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Lets Do This
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Lets Do This
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Well written, but that is kinda to be expected from you
by now.
No spelling or grammar mistakes that stood out to me.
Good short little story.
And at least she kinda sorta stood up for her and Spike.
So looking at this stories descripton, it does not really tell me what the stoires about leaving me (and i mean no offense) unsure if i wanna read it or not
I always love these pre-show /post-show stories that just seem to flesh out the canon even more.
Sweet short story. And I do like the idea that Twilight simply took up residence in the local library. It's very her.
Though I wonder what this means for Spike's interest in comics moving forward in this universe. I liked that aspect of his character.
Of course, now I wonder if Sliver Plate has any Ponyvile relatives.
Whoa. Definitely a great job on the exchanges and characterizations in this one-shot. Really liked Spike trying to help Twilight take the time to relax as well as appreciating the bits of foreshadowing for later in the series. And, yeah, Twilight bluffing that noble who was giving Spike grief about not wanting to risk getting on Celestia's bad side was beautiful (even if, years later, Twilight would be downright terrified of getting Celestia upset, to the point of thinking Celestia might send her back to magic kindergarten just for being one or two days late on a friendship report).
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Thanks! Regarding the comics, my take on it is that Spike started reading comics / graphic novels as a way of learning to connect words with pictures, and then simply kept on reading them out of enjoyment of the medium itself. Not to mention the generally heroic, role-model nature of characters like the Power Ponies.
That was a good story.
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That's good to know.
It would make sense if they didn't play a important role in the setting, but I always thought of them as a interesting bit of world building.
Plus it's a good plot point for future interactions, both for Spike, and for the world itself, if you throw in reality bending magic into the mix.
I always did like the Power Ponies episode, minor gripes aside.
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To be fair, Lesson Zero hasn't happened here yet. Twilight is a lot more consistently mature in this universe.
This is really good. Truly enjoyed it.
Your prose is nice. As does your narrative style. Let me point out a few sentences that stand out the most.
So like I said, wonderful piece.
However, I do have a few grievances.
The first one is the whole past-within-a-past thing. This extract, to be specific.
Starting from Celestia’s first line (’Twilight has an unusual aptitude in magic’) all the way to Ms. Flask’s line (’Just as you say, Highness’) are in the past. But the story itself is in the past tense. Therefore, for flashbacks, you should use the past perfect tense. So it should be: Celestia had said, Ms. Flask had struggled and so on. Which you did write, but only once. It should be done for the entire section, to let the audience know that this is a conversation that occurred in the past. Or alternatively, you could italicize the entire section to let the audience know this was a flashback.
Those things aside, I really like this story and it deserves an upvote. Kudos to you, kind author!
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Thanks for reading, and for letting me know what you think!
Regarding Twilight and Spike's ages (physical and mental): this story is a semi-sequel to a couple earlier stories: My Little Student, and You're Not Mommy, which describe the time between Twilight's entrance exam and her first actual day of classes, and also how she meets up with Spike and takes charge of him as her "assistant".
It's my assumption, for story purposes, that:
To my mind, these assumptions all just help to make this part of Twilight's and Spike's time together more sensible and interesting for narrative purposes.
In the end, it's all headcanon, your mileage may vary.
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Thank you for your explanation. It makes the story a lot clearer.
Looking forward to more works of yours!
Later that night, after having eaten cheesy quesadillas at the school cafeteria for the first time ever, Twilight realized there was a fatal flaw in her plan...the tower did not have a restroom.
I expected a good story. I was not disappointed. Spike is such a good dude.
Figures that Spike would easily notice that but Twilight never did. The gal's brilliant, but the tunnel-vision-like manner her brain works means she might as well be wearing blinders all the time.
Ah-ha! So it was Celestia who gave them that research project. Given the topic...I'm guessing that wasn't an accident.
Overall, a nice little character study sort of story.
I loved it. Early student Twilight, is an unmined resource. I love what you did with it! This could be expanded. I wouldn’t mind in the least. Thank you for a wonderful read.
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Thanks back for reading, and for sharing your thoughts!
I'd always wondered how Twilight came by her tower room in the G4 pilot episode,
and this was my take on how it happened. It's great to hear it works for you as well!
Probably one of the few times nepotism is a good thing. You generally don’t piss off someone who has your king on speed dial.
I like the origin of the tower as well