Sometimes the small moments in life are the ones we remember the most, be it an extra ten minutes in bed or a simple mailing of letters to a special somepony. Applejack and Rainbow Dash move through their relationship from the rocky beginning, attempting to balance each other out. Mainly drabble centered, chapters range from under a thousand words to over five thousand. First Appledash fic.
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I approve! Good job with the AJ and Dash dynamic!
Just to point out, you're having some trouble staying in present tense, you keep slipping into past. Maybe it would be easier to write past tense?
Heh that's one way to get together. Good chapter.
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Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. Tensing is certainly my problem area and I'm hoping to improve on that.
This story, I like it
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chapter would satisfy my needs again
Rainbow kissing Applejack? What a twist
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I tend to like stories in past tense more than present tense
past tense really feels as if some person is telling a story to you, present tense makes you feel like you're a stalker watching every movement.
so much awesome and win
I can so imagine this being they're reaction :) And I love realistc stories. So great job!
The tense was great this time.
And so sweet. I love it. I admit to wanting longer chapters, but only because I'm greedy.
past tense ftw
800-ish words?
*sigh* fiii~iiine
pretty good.
a few grammar errors.
Celestia knows she wanted Rainbow Dash to kiss her, but did it have to be in freezing rain a yard away from her house, what if Applebloom were to stumble upon this?
should have a question mark in between, it's a run on /\ right there
Among the many task
tasks?
one, she was whistling some happy-sappy tune and two
should have a comma /\
okay, i'm done for now. awesome story.
it was great.
try making a new paragraph for every change of person.
i really love this story. very cute.
have a mustache, and my thumbs.
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Fixed and thanks!
I want moar
When is the next chapter coming out?