Have you ever noticed how just reading a book makes the characters come to life?
Have you ever paused to think what happens to them once the story finishes?
Twilight Sparkle is just about to find out …
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Bronyxy
Pony fan inspired by great writers such as Pen Stroke and Conner Cogwork
Bronyxy
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Seriously the best story I've read in the last week!
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You just know something's about to go down!
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Why, thank you!
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You are very welcome, sir/ma'am.
[Curtsy]
Nice, short and cute, I like it
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Thank you - I had fun writing it!
That was extremely clever. Could you do this with other fairy tales?
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Thank you!
I liked the idea that a good story comes to life when you read it and then imagined the whole thing as a play, with every book having its own cast locked away between its covers.
No reason why I couldn't have chosen any other fairy tale, but I had the opportunity to be part of a local production of Cinderella and so that kinda stuck in my mind. It was also a fun opportunity to hand out suitable roles to favorite MLP/EQG characters!
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I can imagine. I may give this a try myself.
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You could make it really dark if you gave the characters the self-awareness to realise they were trapped. I was toying with the idea, and even showed that Celestia's Fairy Godmother character had developed this awareness, but chose to lighten the tone sufficiently that I could still publish it with an "E" classification.
Good luck if you go for it!
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I think I will.
Nice little short story. I did notice that you were missing some commas around some of your quotation marks, but it wasn't too distracting. Still, if that's something that concerns you, I'd recommend referencing a guide of some sort as you write.
Have a Like. :)
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Thank you - do come back again soon!
This was cute, funny, sad, scary, interesting, exciting, deep, and adorable at the same time! I LOVE this story! The idea, and the initiation of it; poor book and its characters, though. I'm glad Twilight escaped in time. Foalsitting Flurry Heart is fun but scary! XD
This is my first thriller story/rated E/episode-like thriller I've ever read; hooray! You write everypony's interactions really well - they feel as real as the do in the show/in-universe; even as book-character ponies. They seemed really annoyed when Twilight was messing up or freaking out, LOL. Also, I noticed that you typed certain words like favorite the British way, which is cool.
"Twilight knew that now there was only one page left and having fun out of options, joined the others" -LOL I thought Twilight was finally relaxing and having fun in the story, but I realized it should have been "run."
"consciousness (librarian)" is consciousness the right word, here?
Don't forget the comma errors, punctuation and quotation marks needed sometimes...and add some more commas to make the story flow better. I love it, though!
Can't wait to see what you produce next!
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That part was scary/sad WITHOUT having a scary Teen rating! XD Or I'm a scaredy-cat sometimes.
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Wow! Thank you for so many kind words - I’m so pleased you enjoyed it!
I did make a couple of spelling mistakes didn’t I?
So sorry I missed them, but thank you for letting me know – I made the changes straight away!
I could have easily made this a whole lot darker by giving all the book characters the awareness of their situation from early on and developed their fears as they turn on each other in their desperation to escape. However, I decided against it as I still wanted younger readers to enjoy it without getting scared.
Thank you also for your support – you’re always one of the first to read my new stories when I post them, and it makes me happy to see how many you have added to your favorites. Seeing as you asked, I can tell you that my next story is just under 3k words, starring Fluttershy and Discord …
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Sometimes getting the “E”/”T” balance right can be a bit challenging, but I’m pleased you found there was just enough suspense without it getting too scary.
Look forward to seeing you again soon!
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You're welcome, and exactly!
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That's OK, I love your stories. And that's pretty cool!
My FlashLight-loving heart approves of that cast.
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Thanks - I figured if Twi was Cinderella, then who could possibly be her handsome prince ...
So pleased you approve!
One must wonder how Flurry came up with that spell
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A combination of foalhood innocence and that awesome alicorn power - she liked the story of Cinderella and she liked her foalsitter, so hey presto Twi became the starring role!