• Member Since 11th May, 2012
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Spazzy Jamz


I'm a 22 year old musician from Jackson, Ohio. I like to read, write, and play video games in my spare time. I'm happily taken. Short and sweet.

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If it can go wrong, it's happened to Tristan Shay.

After his mother dies due to illness, the friendless, twenty-two year-old college dropout is forced to live on his own in an old house he's renting just outside of the city. One day, he receives a scroll in the mail from someone who calls their self "Princess Celestia", saying something about seven guests who will be taking a month long field trip to "his" world. This has to be the weirdest prank mail he's ever gotten...

Very first story ever. No sad rating due to only a few paragraphs of sad stuff that comes later in the story and the Teen rating is for light sexual content and possible flirting/shipping. Constructive criticism is always welcome :)

Chapters (19)
Comments ( 355 )

w00t. wanna read more...it's short..really but i love the story idea

1052220
Lol, there's a lot more to the story yet to come, but I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

1053789
Lol, glad to hear that! :pinkiehappy:

You seem to be jumping awfully fast into this.
Slow it down a bit. it would make it a bit more realistic. Then again, it's a story.
I still enjoy it, those were just some small faults.

1055107
Thanks for your input. I was actually wondering if I was speeding through a tad. But none the less, I appreciate the comment. And I'm glad you're enjoying the story :scootangel:

Shit's gonna hit the fan once they find the ham...:pinkiegasp:

1056590
I tried taking your advice the best I could. Not sure if I followed that completely through or not, but I'm glad you like it, regardless! :pinkiehappy:

1056630
I meant that you should slow down on things like the 'anatomy' thing in the first chapter. that joke would've fit prfectly the next day or o when Twi wants to learn about humans. Not ten minutes after they get there.

1056639
Ah, lol. I understand now. I originally intended that statement to be something that AJ thought Twilight was implying, not necessarily Twilight hitting on Tristan, but in retrospect, I can definitely see your point :)

Observing and waiting. Let's see where this goes.

Well that was a lil awkward:applejackunsure: but still gets 5/5:moustache:

There could have only been one way to make this funnier.

Pause for dramatic effect...

Awkward boner-poke.

I liek it. And it looks like somones got a crush :heart: :ajsleepy:

I Applaud you for being so good at setting up harems.

Ha, AJ stealing peeks at her new chest puppies. I think she likes them.

a man gotta do what he gotta do, FIRST!
now...
loving this story so far, cant wait for more

1096953
Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story! :pinkiehappy:

Dammit Twilight quite taking his smokes! Those are expensive!!!!!!!! :flutterrage:

I'm kicking myself for passing over this story for so long its awesome +3 manly :moustache: for you

1128179
Thank you! Glad you're enjoying the story so far! :twilightblush:

*sips some coffee and waits staring at the screen*

I would have laughed so hard if they had "accedentally" lost track of time in the clothes story:rainbowlaugh: oh and thanks for this chapter it maybe a little on the short side but at least it satisfes my inner MOAR! monster. :twilightsmile: keep up the awesome work mate:pinkiehappy:

1142255 my inner moar monster thanks you. lol:rainbowlaugh:

1142255
You have sated my hunger for casual comedy/romace/(and/or)adventure stories. Woops, look at the time, i'm hungry again.

This story does not have enough recognition. For that you get my bi-annual moustache. :moustache:

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Thank you! Moustaches are always appreciated! :scootangel:

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