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I remember enjoying the original. Very much looking forward to reading this.
Is Celestia and Luna also involved in this story? Or will they be part of a third story with other characters like queen chrysalis, queen nova, ember and rain shine?
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I hope you'll enjoy this one too.
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Luna and Celestia will get their own stories in the future. Any other character not in the tags here may also get one at some point, possibly if someone were to commission it.
YAY~! I love when 3rd updates. And a continuation of a series too!? Who do I have to thank?
"Tis some visitor," I muttered, "tapping at my chamber door - only this and nothing more."
This is going to be very entertaining.
Alright! Sequel to an all time favorite.
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That would be the commissioner, I suppose, as well as Quela who commissioned the original for giving permission for a sequel commissioned by a different user.
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It makes me a little happy to know some people have my old stories as their favourites, even if I think some of them are fairly terrible in places by my current standards. I hope this one'll live up to the weight of its predecessor.
The original was so amazing. Hope Twilight gets heavily dominated and used to corrupt Celestia and Luna. Non the less amazing so far.
I can never truly enjoy great stories like these because I get stuck on plot and not the plot. I'm more concerned about how magical brainwashing works than the actual fun part after it does work. I personally think can listening is more realistic than using magic. The attempt to change someone's whole personality permanently forever. And definitely if they are a strong magic user
This is good.
I've been looking forward to a sequel to the original story for a long time. So happy to see the series continue.
My only criticism is that I feel that there is too much cutting between characters and scenes. One of my favourite aspects of the original is that we really got to marinate in Cadence's slow descend into mind control and experience it build up into a crescendo.
We only get to see very brief glimpses of Starlight's, Rainbow's and Rarity's mind control before it cuts away. The author should taken their time a bit more.
I absolutely love what is written here but I feel that it misses out on what made the original story so great.
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You'd be surprised how much worldbuilding gets discussed in the background that doesn't make its way into the commission because it wouldn't fit. But yes, the premise is fundamentally one meant to allow for clop to happen. For what it's worth, all this is happening with the support of another powerful magic user, and FiM itself has multiple instances of magical hypnosis being shown to exist.
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This is mostly Twilight's story first and foremost, and I still had to write it within the constraints of what the commissioner was fine with being the upper limit of wordcount and consequently money spent on it. I hope the end result is still good despite the admittedly more rushed approach to the ponies other than Twilight. Although, to be fair, the fic this is a sequel to is itself quite bloated and may have been better had it been shorter. The climax chapter is the longest and wholly focused on Twilight, hopefully that one will make up for the rest.
I not complain just was surprised previous tory was so much bigger adn this one like so tiny. I was just its gonna be like previous one with so much sex scenes
Can't wait for Celestia and luna
Okay, I liked it up till now but this is slipping into being a bit too much. To the point where sex goes from hot to just stupid. Having sex 24/7 just gets boring.
And all of this happened because Cadence wanted Shining to be more dominant in the bedroom.
So are all of the mane 6 pregnant now?
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Yes.
Kinda of wanted to see vinyl and Octavia included in this scene. Maybe next one.
So will the next fic be about Luna and celestia or will there be two different stories about them?
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Most likely Luna alone.
Honestly I would love to learn more of what is happening to wider society in general as the corruption goes on here. Also will we get stories past Luna and celestia? Like maybe shining goes to the equestria girls world or visits the other kingdoms?
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It's possible we might.