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ZoidbergIsBestPony


When Star Trek and Ponies collide, there can only be Q!

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...The Continuum feels this species may be a real threat to the Q. However, they also show a unique ability to contain their power. They do not appear to use their abilities for power, greed, or war. We need to see if the species as a people are a threat to the Continuum and not just their abilities.”

“And locking me away in a statue, to rot away in a garden, doesn’t show that?” The face on the statue squirmed and struggled to free the rest of its body.

“No. It doesn’t,” said Q. “But it would seem an opportunity has presented itself. The Enterprise is heading for this region of space. Perhaps you could utilize their presence to…provoke…a situation?”

Both Q started grinning together. “Oh you know me too well, Q. I always enjoy seeing my favorite starship captain.”

The blond Q reanimated the rest of the statue. Discord stepped off the pedestal onto the soft grass. “This is going to be so much fun,” said Discord as his shape began to contort and transform. Within moments a familiar figure in a Starfleet uniform was standing where Discord had been a moment before. As the pair started walking away the blond Q said, “Just remember, Q. This isn’t just some random species to be toyed with. Any species RELATED to the Q, can KILL the Q!”...

(Season 2 Discord)

Never Seen Star Trek: The Next Generation? Here's a brief introduction to Q: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kBwoEXlTph0

Credit to Suddenly-Steinberg for the cover art:
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MLP Season 2

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 365 )

Welcome to my first ever FIM Fiction story! I have been enjoying writing this story and hope you enjoy reading it. I've published 2 chapters to start and will try to get a new chapter out every week! Enjoy I look forward to all the nice friendly comments from all the trolls out there! :flutterrage:

Expected Chapter 3 Release date: 9/24. :pinkiehappy:
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My attention has been acquired.

I'm curious of how this will go.

MLP/TNG crossover!? :pinkiegasp:

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I'll be back with a more meaningful comment when I get a chance to read this.

Holy carp (Yes, carp). This is an excellent idea and one I will be following with a bloodlust rivaling a pack of feasting coyotes on a dead moose. YES. All of my yesses possible! :twilightsmile:

Okay, reading time is over. I like it so far, but you're going to need to find a proofreader/editor.

There was one major issue with the mechanics of the writing:
* Paragraph structure: New Speaker, new paragraph. Every time. No exceptions. This is one of my biggest pet peeves. Combining the dialogue of two or more characters in a single paragraph makes it hard to follow who's saying what.

And a couple of style problems:
* Tell vs. Show: Much of the writing here is very "telly", simply telling us what's going on rather than showing us with descriptive narrative. It's like getting hit over the head with the "scenery stick". This is something that can be difficult for beginning writers (hell, I have issues with it), but definitely something that can be learned and put into practice in fairly short order. I may pm you with specific examples of what I'm talking about at a later time if you would like. Let me know, and we'll see what we can work out.

* Use of past progressive verb tense: Here's a couple of examples I was recently given:
Past Progressive Tense:
>Twilight was looking at her friends with tears beginning to form in her eyes. "You girls..."
Simple Past Tense:
>Twilight looked at her friends with tears beginning to form in her eyes. "You girls..."

Past Progressive Tense in descriptive text:
>The rain was pounding against the roof and the loud crash of thunder would sound off in the distance every so often.
Simple Past Tense in descriptive text:
>The rain pounded against the roof and the sound of thunder crashed off in the distance every so often.

Past progressive forces the sentence into having what I like to call "bastard verbs" such as; was and were, instead of "active verbs" such as; walked, cried, or hit. The simple past tense give the words a more "active" feel, even though the actoin has already happened. However, that doesn't mean that you should never use the past progressive. Many times if the action being described is interrupted or if something that already happened in the story is being described from the point of view of one of the characters, it actually sounds better and makes more sense to use past progressive.

That's all I have for my inane ranting, right now. I hope it's a little bit helpful, and if I come across as harsh or dickish, I'm sorry that's truly not my intention. I really like the premise of this story and hope to see it continue and improve. Feel free to PM me if you've got questions or anything.

:moustache::moustache:2/5 moustaches for now. Just because of stuff I mentioned above. Love the story and I'll be following for sure.

For now, just know this:
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NATOstrike ~ TWE Railroad Maintenance Engineer
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*edit: I forgot a couple somethings.

In the second chapter there is a very jarring perspective change/time-jump between the scene where Q is speaking with Picard and the scene where Q is still locked in the statue. It happens with nothing more than a horizontal line break to show us it happened, but there is no mention of when we are in the story at this point. It is eventually inferred in the scene that this takes place prior to the previous scene, but it's not very clear.

Also, some of Twilight's dialogue seems a bit OOC... maybe militaristic? I'm not sure if that's the word I want, but you get the idea.

Thanks! :twilightsmile: After work, I'll take a look back and find what you're talking about. It's been a long while since High School English, and creative writing is a very new hobby for me, so I always appreciate the leg-up. As for proof-reading, I try to re-read each chapter several times (and finding new things every time), but an outside look is definately more useful. I'll have to see if I can get one of my non-brony friends to bite the bullet for me! :pinkiesick:
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NATOstrike covered everything I was going to mention, so instead; Have a Fav and Thumbs Up. You earned it with the Captain's Log alone. :twilightsmile: :pinkiehappy:

This sounds so promising. :pinkiehappy:
I wonder if the Q have accepted the wayward godling as one of their own or are just snickering behind his winged back, tricking him into doing their dirty work. Time to read this and find out...

I believe Councelor Troy is "Troi" :twilightsmile:

The Federation doesn't have cloaking devices. They signed a treaty with the Romulans that prevented that, remember? You could use holo-camo, but that's a fair bit different than cloaking devices.

True. The devices to which I refer are both the holo-camo suits and the cloaking device used to mask the base in "Star Trek 9: Insurrection". As per the treaty, no cloaked ships will be made during the making of this story! :moustache:
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First Contact should be an interesting scenario for both parties in this story. =3

ALERT! ALERT!
FIRST CONTACT IMMINENT!!!
REPEAT! FIRST CONTACT IMMINENT!!!
PLEASE EVACUATE LOCAL SUPERCLUSTER!!!
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Confound it! you beat me to that gif. As for Q-discord, I was waiting for that to appear. The connections between the two are... Intriguing.

Cant wait for each update!:pinkiehappy:

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I'll be sure to check this out. And I read your comments in Zoidberg's voice. :rainbowlaugh:

Q and discord being played by the same actor. it works really well.:yay:

I can think of 3 songs that Pinkie Could've been singing at the time... But I am liking this so far.... Please continue Zoidberg.

"For some unknown reason, Rainbow Dash flinched as Pinkie took a big bite."
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:moustache:Well done sir... Well done.:pinkiecrazy:

1292112 Really? Because I think it was established that Discord IS the Q who liked to toy around with the Crew of the Enterprise. After all it would only make sense(yes I see the irony in what I just said) seeing as how in the show Discord WAS voiced by the actor who played Q and was actually based off of him.

dear sir this is going to be BAMF

Semper Fidelis

Chapter 1-2 Notes: I've made edits here and there to chapters 1 & 2 :pinkiegasp:, but they were mostly grammar, technical accuracy, and 'smell the roses' edits so there's no need to re-read (but there's nothing stopping you either! :rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:)

Shout-outs to my comment editors: Star Sage :duck:, NATOstrike :rainbowdetermined2:, Boss_Hoss1 :rainbowhuh:, and Twilight's Sparkle! :twilightsmile:

Enjoy!

RELEASING TWO HOURS EARLY!!!:pinkiegasp::yay::rainbowderp:

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Chapter 3-4 Release Notes: This was originally going to be one chapter, but I decided to split it into two. Since I had finished I figured you would appreciate seeing chapter 4 sooner than later! :pinkiecrazy:

Next Estimated Release Date: 10/1

I hope you're enjoying it so far! :rainbowlaugh::yay::twilightsmile::ajsmug:

(And yes I know this Chapter title is cliche and overused - but it fits! so there! ) :flutterrage::rainbowwild:

I'm coming with you mother fucker lol


semper fidelis

Go Twilight! Loving this story so much! You got all the characters exactly right. :pinkiehappy:

*Sigh*
Twilight, why must you mimic the actions of the chick from 'The Journey Home'

As a trekkie and a brony, I approve my good sir.
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You might be in luck sir! Tune in next week. Some chaotic time. Same chaotic channel! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp:

He should have beamed up right before AJ bucked the tree.

YAY! I got a shout out, thank you! :twilightsmile:
BTW, my original comment may have seemed a bit clueless, but Unless he's been playing with timetravel, we are talking about the same DisQuord whos been stuck in the same spot for roughly 2k years at minimum. ..and the same Q who's been using the crew of the Enterprise for his personal playtoy at the same time? :applejackconfused:

Good thing she had no idea the 'port was mechanically created, otherwise she would have had second thoughts..

Well, Geordi's getting a court martial. Protocol states that, in the event of an away team's discovery by pre-warp civilizations, orders are to enact immiediate beam out to avoid further contamination, even if they are in direct line-of-sight. Geordi digs himself an even bigger hole by revealing facts about his species, technology, and way of life that are thousands of years beyond the current state of Equestrian culture. Geordi's a nice guy and all, but he would never willingly violate te Prime Directive.

He tells them his name... and Dr. Crusher doesn't attempt to alter Fluttershy's memory engrams? Has everyone forgotten pre-warp civilzation protocol?

On another note, that is exactly what Twilight would do. She dies tend to act forst and think later when the pressure is on. And I look forawrd to more Q; I love that guy.

A premise with promise.
Will read soon:pinkiesmile:

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There's going to have to be a little leeway there I think. I want to say that the statue that the princess thought she locked discord away in was actually just a statue and Q had been freed 5 min after he was frozen and a false statue put there to fool them. (I'm trying to work that into the story angle somehow, but we may need to let this one go. :pinkiesad2: :facehoof::fluttercry:.

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Ahh plot direction, it sometimes creates bigger holes than plot. All we can do is put up a sign so no one falls in! :applecry:

(Note: In Star Trek 9: Insurrection (not my personal fav but gives my the leeway I need to pull this off) they break protocol with a "pre-warp" civilization to help them out. (even if they turn out to have previously had warp-technology). So my intention is to violate protocol in favor of damage mitigation to get "the magics!" :coolphoto: Right to do: No; Can get away with it: Yes. :pinkiehappy:

Picard's going to be more pissed when Twilight arrives! LOL! :rainbowlaugh:

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Those are the very rare exceptions. It's just that beaming out would have produced a visual warp signature. But between a warp signature, and Geordi taking off his gear, the former is a far more appealing prospect.

Insurrection had them break protocol because Data's damage had already screwed the pooch so bad that a landing party would cause no more further contamination. There was also that instance where a bunch of dudes got injured and were being watched by natives. They tried a landing party to extract them, but they got caught too and were held as hostages. Then Picard gets shot with an arrow.

They break Prime Directive, but only do so when situation is FUBAR. I'm just peeved because I know Geordi is more careful than this.

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Ok, that makes sense! Thank you for taking time to listen to your readers. :)

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:fluttershbad: * squeak * Chaos works for an explanation then, if its all right with you that is... :fluttershyouch:
(Twilight) :facehoof: "Oh for.. Mr Hoss, speak up confidently, please..."

>>Evil-Lovieness - SPOILERS! SHHH! - In the end, everyone dies - there are no survivors! :pinkiesick:

only joking - there are at least 1 or 2! :rainbowwild:

I think it would be even funnier if Geordi accidentally reveal his comperrison of Twilight and Picard preferably in ten-forward:trollestia:

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A shout out for me?
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Seriously, though, I'm glad I could help you out. Loving the story so far.

1333969 Huh... That kinda sounds like how all me weekends end up.

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