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Makutaxarxas


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10866954
Thanks I will, I hope that the second chapter will be finished by the end of next week.

This is one of those rare situations where I will comment, and it is to tell you to find an editor/proofreader. I haven’t read the story, and that is entirely due to the quality of the summary, or teaser.

I love the premise, but the sheer number of misspelled words and grammatical errors turned me away immediately.

I don’t mean this to be hurtful, only helpful; first impressions count for a lot. If you can’t find an editor/proofreader, then at least try to run it through an autocorrect program like grammarly.

Don’t let this dissuade you, and if you fix the errors in this story then I might give it a read.

10867193
First of all, thank you for your tip.
My native language is not English and I struggle a bit with grammar.

Again, thank you for your advice.

I like it! i hope to see more of this.

Finally. I can’t wait for more. This is one of my favorite types of Vore and possession. Unfortunately there is so little of it. And then you come along.

10868120
There will be more, I can promise you that

I’m very interested to see where this story goes, keep up the good work!

10878140
You will have to wait till next Friday I'm afraid, the next chapter is a bit special for me to Wright so please be patient.:scootangel:

If you need a proofreader I’d be happy to volunteer

11118404
Thanks, I'm glad your enjoying my story

Well worth the wait… looking forward to the next chapter, whenever you get around to it of course :)

Good chapter. Though I'm wondering what that servant meant by "I can't take lady Velvet anymore!" Why was she wanting to quit? Why did/do the Sparkles have a high turnover of servants? It will be interesting to see where this goes.

not meant to be rude, but when will there's be update?

11278894
Yes im still working on it, tough i cant find the sight was to es to write it.

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