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Foal Star


Just a Brony who writes fun Fanfiction

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O my gosh you are the best!
Not only did you make a story featuring my favorite character, Spike. You also made a well made story in general.
You my friend are awesome! :rainbowdetermined2:

A few minor spelling errors but overall great chapter.

Great chapter!
Really cute and funny.

Yay! I like this! I like how two of my favorite waifus are the youngest! Fluttershy is ABSOLUTELY ADORABLE!!! :raritystarry:

D'aawww!!! :twilightsmile: So very cute! Can't wait for next chapter!!!

Such a delightful new collaboration. Definitely enjoying Spike trying to show that he can handle such a massive responsibility. Especially given how the ponies retained their actual sizes with only mental regression taking place. That certainly increases the difficulty by a lot!

Starlight and Fluttershy are definitely, in my opinion, the cutest in this tale. They are so simple and getting along extremely well. They also don't seem to be causing Spike much trouble... yet.

Rainbow Dash going exploring was definitely adorable. Seeing how some of their personality traits still exist in a regressed state is most interesting. It kind of shows that, even when you may have been little, there were still parts of you that continued to always be there. :)

good story so far, can't wait to read more.

Discord peered over the stallion. “But could you handle it on your own?”

Spike isn't a stallion, he's a dragon. Even then, he's more like a colt, being young and all.

<LoL!> I knew Discord wouldn't simply remain idle during this misadventure. He definitely is aiding in keeping Spike extra busy as he attempts to win his bet with the draconaquus.

You made this chapter a lot of fun. The whole 'Water Park' theme for bathing was great. Feeding had its fun, too. Cutest moment, for me, was when Dashie fell asleep on the tray. Cute times!

Comment posted by marinus18 deleted Mar 22nd, 2018

I thought originally that Twilight was not influenced and was still fully mature. She just does this out of preference. It could help strengthen your story if Spike has someone intelligent to talk to.
You could give it a shot, it would kind of shake things up. Maybe something goes wrong and they do that as a sort of compromise.

D'aww! At least Spike got a nice end to his stressful, and sleepless, night. I'm sure he never rested better than when he had Rarity cuddling with him there in his bed.

Good to see Discord actively trying to sabotage everything. It wouldn't be him if he didn't manipulate the game in some sort of way.

This chapter certainly does well in showing how difficult it really is to care for little ones. One is a challenge while seven is just crazy! Spike will certainly need a long nap himself once this is all done.

I was kinda hoping Twilight wouldn't be regressed and was still mature. Just doing this willingly. It would give Spike someone to talk to.

Bravo! A grand conclusion to a fun story.

It was great hearing a callback to the Lyra and Bon-Bon story. I don't believe that story got finished but I do remember the adventure the mares of S.M.I.L.E. had started.

The scavenger hunt really put the cherry on top for the story. Twilight with Cheerilee, Bon-Bon with Rarity, Trixie with Dashie, and Derpy with Starlight and Flutters was super cool. I really liked Derpy's attempt to communicate with the little ones.

Nice story and wrapped up very well. I do like when you reference other stories you've written. It makes everything so much more fun. :)

That last bit of the ending. Are you going to turn that into a story?:trollestia:

Big Mac chuckled, “oh come here.” He hugged Applejack and nuzzled her taking a whiff of the smell from the powder and cooed, A light fog of magic washed over his mind for a second. “how about I teach you how to Applebuck?”

D'aaw! Big Mac is so sweet! He's a good brother!

I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL!!!
I also liked how Fluttershy said she wet the bed till she was 7, that was adorable! :twilightsmile:

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Well eventually but I don’t know when.or how soon. But we just left it open to do later

I can see why Starlight would want to be the youngest. Anyway great story usually I'm not a fan of stories like this but this is awesome! Keep up the good work!

I love how everyone got humilated especially Discord when Fluttershy out him in a diaper and dress. Though I think Spike deserved some humilation to!

Few errors and misspellings. But otherwise not bad.

Few errors there, but so gosh darn adorable, I can’t stop smiling

cuteness...overload...ahhh! *passes out from the over 90000 cuteness level* X_X

Discord smirked at his opening and made his plushie from bigger. The foals all turn to look at the sight cooing at the large toy. He clapped his puffy paws. “Hey I have an idea little ones, how about you all go and explore Ponyville? I bet you’ll have a lot more fun!”

Discord, you promised! :trixieshiftright:

Well this is adorable. Even though I read this already, it’s still a good story

Starlight acting like a dog chewing on a chew toy is the funniest thing I’ve ever imagined

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