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TwilieTheFoal


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The mane 6 are kidnapped. First, they were laid onto a machine, and next were being cared for by... roboponies. Robot ponies. They are regressed with no pony to save them, that is until Flurry Heart and Cadence come to the rescue.

WARNING: CONTAINS GROWN PONIES IN DIAPERS AND DIAPER USAGE. IF YOU DO NOT ENJOY THESE THINGS THEN DON'T READ!

This was a request from https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Psalty123
Kooky Gadget belongs to https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Psalty123
Nifty Gizmo belongs to https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Psalty123

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 19 )
Comment posted by Psalty123 deleted Jan 29th, 2018

It was good! Great job cant wait to see what else you write.:twilightsmile:

this is overly drawn out with a lot of meaningless actions did we really need to know what the stallion did to get dinner or after he woke up then the stuff you want to know about is glossed right over with "he did it with magic" it just all reads like well a painful request like you never wanted to do this story but you had to or something.

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Sorry it turned out that way.

I hope you enjoyed reading it at least. :fluttercry:

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some on and off it show you know how to write and have potential just not sure if you enjoyed writing this is all I look forward to future works that are your own creative ideas.

I'd dream to have this machine in every town.

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This just became a thought and I HAVE to put it down.



*Rarity coughs and sputters as she exits the sprayers*

Rarity: Oh dear! How uncouth! I-

*Rarity freezes when she sees snipping scissors and mane trimmers and notices her friends trimmed mane's*

Rarity: N-NO! YOU CANT! NOT MY MANE! IT TOOK SO LONG TO GET TO THIS LENGTH! PLEASE NO! I LOVE MY MANE ALMOST AS MUCH AS I LOVE SWEETIE BELLE; PLEASE DONT CUT MY MANE!

*Rarity goes offscreen and bits of mane are flying through the air as the machine gets to work on her hair*

Rarity: NOOOOOOOOOO!:raritydespair:

He walked inside of the shower and let the warm water splash onto his mane and coat. Once he was sure that his mane and tail were fully wet, he levitated a white bottle that was labeled 'Shampoo', he smelled it and the smell of coconuts reached his nostrils, making him smile. He opened the bottle and used his magic to let the contents of the bottle onto his mane and tail. He then put the bottle away and began to scrub until the shampoo was lost in his mane and tail. Then he levitated another bottle. This time it was labeled 'Body Wash'/ He opened the bottle and smelled it. The scent of apple cinnamon hit his nostrils, making him smile. He levitated a light blue cloth and then poured the contents of the bottles onto the cloth. Then he put the bottle down and began scrubbing his entire body. After that, he put the cloth down and went underneath the water. The water hit his mane and tail as he scrubbed the shampoo out of his mane and tail until it was completely gone. Then he turned off the tap and exited the shower.

Did we really need to know how he takes a shower, or the scents of the soaps?

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Probably not. This is an older story of mine and now I know that I don't always have to put in so much detail because sometimes the reader doesn't need to know absolutely everything. In this case, the reader didn't need to know how he took a shower. But back then, I was stupid and thought that in order for the story to make sense (clearly I forgot about time skips) I needed to type every last detail. Obviously, for the content it is, it clearly didn't need that shower scene.

kooky is gonna get it from cadence and flurry heart

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