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LunaTheFox


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Set a couple decades in the future, Applejack is on death's doorstep. Having been confined to the hospital, she wants to spend her last night with her wife, Rainbow Dash, outside of the walls of the hospital—as a free pony.


This story could use a re-write. That probably won't ever happen, but on the off chance that it does, I'll let people know.

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Comments ( 55 )

Inspired by the amazing music of Fox Amoore. In particular, "Anna", on his album, Fly and "Our Final Flight" on The FA Collection Vol. 1.

Also inspired by "Synchronicity" by A Hoof-ful of Dust for reasons unknown to me.

This story probably needs some close editing, which I'll be working on. I want this to be the best it can be, so if something isn't working, it'll get changed. As such, please let me know what you think of it and what I can improve.

The even 2,000 words wasn't planned. Just so happens my latest edit added 13 more words than it took out.

Edited and nitpicked now. No more even word counts for me. :(

I'd say, if anything, it could use a slight blurb as to how AJ got there, and maybe a more defined timeframe. The moving on aspect is a bit odd if this is an old age thing, for example.

First thing in the morning is not when I should read these stories, but I couldn't wait.

I thought it was beautiful. I love how you played up their strength and stubbornness, even in their weakest moments. Great job. I can't wait to read more from you. :ajsmug:

Shit man, first fic ever which made me cry, very very good!

I'm afraid to read this:pinkiesad2:

This strikes closer to home than some of us might care to admit.

Still, sad as the story is, there's the happier note: this was, after all, a successful romance. ("Until death us do part," as the humans used to say.) Not all of us can expect to be so fortunate.

After reading this I have some questions though:

Does AJ die of old age or from some other cause?
If from old age, I assume Rainbow doesn't have much time left to find love again (not that she'd want to)
If from some other cause, how come AJ is all RD has left? What about the other 4 elements?

Touching story though...

:raritycry:

ALL MY FEELS. ALL OF THEM.

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I've marked this as "incomplete", as I'm certain this needs another chapter now. I'm gonna go out on a limb and say that this is 20 years after the show, so it's not old age. I'll figure out a more "exact" time frame and cause of death while I'm playing laser tag at a brony meetup tonight. As for the other 4 elements, I'll be putting them in the second chapter. Think of Rainbow's thoughts as rather short sighted until I get around to editing and writing again. AJ's not all she has left, but when she says it, AJ's all she wants.

And thanks, all of you. :twilightsmile:

How come I didn't get thanked?

Cool story, btw. Just seemed short to me.

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Because you hadn't commented! But now you have, so thank you. :P
And I'm formulating chapter 2 and edits on this one, so it won't be this short for too long.

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If you don't, I may just have to leave you a very angry comment on your user page. :trixieshiftleft:
I'd favorite this, but for some reason my favorite button won't work.

Well, now that you say you are formulating chapter two, I eagerly await the next chapter!

thumbs up (and my questions about it have been asked by the people above me, so not much else to add)

touching.

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Thanks. ^_^

I shall be working hard on getting the next chapter done soon. I've already got most of the planning down and am 500 words into actually writing it.

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I somehow missed your comment. Thank you, too!

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Hey! You're that guy that wrote that thing. Loved yours, too. :twilightsmile:

Would you look at that. Chapter two! And this is the end of this particular story, but stay tuned, as I have plenty of pre-sequels (sort of chronologically before this... but not) planned for this. Eventually. :ajsmug:

Edit: No, that 2,250 word count wasn't planned either. Damn, I'm good.

ALL OF MY FEELS! ALL OF THEM. I AM TRYING SO HARD NOT TO CRY RIGHT NOW YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW :pinkiesad2:

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Glad you enjoyed it?

...you did enjoy it, right? :applejackunsure:

It's not hard to make me cry at a sad story, but it's hard to make me want more. That's what you did. Great job.

And chapter two was well executed.

Stop making me sad. Sad Church is not fun Church.

But I liked the story :fluttershysad:

934655 Yes I did...just...HHHHHHHHHHHHHG!

...What? I'm not crying, I just got sweat in my eye. That's all. :fluttercry:

Oh, darn. I don't normally cry while reading fanfics, though I have very recently since on this sight. The ending was what got me. So sweet of Applejack to make all those letters for memories. A nice story, really, though obviously terribly sad. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to find a tissue box.

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Thank you! That means a lot coming from you.

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Thanks, and I'll try to make the next one happier. Well, the ending will be happier.

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Go on, let it all out. You'll feel better, I promise. :)

Oh pony, how sad. :raritycry: All my tears, and an up-vote.

I wish you showed us what was in those letters, but either way, the story itself was beautiful and I mean that 100%
Thank you for the wonderful read :heart:

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Thanks! My next stories will be happier, I swear.

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Well, you're in for a treat, because I *am* going to be showing you those letters! Every one of my stories in this 'universe' will start (and maybe end... haven't decided yet) with another one of the letters from the box. In fact, this ending will lead directly into the story I have planned, which I should be starting in earnest soon.
I'm really glad you liked it and I hope you'll stick around for more. :twilightsmile:

:fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry: Many tears were shed. Good story, can't wait for the rest.

Ugh! Why do I insist on listening to the dead Island trailer music every time I read a sad fic? I teared up. It was short and sad, and hit me right in the feels, so kudos to you, and great writing.

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Thanks, and I can't wait for the rest either. It's on its way, but I have family visiting until the 31st. I was planning on being able to get more writing done while they were here, but just the opposite has happened.

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Ahh. Dead Island. The music was the only good thing to come out of that game. And thanks! :ajsmug:

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That is high praise, indeed! Knowing some of the preconceptions this fandom has about sad fics, I'm glad I could deliver something worth reading that you've enjoyed. I try very hard to find and explore original ideas or bring new facets to existing ones. I've noticed the same thing about ships; most fics involve ponies getting together and few are about the relationship itself after the fact. It's for this reason I'll be expanding this universe a lot in the future (that Applejack's hat fic is in this one). Killing Applejack was very hard to write, and it still hurts to think about it, but that's also where I draw my inspiration and moods from. 'Tis a necessary evil. I can't thank you enough for leaving such fantastic encouragement. Whenever I feel like I'm not doing something well enough, reading your comments brings some of that desire to continue back.

I tried resisting the manly tears that now flow down my cheeks... why, I don't know. This story was just straight up touching. Hits ya right in the feels. :fluttercry:

That's okay. I didn't need any of my feels anyway. :raritycry:

I started crying halfway through the letter. My god I am such a sap. It killed me made me crumble hurt so much was so. sad. :raritydespair: You're so good at this angst thing! :D There is seriously nothing I love more than a good dose of AppleDash angst. :pinkiesmile:

Oh my gosh. So sad. But so so so lovely. Must find a hankie now.... :fluttercry:

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You shouldn't try to resist. Sometime you've just gotta let it all out, y'know? i.imgur.com/VK1CV.png

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You might be interested in some of the plans I have for this, then! I probably won't get around to it for a long while, but the feedback I received for this fic was extensive. So far I have things planned that will likely double, if not triple the length of this and add a whole lot more substance. And yes, sometimes a heaping pile of angst is just what one needs. i.imgur.com/fIvet.png

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i.imgur.com/u3SP8.png Many manly tears were shed by the author as well.

I think this song is sutable for this chaptor

This story was very sad. Tears were shed and a heart was broken. The letter thing was amazing. I really want to read the sequel that you have for this but the link says that the story doesn't exist. Great story though. I really look forward to reading more from you. Keep up the great stories.

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Oh, whoops. I forgot to remove the link. I've since stopped writing that sequel and I'll be incorporating a lot more into this story whenever I get around to rewriting it. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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I look forward to the rewritten edition of this. You will be adding to a truly heartwrenching story. I wish you well in your future writings.

I feel like my heart is literally being twisted back and forth and then released like a slingshot, but the bindings won't let go. Thank you for such a wonderful story. Closest to crying I've been in so long.

Haven't read it yet but I can already tell I'm probably going to cry.:raritycry:

SHL

I almost cried in the middle of the class reading this marvelous story :fluttercry:

3482649 I DID CRY IN CLASS :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry: HOW DO YOU CONTROLLER MY FEALS LIKE THIS? I BAWLED IN CLASS AND GOT SENT HOME? I'M STILL CRYING! RIP APPLEJACK :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

I'm bawling my eyes eyes out right now. And that started when I read Applejack's note about her hat.

Hey Kraze!
I've read your story and done a reader-orientated review of it, which can be found here: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/424833/read-it-later-494-happy-new-year
If you want a private, author-orientated review, feel free to PM me, and I'll do my best to help.
Cheers!
--Bulbasaur

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