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No...Twilight please no.
Starlight? She's alive?!
That's what I want to know. If Starlight's here then...the others have to be...right?
Uh...what client?
Why not?!
Yeah, you did...you wanted Starlight to see the error of her ways, and teach her friendship, and you succeeded.
True....
Also true....
Yes...she did.
Merchandise....
.
Oh shit...!
That's what I wanna know!
I have know idea, and I don't know if I wanna find out.
To what?
Me too.
Alright you have officially gotten my attention bro! I'm loving this already, I cannot wait for more!
Well, shit that escalated fast.
Hmm... I'm mildly confused... why does twilight remember killing Pinkie pie? When did this happen? I must have missed something.
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She's referring to the memory she saw in the last chapter of Those Left Behind.
Sooo stoked. The original was done very well, keeping me wondering the entire time and ending with a bang. This isn't at all what I was expecting, but then again you've never done that
Trust in the author, they haven't given too many reasons to doubt the machinations of the stories in the past. Onward!
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I must have missed that.
Dangum, Twilight just can't catch a break.
Hmmmmm... Already we have some mysteries afoot.
Holding off on theories for now, but you'll bet I'll have some sometime.
Of course not!
No one messes with RD or Fluttershy!
Here comes Angryshy!!!
Dammit other Twilight! Don’t murder ponies! It isn’t nice man!
I wonder if she killed those Pegasus because of the time travel/universe jumping severing her connection to that spirit or something else?
I’m..... confused. Probably need a few more chapters.
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Here's something that might help. Recall what happened immediately after Twilight left Tartarus and returned to Equestria in the last story.
WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING OOOONNNNNNN
I see so this is another timeline caused by sudden scream in the first chapter, which prevent Dash to create Rainboom and restore the original timeline.
Well at least he didn't take a bite out of the sodding table, that wouldn't have done anyone any favors.
The Cutie Map?! Wait, is Spike in the...Sombra Verse?!
Called it!
...What?
No...no...no no no no no NO!!!
Oh boy...this may not turn out well.
I bet the other Twilight ended up in the main timeline with Starlight Glimmer?
Huh. This timeline is sounding pretty interesting.
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I think this is more of a daybreaker timeline. Because it was said that the days were longer, and Equestria has a queen. (Plus the cover art)
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Oh yeah, that makes sense.
Amnesia thing is great... until a certain sparkly pony wants him back. I’m excited as you are... Great chapter too! Although I am getting hints at a certain pony in charge Daybreaker isn’t it? doing something wrong. Oh well we’ll have to see.
Alt pinkie pie! I am looking forward to her backstory!
Hopefully.
Queen Daybreaker then?
Like a sniffling whelp?
That's what I wanna know?
There's only one problem with that Twilight...this isn't your Equestria.
Really now?
Whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa! Celestia/Daybreaker...killed Nightmare Moon/Luna?!
Of course.
...nopony survived? By Faust.
Oh boy....
True.
What the...?
Pinkie Pie!!!
Me too.
Well. This oughta be entertaining...
Interesting timeline. I like how this story is making it’s on Mythos while still connecting to its predecessor.
Oh there are so many amazing ways this could go. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Whoa, what was that?!
I bet not.
Just smile and wave Spike...smile and wave.
Well that worked out better than expected!!!
Enope!!!
Apple Family Stubbornness at its finest.
Oh Mac.
Totally.
I bet not.
Spike are you nuts?!?!
Certain pony....
No kidding!!!
Aint that the truth!
Oh Spike....
Oh I bet the cant wait to hear that!
Probably something not good.
So AJ moves to Manehatten in this timeline?
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Well technically she moves to Manehattan in the original timeline, but she stays there in this one.
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Yes, that’s what I meant.
Typical Dash.
Brave step you're taking there Flutters.
Losing you Dash.
Speaking of....
Never change Fluttershy, never change!!!
Yeah, about that Spike....
In this timeline, I wouldn't put it past her to do just that.
I came to the story...because of the title*Autism Intesifies!!!*
Overall i just read the first chapter, it's a good story to be partially honest
Curious about the Solar Guards and why Big Mac considers them worse than whatever's in the Everfree. And well, the thing itself. Another mystery timeline.
Yeah, Pinkie and Maud!
Dude, you are bucked...this is Pinkie and Maud your dealing with!
Yay for Maud!
...She did....
Clam down Starlight.... Fearing out is the last thing you need right now.
Your in the middle of a War induced Equestria, that's what.
One that were complete jackasses!
...it's a place that is the very opposite of the magical Equestria everypony knows.
No, no you have not.
Well....Starlight's awake. That's 3/4 of the party accounted for. But the last story's Twilight is still MIA. That...well she can take care of herself, but the others around her....I wonder if she's even in her alicorn guise, or if her default is just the light in the vague shape of a pony.
Well now, I wonder if Star is going to see what else she caused?
Inspired by another fic, I decided to try writing poems. So, here is one about this story (it's kind of fanfanfiction). It's far from perfect, but I hope you'll enjoy it anyway.
It is supposed to be taught from the point of view of one of the inhabitants of this new Equestria and talks about the Avatar of Vengeance (I think that's how it's called).
Alien creature made of light
Its eldritch shriek fills souls with fright
If you ever hear those screams
You'll be slain within it's beams
Hunting ponies on our land
None survived to tell the tale
All we know: its ghoulish wail
All have failed to make a stand
Its ancient origin unknown
Even to the royal throne
In this mystery it stays
Spreading tales about its blaze
The brave army of the light
That the shadows once expelled
Cannot win this endless fight
By the entity excelled
Hoo boy, scary Pinkie is always unpredictable. I wonder how she got to be the way she is in this timeline?
Well... I liked Those Left Behind but so far this not what I expected from a sequel. The epilogue of the first story was setting up Retribution!Twilight traveling to the original timeline and trying to return back to normal. Instead you immediately deviated into another alternate timeline that has seemingly nothing to do with the previous story. Frankly, it feels like a sequel "in name only" at this point.
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Actually, I had mentioned before I wrote the sequel that I wanted to switch prospectives from one Twilight to the other for the sequel. Make no mistake, Bad Future Twi is here, and is a very prominent part of the story, but this time Good Future Twi has the POV spotlight.
The reason it probably feels like a sequel in name only is because I'm working with more than just four characters, and BF Twi hasn't shown up yet. With a bigger cast, there's more to build when it comes to the characters, the plot, and the world, so all I ask is for a bit of patience. BF Twi will definitely have her arc, but as a whole, it's about far more than just her now.
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I can see what you're doing but my problem here is that you did not handle the transition well within the narrative. The previous story was building up a specific premise so readers will be going into the sequel with certain expectations but then you seemingly throw it away to tell a different story. On top of that, you seem to be taking time to re-introduce Bad Future!Twilight who was the protagonist of the previous story. In my eyes, this makes for a bad first impression.
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Perhaps you're right on your first point. While I had always intended to focus on GF Twi from her prospective, BF Twi had a lot more involvement in the beginning. The change stemmed from a combination of not know exactly how to go about my original plans at the time of conception, and a shift in how I wanted GF Twi to undertake her development in the story.
The result will end up being the same as I intended, but the path to get there changed, and unfortunate for those who wanted to immediately reconnect with BF Twi, that will have to wait a bit. That said, I was actually planning to introduce BF Twi in the next chapter, but given the point you're trying to make, that's neither here nor there.
You're disappointed with how the story started, and I can understand why, but at the end of the day, this is a completely different story with a different focus, and that's what I wanted to convey. If how I chose to start the story didn't meet your expectations, all I can say is I'm sorry to hear that, but I thank you for the input all the same. It reminds me that I need to reflect on how I write sequels in the future, not nust as an author, but as a reader who's become invested in the characters of the previous story.
Ah, it seems getting away from that dead world has done wonders for her sanity. Good to know.
Finally! Demon-Twi shows up at last!
Well, good to see the other Twilight. Her new form is interesting. The frost breath makes me think of Windigos? They're...kinda ethereal I guess, but it still leaves a lot of questions.
Hmm.... Welp, time to wait for the next update.
Wait, what I get here is that the Twilight that finally appeared in this chapter isn't necessarily the same thing as the Avatar of Vengeance or, at least that the Avatar has a mind of its own that this Twilight can't control. Perhaps the time travel separated them in some way... I'm not really sure about this though.
Anyway, I'm extremely happy that we finally get her point of view again!