This story is a sequel to I'll Be There for the Highs and Lows
Not long after parting ways with Diamond Tiara, Sunset discovers that she herself is hurting mentally from the fire incident. But she worries that she'll come off as being selfish for helping herself.
So she brushes off the pain, make the kid her number one priority. Easier said than done.
And it keeps her up all night.
Part of the Additional EqG AU.
And also written for the A Thousand Word Challenge.
Also it was written in first person, technically Sunset's perspective.
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I appreciate for pointing that out. But even if I wanted to make a few edits, from what I've learned it was ultimately the characters and the plot that made a story enjoyable.
Just my learning experience.
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Alright, I'll do self edit. But I am more inclined to disagree with you in the last part.
change to present tense 'trip'
change to present tense 'slap'
change to present tense 'endure'
Lose the preposition 'for', 'Ms.' gets a period at the end, lose the word 'they', and Everfree Forest should be capitalized as its a proper noun.
change to "it's still" or "it's still going to be" This is clearer and more dramatic.
change to past tense "shielded", and I don't know if you mean 'scarred' as in having a 'scar' or "scared" as in being frightened.
Just about all these corrections were pointed out using my own knowledge AND by using Grammarly grammar check software, so I truly do not understand your issue with it.
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I have no reason to trust grammarly, I once used it before. But then I figured out it's so unreliable tool.
I don't know why everyone uses it but that's just me.
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...I just showed you why...
dang getting up from a nap too early sucks, doesn’t it?
oof!
ah yeah, that makes sense for who would be the so-far-unnamed girl,
i do feel like this is a sequel that one really needs to read the prequel to understand, and i admit i couldn’t get much out of it. still, thanks for writing!
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