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The Atlantean


I write all sorts of stories, but I tend towards military and crossovers. My Equestria Amino username is Random Twin, so if you recognize me from there, hi!

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This story is a sequel to The Red Sun Rises: Homefront


As your standard teenage pony with a cutie mark that hasn't come yet, Crimson Dawn is quite restless. He lives in a quiet town with all his friends. Then the Dominion of Apollo declares war on his homeland Atlantis. Crimson and his friends immediately enlist in the Atlantean Reserve Emergency Army (AREA) and journey their way to the field of battle, believing it to be a game. After their first battle, they learn what it truly means to be a soldier and become determined to prevent Atlantis from falling to Dominion hooves.

Meanwhile, their hometown, on the continental corner, must defend the waters and a technological wonder to keep the Dominion from gaining naval access to the Atlantean capital. Captain Middle Road and her small fleet is on its own, with the Atlantean Navy spread throughout the seas.

Takes place in The Red Sun Rises universe, beginning about 16 years before Siege of Manehattan. The story starts there, so I suggest you read it first.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/346511/the-red-sun-rises-siege-of-manehattan

If I could get some feedback, that would be amazing.

Chapters (64)
Comments ( 40 )

Does Crimson Dawn look like Red Dawn from Fallout: Equestria - Rising Dawn?

7876488 I don't know because I haven't read that. But if you need a reference, my icon/pic/thing is a drawing of Crimson by someone else.

This was a fun chapter. I especially liked Silvercrest's attitude toward everything.

Looks promising so far.

Well, that engagement didn't go well. :ajsleepy:

Another tragic loss... though the Up reference was a nice touch.

8076801 I didn't even realize there was an Up reference until you said it. I wrote that without thinking:twilightblush::twilightblush::moustache:

Star Wars the force unleashed?

8113049 Yeah. Couldn't think of a different name at the time, and besides, it sounds like a good name for a ship anyway.

8113142
Yeah, I think it's a pretty good name for a ship.

Fireheart-class corvette

Heh heh :twilightblush: Thanks.

Wow, this is heating up fast.

Okay, caught up.

This siege is going to be pretty big.

Also,

More than half the population was enslaved in some way, whether it be personal or military

Does this mean they're enslaving Atlanteans and forcing them to fight for them? Evil and a bad idea if those guys decide to turn against the Dominion.

Not sure what the personal slavery means; like, forced to work on farms or factories without pay? How evil can this Dominion be?

8159361 Military would not mean forcing them to be soldiers. The Doms are more than experienced enough in war to know that kind of thing.

As for personal, think WWII Japanese in China (no offense to any Japanese people reading this, but it is history).

Taking your first life can be a harrowing experience.

Well, that answers m previous question.

And really makes me burn to see the Dominion kicked out of Atlantis for good, and especially for their leadership to be gone, particularly if it’s so evil and corrupt that it allows this to happen :twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::flutterrage:

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Not you. My main character (and main OC) is named Crimson Dawn. Has been since mid-September last year. Sorry for the misunderstanding. You should probably read the rest of the series first so you know who he is.

Nice to see the war from the other side, especially from the guy who was king in the original. :twilightsmile:

May God go with you :pinkiehappy:

Now there's an effective (if harsh) interrogation technique.

It was interesting to see things from Atlanta's perspective.

Some very sweet reunions. And such an ominous ending...

How has no one noticed the mispelling in the title?

8359969 Thank you.

8359984 Do you mean the "Brute-Tastic" part? That was intentional.

8360336
lol. There there. It's okay.:twilightsheepish:

Though... uhhh.... now it says "Atantean". L was in the wrong place before. Now it's just gone.

8360718
I just realized that five seconds ago.

FFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

8361386
It's okay. School isn't for everyone. Your dad and I still love you. :trollestia:

If you're losing steam, it certainly doesn't show in your writing.

8530115
Well, I guess it's the motivation that's losing steam. I've barely touched this story all October.

8530145
It would be a shame if this story wasn't finished. I'd love to see how it ends.

Glad to see this back again. :twilightsmile:

As for losing steam, it happens sometimes. Your will to write will come back. If you're burned out on ideas, a break is probably good.

Uh oh. That's a big trap, and a big twist. Nice one; didn't suspect a thing until the very end.

Whoa. Things are going from bad to worse...

I'm liking Treetop's confidence.

Wow, bad position. Hope they make it. And glad to see this back again. I was wondering a few days ago when it would come back.

Good to see you again, my friend. :twilightsmile:

May God go with you :pinkiehappy:

9283395
I lost the schedule telling me what each chapter up to 60-something would be...:raritycry::raritycry:

It's going to take a bit longer than I initially hoped.

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