Fluttershy, element of Kindness, timid pegasus with a clean record has fallen in love. Not with just any stallion... Big Macintosh. With her personality pulling her back, it will be almost impossible to fess up to the one she loves.
Big Macintosh, stallion of few words, a silent thinker. He has fallen for a mare... Not with just any mare... Fluttershy. Torn between breaking one mare's heart or another, it seems almost impossible for him to show his true feelings. Love, hate, regrets and hangovers are sure to ensue.
Rated teen because of shipping. Random Tag because I literally am just doing this for the hell of it.
This story will also contain other ships.
3-5 years in the future.
Chapters (7)
It wasn't until someone posted a good-luck post of FlutterMac for me and my fiancee that I got into FlutterMac. I can't wait for more!!
~Raxel~
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Thank you ^^
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xD I laughed so hard!
You, are amazing.
I don't understand where the 8 dislikes came from....this story's pretty epic to me :3 keep up the awesome work.
And also FINALLY someone else notices the lack of FlutterMac on this site. Shoot, its like all I see in the mew stories is FlitterDash :P
I HAVE BROUGHT PEACE TO THE WORLD BY GIVING THIS FIC ANOTHER THUMBS UP!!
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Ikr? The only fanfics that pop up are Flutterdash and Twimac.
Ugh, the dislikes probably came from some spam trolls and haters. Oh well Dx
Thanks! Too many spelling mistakes due to auto correct, and I have the overuse of punctuation, but thanks!
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Thank you! I appreciate it very much!
1266750 and with that thumbs up I just pushed this fics like ratio over the dislike. You can thank me later. TwiMac? Hmmm
dont see a lot of that...don't mind not seeing it either. Either way heres some FluterMac love 
FFFLLLLLUUUTTTTTTEEEEERRRRRMMMMAAAAAACCCCCC!!!!
I really like this story so far. A couple typos such as "wong flapping" lol but still, great story.
Couple typos, but hey, the concept is well done, and it doth give unto me mine warm fuzzies.
>> budswillblossom No problem man/woman it deserves it.
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Stupid effing autocorrect...
Thanks!
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Woman.
xD
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As I said, my autocorrect is sh*t...
I can't get away with anything Dx
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THANK YOU I OWE YOU MY LIFE -shot
Ehh, I think the only other Mac couple I like seeing is Cheerimac, the others don't make sense to me...
1268693 crap where did those hearts come from? Ah well glitchy glitchy computer.
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Glitchy glitchy!
Cuteness within acceptable parameters, if somewhat generic so far.
Aww, here it goes!
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It pained me to write this... It really did.
So sad
And I agree that there should be more Fluttermac
At least in my story there is some of it even if it is not about them.
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Sadnesssssss
Yeah, this site. Every 20 flutterdash or Rarishy there is one fluttermac...
I'll have to read your fic!
Also, thanks for the favourite.
Wow. Not a lot of comments on this chapter yet xD
Oh well. I don't expect it to blow up like a grenade. But if you like it, please give me some feedback so I can spruce up my writing skills for the next chapter. Thank you~
I really like where this is going. I am excited to see what going to happen.
I just wanna give Fluttershy a hug right now.
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Thank you.
Preread comment: The use of the words "Fluttershy" and "rushing" together in the same sentence makes me a little nervous. But the Random/Romance tags are really turning me on.
With that said, let us begin.
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xD only to rush to Mac's side or for Angel bunny, of course.
Yes. Let us begin on the "epic" journey about to unfold. Planning on maybe 10-18 more chapters.
Alright, let's do this. I'll try to only comment on important things, but I'll probably fail.
That's a bit much for a compound adjective, if you ask me. If you want to tell us that much about a character (one whom we already know, by the way), just devote a whole sentence to it.
I'm liking that use of formatting, excellent touch! It's very Fluttershy. Throughout the story it's used very nicely.
Sorry to go all editor on you, but you really should split that into two sentences, right where the comma is.
I can't help but think that separating the flashback in a more significant way would have been a good idea...
Now, this last bit is hard. In fact, it's almost impossible to fix. But I really think that Macintosh talks too much. I'm sorry, I just had to say it. There's nothing you can do, really. Without dialogue, nothing happens.
Anyways this is pretty good. Not as random as I hoped, but... Anyways, can you please take out the "Announcement" Chapter? And maybe get an editor. And maybe try and make your author's notes a little more subtle.
Okay, nothing left to complain about! Write on, my friend, and you will improve!
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THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! You helped me a lot, and I appreciate it
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Also, fixed the areas! About the editor part, I dunno. I'll have to over look my stuff before posting it, that's for sure.
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Also, the reason why BM talks so much is because he was little, and became more reserved after the death of his parents.
1329059 OHHHH... Alright, alright. That makes a lot more sense now, but it wasn't entirely apparent while I was reading. Like I said, it might have been good to have a more significant barrier between the flashback and the current narrative, and to go into a little more detail.
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Mmhhmm. I just italicized it so it would confirm That it is a flashback
1329041 Anyways, don't mention it. I know what it's like to be a new author and needing criticism. Heck, nobody ever really stops needing criticism. Anyways, there's a few more minor things that I'd like to bring up, but I haven't the time right now. I'll come back to this tomorrow!
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Thank you for your kindness, good sir.
1329132 It's definitely an improvement, but there are some things you could add to make it even better. On the morrow,
sirmadam, on the morrow!1329198
Mmmm, okay. And that's 'miss'.
1329203 My apologies, miss! However, I noticed you made the assumption tha I was male as well!
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AAHHHHHHHHH
Okay, about that flashback. Just to clarify, in my mind this is where the "flashback" begins.
But you see, it's not very well introduced. We're just sort of thrown into it. My advice would be to have a paragraph whose only purpose is to say "Okay, now you are reading a flashback."
It could look something like this (edits in bold):
See what I'm saying? Because you've devoted a significant portion of the chapter to that memory, it makes sense to give it a proper introduction. Plus, this way you can avoid having it all in italics.
That's a huge run-on sentence, better split it up.
That's a redundant past tense.
Dunno what went on there, but it's quite the mess.
Perhaps you mean courageous?
Everyone's favourite mistake...
Anyways, there are a bunch more little things, but that's as much as I'll be doing for you for now. There are lots of people on this site who would be willing to help you out, though. Check out the two major proofreading groups, the Proofreaders group and Looking for Editors.
Good luck and happy writing!
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Twilight
me not happy with you
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xD
QUESTION FOR ALL
WHICH COUPLES SHOULD I DO NEXT?
Soarindash, Soarinjack, Pinkieburn, Pokeypie, Carajack, Rainbowfire, RariPants, CometSparkle or Twiorion. List others if you want.
Well dayum, girl.
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xD
DAYUM IS RIGHT
1376842Soarindash, carajack, Raripants, Pinkieburn and cometsparkle
those are my votes
OW!! I felt that insult Twi just threw a Flutters, like literally, I just felt a punch in the gut when I read those words.
Purple Cupcaes