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Nitpicking your math errors is how I show I care.


Twilight has done everything in her power to show how much she loves me. It would have been easier if I felt the same way.

How does one go about breaking up with a dear friend, especially when it's so obvious how head-over-heels in love she is? I'm sure I could have done it, if I'd had enough time to work out how.

But then she saved my life.

Written as part of a gift exchange for Snow, who also did the cover art.

CW for toxic relationships and depictions of depression.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 11 )

If only I’d known her when we were still fillies, and had been able to guide her into a few practice relationships. Something to get her hooves wet, before she dove headfirst after the mare of her dreams.

God, I just love how Rarity views herself as Faust's gift to mares. 😂

I'm enjoying how they're both just a little... more themselves, I guess I'd say? They're both keyed a little more into their idiosyncrasies.

I'm sure it'll be fine.

I patted the back of her head soothingly, but that was all I could manage. I was too afraid to break her heart.

Do it, Rares. Someone's gotta. 💀

I'm nervousexcited for the rest!

I patted the back of her head soothingly, but that was all I could manage. I was too afraid to break her heart.

And that's how Equestria dies. Because Rarity refuses to do the right thing and break Twilight's heart. It was annoying before. But now this is going into unhealthy. Where's Cadance when you need her to knock some romance sense into these two?

“I can say what I please,” Applejack grinned.

Haha yes excellent, good job AJ, you tell her.

Poor Rarity is really going through it. Also Luna is A+ here, I really enjoyed that scene.

Oh for fuck's sake. Someone needs to knock sense into Twilight NOW. Before this gets worse. Forget a deadline. Luna needs to step in and do something. No. Celestia needs to step in and do something.

:fluttershysad: No wonder Twilight didn't want Luna to see Rarity. She would soon figure out what Twilight had done, and Twilight would not win that fight.

Why isn’t there a dark tag?

That was a good story.

Really good stuff mate. A very intense and difficult read, but your character work shines with a creeping, intolerable sense of dread

Twilight is a really good, heartbreakingly misguided villain in the piece, and Rarity's POV is excellently pulled off. Amazing stuff

This story has been sticking in my head for a while. I think it's because the things Twilight is doing to Rarity throughout it all are so manipulative and toxic and, worst of all, real. Excluding the dark necromancy, these are the things that happen in relationships. There are gaslighting, controlling, overbearing, self-serving, and entitled people that feel owed something, who view love and relationships as a simple transaction instead of a complex, cooperative experience. The outcome of it too can be just as sad as Rarity's realization.

Fantastic work, Zontan.

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