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A harsh storm brings Rainbow into Twilight's home. However, she soon discovers something about her friend that will cause a downward spiral in their relationship, many bruises, and broken bones as they attempt to right the wrongs fate has bestowed them.
The two find themselves closer than ever as they experience the world in a way they'd never expect. Will they survive?
Read the sequel here: Tamed II - As Time Went On
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You aren't even going to explain how Rainbow Dash failed her dream? How does she fail at being a Wonderbolt!? She isn't crippled, so how can she not become a Wonderbolt!? Ugh, your story lacks reason or logic.
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Well, I haven't gotten to it yet. Tis only the first chapter.
Awesome
Really liked this first chapter so far. Looking forward to seeing what exactly happened to Rainbow.
Can't wait to see what happened to dashie
Thanks to the semi-success of this story, I've decided to continue it and have already outlined the next chapter. I'm attempting a 4,000 words per chapter structure so this might take a day or two. Feedback's always welcome and thanks again for reading/faving/watching/etc.
Chapter 2 - Before the Fall
"Twilight kicked back and sighed contently."
I believe you meant Rainbow here.
And also...
That was a cliffhanger out of freaking nowhere.
Not as in its bad, but as in it made me actually surprised.
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Ah, thanks for catching that. After you type those names a hundred times you get them mixed up.
Pretty mean cliffhanger, huh? I'll try not to do it too often.
Celestia damn you for hurting Twilight physically and emotionally
also i can see why Rainbow wouldn't want to tell anypony about that, it is quite embarrassing.
Because I always have to ask...
Why tragedy? Does the story end in tragedy?
FOR GOD OF CELESTIA , NEXT CHAPTER NOW
anyway, good story bro
Chapter 3 has been outlined. As usual it should take no more than 2 days. I'm rather enjoying this.
Chapter 3 - The Little Things
I WANT MORE!
oh man...i have been checking this every hour
i desperately need to know twilight's OK!!
well shit
that is unfortunate
Faved. Looks interesting.
I see two outcomes of this cliffhanger :D
1. Rain and twi gets severly injured if rainbow can't catch her because a sonic rainboom to the ground kinda hurts
2. Twi gets severly injured because rain didn't catch her in time... broken ribs and all that maybe death... it is a tragedy and sad story so far there havn't been so much tragedy or sad moments at all the only thing i think is about the wonderbaults(sp?)
i can't see other possibilities since there is a tragedy and sad category in this story
either way i think it is a interesting story
Well, I hope this chapter doesn't shatter your expectations. Had a tough time writing this one, but I tried to keep it as interesting as possible. Enjoy?
I've finally formulated the entire story in my head. It's just a matter of writing it now. For those who were curious about the tragedy tag, it does come into play later so I'm not just throwing that one in.
First: I'm glad that you didn't make things... erm... worse.
I mean yeah it doesn't exactly seem like a picnic, but I've seen worse things happen in other stories.
Second: Pretty unique if you ask me. The horn thing I don't think I've seen.
In all other cases, at least in my memory, she was simply without magic. Makes this an interesting twist.
628380 expectations shattered. Raising quality bar. Looking forward to next chappie
Two mares: broken.
I'm liking where this is going.
BEWM, AWAY WITH THE FLOOR!
This sounds like a good story to me.
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Starting in the middle and slowly revealing the events that lead up to present-time is a completely legitimate style of storytelling.
I have some odd feeling that dash and twi are gonna work there way up to magic/flying
i mean, dash is nitro enough for that
Or they'll both die
that could happen too
“Thank you, Twi…” She reached up and gripped the cup in both hands. She proceeded..."
Whoops.
One thing I'm noticing is that Twilight is oddly uncaring about Dash's issues. More than once, she's mentioned the whole episode being "worth it" because she'd get the answer to her question, and yet, at the same time, she's constantly remarking on how out-of-character Dash is behaving. Generally when a friend takes a sharp left into depression and melancholy, one tends to be rather immediately concerned about them. Truth told, that question she had should have been forgotten the moment she realized Rainbow Dash had apparently been crying in the rain just outside her window for quite awhile. Considering you've mentioned the changelings, I can safely assume that this story takes place after the royal wedding, meaning that they've been friends for some time, so this can't be an instance of the mild apathy of someone who isn't terribly well acquainted with the person in question. An in-character Twilight would never treat her friend's problems like they're completely inconsequential, if only because of how strongly they're effecting said friend. After all, treating your friend's problems seriously was the Aesop of Lesson Zero, was it not?
Basically, so far as I'm concerned, this is the summary of your story insofar as I've completed it: "Rainbow Dash pulls a complete 180 and becomes emotional, weepy and distraught. Twilight grudgingly helps her through her petty problems, all the while impatiently waiting for a chance to ask her a question about the mechanics of being a weather pony." So now you have two ponies acting totally out of character, and little to no explanation. Rainbow Dash being OOC can be hand-waved, as that's obviously a part of the overarching plot. Twilight's attitude, on the other hand, speaks to me of being more a case of poor characterization than a plot-related anomaly.
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I was wondering when someone would point out that I may have taken a few liberties with the characters. It is daunting to keep in mind everything that has happened on the show as well as events that I've created. I had purposely placed the story after the final episode and I had attempted to leave an uncertain gap in time between the final episode and this story. This was so I could hypothetically mold the characters gradually into how they're acting in this story.
I knew going into this that I would have a tough time keeping the characters attitudes and reactions familiar and canon. I'll try a little harder to make sure that they are little more believable in those regards. Thanks, Satoshi, for taking your time to mention this to me as I'm sure other readers have noticed the same errors.
And the "hands" thing...inexcusable.
Well, it kept bothering me so I decided to do a tiny rewrite of the first three chapters. Nothing major has changed, but taking Satoshi's advice, I changed and rearranged some of the dialogue and thoughts to make the characters seem a little less off. I'm hoping that'll make it easier to read.
I haven't started on Chapter 4 yet, but the story should really pick up on this one.
Chapter 4 outline done.
Chapter 4 - Pins, Needles, and Tendrils
Let the speculation begin...mwhaha!
This is very interesting, I absolutely love this story so far, the plot is so, soooooooo amaaaaaaazing.
well they both got in an accident like i thought... but i kinda want to know how rain got twi to the hospital...
... otherwise the story is really good and you got a thumbs up and a fav from me 
Awesome!
You confused your tenses quite a few times, but that's my only complaint. The story seems good so far.
okay, you can stop the tragedy now, I'm starting to get sad ...
cliff hanger
Subliminal magic. Oh crud.
Wait, did Rainbow just say Twilight had pretty eyes?
Bammm,
oh I still dash is going to fly again, she's nitro enough
No ones going to die right?
Please make this story have a happy ending 
Also AWESOME chapter! 
Chapter 5: The Laws That Bind
An…omelet? It’s…did I do that? Twilight gasped.
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Now I'm gonna go and drive my head through the nearest wall
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In hindsight that was pretty bad. Removed to save myself some embarrassment.
No more goofy nonsense I promise.
hmm interesting... i still hope you do a flashback about what i said in my last comment other wise it is nice :D
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I'll definitely address it, but most likely not in the next one. Probably the one after.
Awesome!
i'm getting more confused every chapter
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Then I think I'm succeeding? I like it when I leave the reader speculating after each chapter, but if there's something that genuinely doesn't make sense I'd like to fix it. After all, I have most of the story laid out in my mind so it's hard for me to spot some confusing moments. More than likely, I will answer questions as the story goes on.
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well i keep reading so i guess it's a good thing.
and the reason i was so confused was because of the omelet thing last chapter, then i read this.
but you changed that so it is much less confusing now..
Need MORE!!! great story with my favourite pairing.
I HAVE BEEN CALLING SHE WOULD FIGHT BACK TO FLYING THIS WHOLE TIME
KNEW IT
Also, I lol'd at the cutting off her casts with a knife because I've done that.
Had to play a show ya know
Now it's RAINBOW'S turn for some psychological torture! YAY!
What is wrong with me?
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I asked myself that too.
Chapter 6: A Date With Destiny