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After saving her life, Fluttershy begins to form emotions for Big Macintosh; however, several obstacles get in the way: Not only does her shy personality get in the way of telling the stallion she is falling in love with, but arguments with Applejack and Big Macintosh are also interfering. Is Applejack preventing Big Macintosh to love her, or is he just not interested in Fluttershy? Maybe with the help of the Cutie Mark Crusaders they might be able to help Fluttershy gain the strength to tell Big Macintosh her true emotions.

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Sorry, this was all I could think about while reading this.

Well....I read the discription and I lost intrest, BUT, maybe I'll give it a read...later

ahem

:yay::eeyup:

FLUTTERMAC!!!!!

That is all.

Interesting...very interesting indeed.:moustache:

947219 The average FlutterMac fanfic.

And that, ladies and gentlemen, is why FlutterMac is best ship.

Fluttershy sings, "ALWAYS I WANNA BE WITH YOU AND MAKE BELIEVE WITH YOU AND LIVE IN HARMONY HARMONY OH LOVE :flutterrage:" and big mac, "eenope?" :eeyup:

947563 "...IT CAN'T BE SEEN BUT THERE'S BLOOD ON THIS GREEN ONLY CELSTIA KNOWS IM INNOCENT! TAKE ME TAKE ME!:flutterrage:" "...:eeyup:"

947563 I love that SONGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

948464

yes :3 It's RUA sound track, although I was speaking about Erasures song its self xD

I like this idea, good job:eeyup:

Please, please, please make more! It is very good fic, so don't give up just now!!! MOAR!!!:flutterrage:
And please don't make it another clopfic... pwease?

959383pinkie promise. in fact, i just need to proof read the next chapter and have a friend of mine edit some things and have it up sometime soon :derpytongue2:

What is he, a love doctor!? :rainbowhuh:

Nice story so far. Tracking.

Besides a few spelling mistakes (Scotaloo), very good chapter! :pinkiehappy:

993774I will make sure to go back and fix a few of those

This is one of the very few stories i really enjoy.

995189thanks good to know :)
every good feedback makes me want to write more

Yah I found 4 mistakes: call it a light, yeay, Rainbow Dah, can't remember last 1 Hint: use Fn+F3

when Big Mac was thinking you should put what he was thinking in Italic
but still very good story:twilightsmile:

Great chapter and the dialog was very well done but there are some grammatical and spelling errors you might want to fix. :pinkiesmile:

It's spelt Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle btw

1201054 well i know i have a few things to work on in terms of grammar, but at least the dialogue is good

1204836 okay thanks, i will fix those soon and note that

957387hay i made more just as you yelled at me... i mean asked :derpytongue2:

Good chapter and stuff, its spelled Equestria by the way.

I'm just wondering if you have a pre-reader or not, there were some obvious mistakes in this chapter

1649878 yes i do, but i was just a bit too eager to get this chapter out after a 2 month absence. They will read it sometime today so i hope i didnt create too much confusion with my errors

1649878 if you wouldnt mind sending a PM and tell me the errors

1650921 Alright I re-read it and I think I found most of the errors

“Granny Smith. You don’t mind that, do ya?”

“Eeyup.”
After their exchange of information, Fluttershy

Needs an extra line after Eeyup

“An’ Big Mac,” the cowpony looked forward. “Yall don’t be stayin’ too long at Fluttershy’s. I’ll be needin’ your help, ya hear?”
She started to walk forward as he spoke a low “Eeyup”.

needs an extra line after "ya hear"

“CUTIE MARK CRUSADER BASKET RETREAVERS! YEAH,"

Retrievers

“I know that silly, but remember how Mrs. Chearly looked at Big Mac when we gave them the love potions?”

“Remember the time when we gave Big Mac and Mrs. Chearly that love poison?”

Cheerilee, also you call it potion the first time then poison the second time.

Big Macintosh nodded his head while the three young ponies shouted, “CUTIE MARK CRUSADER ANIMAL RETRIEVERS
ARE GO!”

You added an extra life after Retrievers

I think that's about it

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Don't leave me hanging.

2888693 im sorry, i have been too busy.
i actually ave another chapter finished and a new story to make up for my absence

How is it a sad comedy? Is it a sad story that's sometimes funny or a funny story that's sometimes sad? You don't need both.

Oooh I hate that rabbit! And an interesting metaphor with the wasps and the bees. I don't think I fully understand it, but it was clever. :twilightsmile:

I like the metaphorical imagery you put in there :ajsmug: I swear the only thing I want to happen in Season 4 more than FlutterMac to become canon is for someone to puny kick that little fur devil to Hell where he belongs

HA! get it, a Marikarp :3 maybe you didn't intend that but I got it.

Raritiy’s purple hair seemed to flow so gracefully when she turned her head and called to her sister, “Sweetie Bell, your friends are here to you up.”

here to you up?

you forgot a word here i think

good story just need some minor spelling/writing checks

What a cute puppy face, Apple Bloom! :applecry: Yeah. Like that!
It was really brave of Applejack, Big Mac, Fluttershy, and Angel to start saving each other. :scootangel:
I just love FlutterMac, don't you? :yay::heart::eeyup:
A love doctor, huh? :raritywink:

By the way, you might want to put in italics for the thoughts. Plus, there are some punctuations missing and some sentences could use some spacing in between. Also, Angel's a boy.

You've got a few typos in need of correcting. Otherwise, well done! :twilightsmile:
Big Mac, don't be such a pip! :rainbowlaugh:
It was nice of Dashie to help out in the farm! :rainbowdetermined2:
Way to go, Scoot! :scootangel:
Aw... Big Mac's gonna make a pie for Fluttershy! That's so sweet! :yay::heart::eeyup:

You misspelled Scootaloo a bit at the beginning and it's spelled "Apple Bloom." Also, there should be an "e" in "Belle." Animals need some correct gender grammar. And you've got some question marks that need to replace some commas. Meanwhile, well done!
Scoot's oversleeping, Miss Smartypants, Sweetie Belle unintentionally leaving a mess to annoy Rarity, Mr. Hawk nearly eating Mrs. Mouse, Big Mac and Angel's fights... :rainbowlaugh:
Aw... Cute moments between Fluttershy and Big Mac! :yay::heart::eeyup:
Anypony up for Whack a Gofer? :raritywink:

:yay: : I am the stare monster

You've got plenty to rewrite, but I love this chapter a lot!
Of course, Fluttershy would be responsible for Scoot's safety. Next to Dashie, she may be like a big sister figure. :twilightsmile:
Whack a gopher! :rainbowlaugh:
Aw... Look at the way Fluttershy and Big Mac are blushing! :yay::heart::eeyup:
Sweetie Belle's too cute to be scary! :scootangel:
Apple Bloom, you know love when you see it, don't you? :raritywink:

Aw... How adorable! Especially with the CMC and the FlutterMac hug! :yay::heart::eeyup:
Man, that fight between Angel and Big Mac was hilarious! :rainbowlaugh:
I have a feeling that all your chapters could use a little fixing.

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