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Monsters, they're not real right? Well they are, but that's not a very widely known fact. They have stayed hidden for a long time. Until that day. She crashed, straight into the Everfree. She got the 'Blessing' the mother called it. But that doesn't mean Rainbow Dash thought so. Because she was the one, the one to be 'infected', giving her advantages, but it made her something else.

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Pagazo Lamia... is that Italian?

has potential...

Nice start, but one thing. Telekinesis is moving objects with one's mind. What you are describing is telepathy, communicating and reading minds.

1067909 I actually just tried to find fancier way of saying "Pegasus Vampire". No real thought behind it :twilightblush:

Nice copied picture from this story.

1068400 Not where i found it, but sure, you think that... :twilightsheepish:

1068405

Your title tricked me!
I was expecting a Lamia :pinkiesad2:
Never mind, always a good story nonetheless.

“Off towards Chapter 4!”
Well... This is chapter 2. If Pinkie will not be present in chapter 3, then all correct. But if she will be (because chapter 3 became chapter 2), this needs fixing.

For now, reading more... :pinkiecrazy:

Edit:

come to bites us later

Um... Does it should be written this way?

pretty good but i think rainbow is a little to logical about what has happened there was no freaking out no yelling.....:rainbowhuh: plus it was never explained how she had to convert followers or if she could feed off of them or did she need new blood each month just some constructive criticism:twilightsmile:

What happened to the prologue?

1069433 I have no idea... It should be back now though:twilightsheepish:

It's missing something... I just can't quite figure out what it is for sure. I don't think it's quite emotional enough. The characters ramble on too much, even the ones who don't usually do so. I'm also not oa big fan of Pinkie breaking the fourth wall that overtly. Her fourth wall breaks tend to be more subtle.

Still, it's good enough for me to keep an eye on it, at least for now.

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You need to work on dialogue, description is ridiculous in this seeing as its overused.
My best advice is to study a writer that is far more popular and been here longer in order to improve upon your writing.
I like the concept, I just don' like the execution.

Damn! I was just about to post my Rainbow Dash vampire story! With that picture!

tis' alright, requires additional build-up.

“Off towards Chapter 4!”[/i pinky i hate you so much right now:twilightangry2:

Looks interesting, though with the word 'Lamia' in the title, I never would have known this was a vampire fic.
I'll see about reading and ediing this comment when I get around to it.

please tell me ur gonna finish this story?!?:rainbowhuh:

1102859 I should do that, shouldn't I? you could say i was a bit off for a while, but let's just say I started on the next Ch and let's keep it at that :twilightsmile:

1104331 sweet :pinkiesmile: i hate half finished storys

1106146 Only half-finished? Sorry but this one is supossed to be a long one...:twilightsheepish:

1106483 thats good i just finished reading Inner Demons and that was long and i loved it:pinkiehappy:

Now you are all probably thinking something like: What is this doing in my favourites? Yeah, i know, I've been gone for a while, and i'm sorry about that, I really am, but I've been trying to clean some things so to speak. There are not a lot of edits YET, but they are coming soon, I will let you all know when that fact does into play.

As for the chapter: What did you think? Was it too much filler? Something off? Oh and that last scene needed to be there, I don't do something without meaning, just saying. I should probably stop before I let spoilers run free (WEEE!!!)

Oh and thank to the master proof-reader of this as of right now (More people are coming actually) : Meeester the amazing!

*Smashes head into keyboard* YAAAY! *Dies*

finally an update
"reads"
well wow, that was GREAT
KEEP IT UP

1181197 Something that discouraged me, was the fact that as soon as i published this chapter, Past Sins appeared on the front page... That was pretty unlucky for me I guess... Though, I'm going to read that now, so yeah...

It was really good in my opinion. I enjoyed it.

:pinkiegasp: FINALLY! An update!!!

Edit: Just as good as I thought it'd be!

Actual reaction was: "Hm... I remember reading it. Hey! IT HAS UPDATED!
Read it NAOW!!!!!!!"

The chapter seems nice. Yay for new chapters! :yay:

I already read past sins before it hit Fim. So I put the new one on a backburner to read later.

I like continue.

Plz do another update soon the waiting is killing me :fluttercry:

1212762 I know I'm bad about that, but i'm doing a lot of background work right now. And then there's school... I got home 5:30 pm today... So yeah, no fun... And well, I promise that tomorrow I will start writing seriously, there is just a lot to be done :twilightsheepish: :twilightsmile:

Yes, yes, here it is... Hope you enjoy! First 4k chapter, YAY for length! :twilightsmile:

And obscessed Scoots is fun to do... :twilightsheepish:

Something of high value to me. Oh the suspense :derpyderp1:

So far this is one of you best chapters I like how you change the way vampires turn people. It makes it more easyer for the vamp and his/her victim no pain!
Sucks that It ain't real though ( btw I'm a vampire)

Aww, so Rainbow won't be going around biting everything and everypony?! So sad... :pinkiesad2:

1242276 Not yet:pinkiecrazy:

I have a "insane" part planned...

OH god, i just gave you a spoiler... GOD DAMNIT! Oh well...

That will happen after the first five though... Not soon though:twilightblush:

Yes finally new chapter :pinkiehappy:

OMG twilight said and i quote There is one exception, but that’s a very impossible situation. I SPY SOME MAGICAL THING INVOLVING TWILIGT AND RAINBOW AND A FUTURE TWILIGHT VAMPONY AND YOU CANNOT SAY NOT TO THAT YOU JUST OPENED THAT PATH ON THE STORY SO YOU BETTER FOLLOW IT:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

1242772 Uhh, I know? Kind of did that on purpose... I just don't get why anyone doesn't get the obvious hints I throw at the screen with every chapter... :ajbemused:

1242848 *cough* Page Sex *cough* :trixieshiftleft: :trixieshiftright: :trixieshiftleft:

1242999 I meant that more like "Secret" But oh well, I can go with yours as well... :twilightblush:

1243017 It's very clear that Twilight want hot vampiric sex, and so that is what it will be called! :pinkiecrazy:

1243034 TRUE STORY BRO!

good work on everything so far. I will keep my speculations to myself.

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