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Pretty good story, only a few errors.
The then needs to be a than
There needs to be an a to make pointers
We needs to be we'll or add will after we
Its needs to be it's in this case. I got confused with it to, but it's is it is and its is plural
Overall great story man
Thanks for the feed back
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Welcome
bý chance , are ýou a furrý ? :D
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more... furry adjacent
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somehow that makes me afraid to ask :/ , there is lot of weird stuff around furrý communitý
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its more I am not a "fully" furry or anything but am pretty okay the "cleaner" stuff
Pretty good man
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Thanks
I believe you mean “aware” here.
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thanks for pointing that out
Don't you mean way?
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Thanks for pointing that out.
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Its fixed now, meant to be a one way trip
Interesting stuff so far!
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thank you
Flutterpred is best pred.
Second is Derpy-accidental-pred.
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Well she will make an appearance in a side chapter later
This is gold, not enough good Vore here on fimfiction. Keep up the delicious work.
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thanks man, I plan to keep this going for a while.
Excellent work love it keep it up and can’t wait for your next chapter
Pretty nice chapter. There are a few errors and thing that need added. But it's good nonetheless. I'll quote the places that need fixing and bold the things that need fixing or added
Or you can use by
“Prey ponies now pay to get eaten at your place of business?” The night princess tilted her head in amazement.
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Thank you for pointing these out they should be fixed now
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You're welcome
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Do you plan on any other types of Vore? CV/UB?
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Yes I do
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I will limit cv some as I prefer female/futa preds and While i enjoy cv I know a lot of readers don’f like futa stuff
Excellent work
Oooh, I'm really liking what you're building up here so far!
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Thank you
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Futa is amazing
Pretty Good. Just a few errors or needed words but good none the less. I'll do what I did last time and bold the needed stuff.
Don't know if this was intentional to show how scatterbrained she is right now. But just in case
But this was a good chapter, I can't wait to see more.
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thank you, I think I got them all.
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Welcome
Fluttershy is one very hungry pony
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just setting up a B story for funnies
Excellent work
Pretty good. Just a few errors and things that need added.
Up to you here, I think the will work better than that
A comma should be before anyone named when addressing them
Or you can use from
Might want to use a small variety of words for her sex
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thank you
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Welcome
I love this story and its ideas. Though I have personal preference for how far into vore to go I love the sweetness of this. Honestly I'm most interested in the princesses right now and wonder what discord would think of this. I also know if I was my oc here I'd be a prey pony through and through. I hope this continues.
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happy to have you here enjoying the story.
Oooh, intrigue!
Excellent work love you story can’t wait for your next chapter
Great work can't wait for more
Can't wait to see more