Pretty Good. Just a few errors or needed words but good none the less. I'll do what I did last time and bold the needed stuff.
The pegasus extracted herself carefully from her bed and shoved a dense fluffy pillow into the whimpering Twilight’s searching hooves. She crept quietly out of her room and shut the door with a sigh of relief. She proceeded to feed her animal friends as quietly as possible, a relatively easy feat for the shy pegasus. At least it was until Angel Bunny made his presence known. He thumped onto her back with a frown on his face and dumped his bowl of feed over his keeper’s head. Fluttershy gave a yelp and flung the bowl off her head and into her cuckoo clock, it gave a loud distressed squak before crashing into the floor.
“No Twilight I needed to get up and feed the animals.” Fluttershy said trying to keep the annoyance from her voice. “Angel Bunny decided to make a mess.”
Fluttershy gave the lagomorph on her back a sidelong stare, the presence of her prey-friend making her inner pred pony push through her usual demure nature.
“E-excuse me.” She blushed and bit her lip as Angel started struggling and squirming inside her. “Ohh I’ll have to tell Misses Bunny I need another one of her kids, she’ll be so disappointed.” The pegasus sniffled
“OkaysorryIwillbebacklaterbye!” She quickly blurted out and bolted before she made a fool of herself. The rational part of her mind wondered how she had let Fluttershy of all ponies dominate her, the prey part of it was too busy imaging being back inside her rightful place to listen.
“I really need to ask Zecora to make that taste better… Maybe Bonnie can help?” Fluttershy asked aloud to no one and proceeded to clean the mess of a cuckoo clock as some of her animal friends helped. It was going to be an interesting day.
Don't know if this was intentional to show how scatterbrained she is right now. But just in case
Twilight for her part hurried back to the library and tried to take her mind off of Fluttershy’s stomach by organizing and dusting the books.
“I can’t believe I left this place in such a mess.” She grumbled to herself. “I really need to get a better handle on things.” She hurried along getting everything cleaned as quickly and quietly as she could, her schedule with Fluttershy had made her an early riser even more so than normal leaving her plenty of time before Spike got up. After things were mostly spotless she rushed into the kitchen to make herself and Spike a nice breakfast of hay-bacon and pancakes on trays and took them up to their shared bedroom. Spike was curled up in her bed sound asleep when she slid his tray onto the covers.
“Oh darling, you have to relax, shopping is meant to be fun.” Rarity’s voice intruded on her thoughts. The fashionista had volunteered to join the skittish pegasus to help her muscle through her shopping.
“It's alright darling, he agreed to lower his prices for you.” Rarity nudged her to the counter.
“I insist darling, now let's head over to Sugarcube Corner.” Rarity nudged the shy pegasus along who did her best not to lick her lips at her marshmellow looking friend.
But this was a good chapter, I can't wait to see more.
Excellent work
Oooh, I'm really liking what you're building up here so far!
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Futa is amazing
Pretty Good. Just a few errors or needed words but good none the less. I'll do what I did last time and bold the needed stuff.
Don't know if this was intentional to show how scatterbrained she is right now. But just in case
But this was a good chapter, I can't wait to see more.
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thank you, I think I got them all.
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Welcome