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The Bricklayer
Slow down, you're doing fine, you can't be everything you want to be, before your time... -Vienna, The Stranger: Billy Joel. (Any Pronouns)
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You know, since Lightning Dust was introduced in Season 3, technically you can enter this in Famous Last Word’s Right Back At It! shipping contest as well.
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Oooh, thanks for telling me that.
I swear to God, before I first saw the character tags for this, just by the title and cover art, I almost thought this was gonna be about Lightning Dust and Flash Sentry.
Boy was I embarrassed when I realized my mistake. 
Might be because I've been planning a story of my own with such a pairing so I just have the association on the brain!
I quite enjoyed reading this story! I think you present a good alternate take on Lightning Dust - she's sociopathic, but not a total true sociopath. More "damaged goods" than irredeemable, and you do a good job with the way her character is presented here. (I didn't expect the relation between her and Sky Stinger, but it makes sense. Also, really well-done with what little we get about her parents, it makes an all-too-depressing amount of sense.)
Soarin' was interested to read in this. In some ways he's a lot more mature than I might expect from him in canon, but it's handled well enough that I can't (and more importantly, *won't*) complain at all. Also I really liked the scene bringing in Berry Punch as well with the coffee, that was nice. Though to go back to Soarin' for a minute, his armor-piercing question to Lightning was quite effective and very well-delivered.
And as for the sex in the story... yeah, it felt pretty fitting to the characters involved. I can totally see Lightning just wanting to go for the rush and forget the buildup.
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Yeah, I was at a loss for good titles, and decided to make a reference to the cover art itself, which is titled All Flash and No Substance. I know, not very clever of me.
High functioning sociopath really, she's got some good qualities but they're buried deep down. Very deep. Interesting note, one possible ending was Lightning running a bookshop of all places and meeting up with Rainbow. The conversation would have gone something like:
"So what, we're just... friends now I assume?"
"Hardly, Dash. But I think we can learn to tolerate each other. For Soarin's sake."
"...yeah, that'll do."
And interesting note, in Sky Stinger's childhood flashback, we do see a very little filly who looks rather... familiar.
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I just ran with it.
I'd imagine Soarin' is fairly mature, he just has a tendency to goof a bit. Given he seems to be second in command, that speaks a fair bit about him. I did have another alternate ending planned, a sadder one with after Soarin' delivers his response, Lightning just continues to deny and deny. The relationship just... ends. Lightning only afterwards realizes what she's lost, Lots of alternate endings. But the way the story ended up developing, Lightning realized she was in love with Soarin' before that and so the ending didn't end up becoming viable.
Helps this isn't my first rodeo with Soarin', if you forgive the pun.
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Ahh, it's fine. Sometimes you just gotta go with the obvious thing. My planned Flash/LD story is gonna be titled something like "In a Flash of Lightning" or something, which I think is pretty unoriginal, but I was just stumped.
Huh... that *is* interesting. I would almost like to see that written up! XD
Son of a... you're right!
Good point!
Oh damn. That *is* sad. Glad you went with the one that's posted here then! XD
Hm. I’m not the biggest fan of cussing in the exposition and the daddy issues thing is pretty cliche. But the general message about trying to find some good in what others may perceive to be a lost cause still resonates with me. There’s quite a lot of stories where all the antagonist needs to make a positive change is someone willing to look past all that and see the good in them (of course they also have to be receptive to the gesture). Anyone who knows my history will know I’m in the devils advocate side of this age old debate about ld given I find the writing with her episodes very flawed and leaving much to be desired. Call her my guilty pleasure.
This is a surprisingly deep story, given that it's 'just' 5000 or so words. This contest has created some amazing ships and stories that aren't explored that often. Damn shame that this is so criminally underviewed though, it's definitely one of my favourites!
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I wasn't doing this for the views anyhow, I was just doing it to see if I could pull this off believably.