should expect some level of detail to showcase this forbidden art and the challenges it can create for the new heroes in this alternative world to overcome. In this story, A Matter of Rules of War, the detail is sorely lacking in nearly all aspects of the story, creating a weak conflict for characters that have a lot of potential.

Full Review

Score: 4.5/10

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Actually, I think it's a bit more refreshing to see someone complain, rather than just say they like it.

while at this point, I'm honestly not sure when, or if, I will get back to this and rework it, the points you make would help with the other projects I got.

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Just to let you know I had to rewrite my original review for your story. The link is still the same but the review has been rewritten if you're interested to see it. I gave you a slightly higher score after reflecting more on what your story does right.

*Grins* Very cute fun, the ending felt very nice too. I know you were worried it was anticlimactic but to me it felt just right. After the ursa fight and such, having them get into a huge fight with trixie would've lessened the effect.

So your mother doesn't want you. Run away.

Uh oh! Twilight's gonna hurt time Turner!!!

What if we had a minotaur, but gave it griffon wings, a snake’s tail, and octopi tentacles and their ink sacks? It would be fantastic!” The excited stallion yelled.

Pantyhose Taro?

In the manga he has octopus tentacles as well.
http://ranma.wikia.com/wiki/Pantyhose_Taro

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yep.

I have to say, I'm disappointed that it took Three years for someone to catch that.

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