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Tentacle rape
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I guess I should have seen this comment coming in retrospect, and I'm glad it happened too. It almost makes me forget that an innocent pony got dragged off to her probably death.
I kid though, she's not dead, but she'll wish she was.
This is really good
I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT :D
hope this wont turn into a "cupcakes" moment for Dash
and i know its for dramatic effect,but running from something for 10 years, and they said it gets faster every time, then lol
WHAT THE FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
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Um....is that a good comment or a bad one? I can't tell.
WoW!!! this is nuts! I have never seen a pony story like this before, I am loving every word of it!! its just apple-tastic!
Please for all that is friendship keep going!
PS. Twilight and Dash are the cuties shipping! good work!!
Great overall, but the cupcakes is kindof lazy writing and IT MAKES ME MAD ARGN
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It's an interesting story, but yes, I agree with Trill. Using Cupcakes here is really lazy. You'd have Way more impact if you actually did something original, rather than blatantly copying the idea of someone else.
Pinkie has the potentiality to go mad in so many hilarious and scary ways, so using a clichéd manner which has already been referenced a few hundred times in other fanfics doesn't add any emotion to the story. Well, other than eye-rolls and thoughts of "cupcakes again, sigh".
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Am I really going to have this problem? I don't mean to be snarky about this, but I'm sure it was kinda obvious that this was a throwaway reference, that we could all just laugh at the in-joke and move on. Also I'm sure it was obvious that Dash survives this deal, since A:she shows up in the prologue, which takes place after the majority of the story and B: the chapter is called Party Crashers, what did you think was going to happen?
This was kind of funny at the beginning, where people did just laugh and move on, but now it's getting kind of tiresome. So here's the thing; this one chapter is going to be the only time Cupcakes shows up. One chapter. Is it really so wrong I pay tribute to one of the most over rated shock fics I've ever seen?
I hope this doesn't come off as overly bitchy, because that wasn't my intention. By all means, keep calling me a lazy ass for doing a Cupcakes thing, because it's true.
BTW Trill, love the picture. It made my day when I saw it.
man, being controlled or not, Pore Pinkie, how will she ever be the same after this... over all I think you did a good job on this chapter, but I really do feel bad for Pinkie, seeing how she looked to be have seen everything the shadow pony mad her do...
I know this is a Romance and dark Dark story. but I would like to ask, is it mostly dark over Romance , Romance over dark? or 50/50?
and Yes I know it to soon for any Romance, a rushed Romance will do no one any good.
this is looking to be a real long story, I am soo happy about that please keep it up!!
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I dont know I cant tell ether
Great story, But I have to agree with Zanzibar with the cupcakes reference. Not that I think it was a lazy point or something, but I have read so many cupcakes sequels and stories with references to it that I am honestly sick of it. But hay, You are the writer, your will be done.
In other words, I am enjoying this story greatly. Keep the literary gold aflowin as they would say.
Pore Pinkie..... Just Pore Pinkie... but Dame Pinkamena is a beast! LOL
I love this story. I just wish there was a bit more Romance. But I am loving this!!
Brutal takedown...
The ending was good enough, I feel like it wasn't as abrupt as you made it out to be..
Same here it is very good
I expected Pinkamena to be in control since Pinkie is to spaced out. but oh well this ending is cool too.
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Yes, that Dash would survive was obvious. But that wasn't the heart of the comment. Nor is this what I would concider an "in joke". An in joke is generally a reference in passing, whereas here you spent 2500 words where you recreated a fairly significant part of another fanfic.
That goes beyond making it an "in joke" and is what makes it come across as too much. Squandering an oportunity to make a good, emotional scene only to go for what can only be concidered a fandom cliché that I doubt there's many who conciders powerful anymore.
That it will only show up in this chapter doesn't change anything either ;).
Alas, the problem with posting your story publicly. You get opinions on it, and I'm dang good at giving those :P.
reading stories with massive time gaps like this kinda makes me sad and full of nostalgia..
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All fair points, and I wouldn't be the writer I am if I didn't take all forms of criticism to heart, even if they do sting.
As long as your enjoying the rest of the story aside from that one part, I'm ok with it.
nice cant wait for more
Great, great, great, chapter!!!!!!!! I wish there was more to read!!
please keep it up!
Yeah you gave yourself a big choice, either come up with a lot of events during the 10 years their gone or just pick the most important.
also either show their friends side in this 10 years or ignore it.
Its a big time, it would be strange if their friends after a month didnt ask the princess about it,and then the princess wonder where they really are.
She has a whole country that can look for them after all ,so her just sitting back and wondering where they are doesnt really seem like the princess.
this chapter was rather short, and only think new is the sword,? Not your best of chapters, But I trust you to know what your doing!
Hmm when i left the chapter had ~1500 words, now 2300
Bill O'Reilly: You cant explain that.
lol,anyway good interesting chapter.
Wonder who the thief could be, hope not Pinkie ,preparing to sacrifice someone
well good luck with the real life stuff
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I think it only seems short because the last chapter was twice as long. STRANGE, ISN'T IT?!
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Just as planned.
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It's fine now. The next chapter should be up soon enough, just as soon as I figure out a path they should take.
Fan girl sea Pony, $43.25
Rainbow with a song stock in her head. $126.22.
Twilight getting a brain-freeze Priceless 
i sense some pairing about to form here
Not that I dont mind since twidash is the best..
39889 Confusing is right! what was all the mess with Cheshire Twilight? that seemed well out of left field
I saw that Cheshire Twilight. was making a reference to a few other stories. witch was sort of funny, but over all this was just con Confusing
I did not see much emotion out of Twilight or Dash, they seemed way to exasperating over everything, almost like they don't care?
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Really, that's weird it made sense when I wrote it. I guess I am losing my mind.
If it does seem confusing, it's probably just how I write. I usually think up the big details first and make up the smaller details as I go along.
understandable so far....
nice OC antagonist.
may i ask if i can borrow him for a possible future fic?
When i make an account
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As long as you give credit to where he originally came from, sure.
40121 please not I am in not way putting down your story, as I said be fore I am really enjoying it greatly!
40121 please note I am in not way putting down your story, as I said be fore I am really enjoying it greatly!40811
Very nice story you wrote, I have one of these written myself on Deviantart, once I get my account back on here I'll post it here.
I'm enjoying your story much.
I like this story alot, but there is something I'm not getting 100%
Is this suppost to be a TwiDash? Its my fav shipping.
I like where this is heading.. Defiantly the part where they have to keep moving around with eachother, TwiDash is my favorite shipping, so I am looking forward to this.
How long must we wait for more?
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Oh crap I'm sorry. I keep getting distracted by the romance ponies. Hopefully I'll get the next one done soon.
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Don't rush it, I am glad to know it wasn't CANCELLED or anything like that.
Patience is a virtue. I. Must. Be. Patient.
MOAR!
Honestly, I just hope they talk some sense into Pinkie. It's terrible to see her so torn up about something Twilight and Rainbow would never hold against her. Then again, none of them have any idea what happened...
Honestly, I'm not sure I could take 10 years of running from something that wanted nothing more than to kill me. Though, I suppose you would get used to it after all that time.
oh update yay
Reading this (entire thing) was strangely satisfying while listening to the Moon OST.
Woah... this story still exists.
Fluttershy yay!
Welcome back my dear sir (or madam?)!
I enjoy your 63 Files as well.
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Not to spoil anything but, I think Carver hates love. This is when the story gets into play right? Climax? Resolution? Falling action?
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They have raunchy sex every night and throw jars of sexual fluids at him, banishing him to the moon.