Pinkie has always seemed a crazy pony to you. Cute, but just a wee bit crazy. Of course, you didn't realize just how crazy she was till she kidnaps you and threatens your life.
Only thing is....she sucks at it.
((Inspired by Lyra Holds Anon Hostage.))
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"So, wait. You couldn't get my attention, so you jumped straight to 'kidnap and torture me'?"
Pinkie Pie sniffed. "Yeah. I guess it sounds a bit silly when you say it like that."
"No, no, it seems reasonable," I said facetiously. "I know that when I can't find my favorite serving knife, I run screaming into the street and mug the nearest pony. It sounds like that same principle, really."
Pinkie Pie looked at me, mildly confused. "Really?"
"NO!"
7001990
XD I hadn't thought of that. I hope you understand what you have unleashed :P I got a rarity one in the works in my mind XD and I think I'll make a group.
7001994
Oh, also, could you add a hyperlink to my story to your story description? Thanks!
7002013
Did it :)
You changed your tense, it should be I not He.
Should be, "To the Stairs"
It should be the word, "Hear." You also used the wrong it. The proper it is, "it's"
I would first like to address that the description of this story lead me to believe that this was gonna be in the second-person, that of course was wrong, and it was instead told through the first-person. Might want to work that out a bit. There was - as pointed out above - a general grammar problem. The ones I pointed out were not the only ones in the story, just the biggest ones that seemed to pop up during the end. You should probably once over this one or two more times to work out all those wrinkles.
As for the main story itself, it didn't really make me laugh, it just kinda left me on a meh note. Not that the story's idea was a bad one mind you, no such thing as a bad story idea, after all. It just didn't catch me off guard, I kind of knew that there was going to be this whole lie and revel dynamic; the same joke of Pinkie using items that don't do any harm in most circumstances was overplayed - see the episode "Party Pooped" for an example of that. That of course being the Yaks smashing everything that displeases them.
The story seems like it was made in a rush, something spat out in an hour or so. I would recommend spending more time on future works, making sure everything falls into place. Nothing more I can really say than that, and what I already stated. I hope that this little mini rant helps you in some way, hate for it to go to waste.
More. Must have.MORE!!!!
Awwww, so utterly adorable! The scary thing however is that if we take Pinkie's personality into consideration, i can actully see her actully doing something like this if she would get desperate enough.
I couldn't stop laughing! This is awesome, unexpected and just is... wow!
My only question is....
Who is he?
Loved this anyways
7005210
Yeah, I have to fix some grammer mistakes :)
First Lyra, now Pinkie?
Is this a thing now? Is this the new Would it Matter If I Was?
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Maybe :) I plan on a Rarity one next :). Ponies should not read Manga :P
Well that was something...not sure what, but it was. I laughed though, so it's a win.
What kind of manga has she been reading?
I read the Lyra one and that had me in stitches and this while not as funny is still pretty good and I kinda hope this catches on and we see more of these involving Twilight or maybe even Octavia or others.
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Yeah. This one was more of a cutesy one, or light hearted I guess. Glad you like it :) and yeah I hope it becomes a thing as well. Think I started a group for it and am working on a Twilight one.
7049039 Awesome
then went out of the bakery.
7055285 True, true.
Second, what serial killer wears a pink apron with puffy frills and balloons on it?" I asked. A mental guy who broke out of the asylum does... Don't ask me how I know that
7139224 uhhh I rilly whant to know now
Loved this one too
Haha nice
I'm not sure if I'd wanna be with someone as wacko as Ponk. You never know what minor mishap you could do that would make her snap. Although, from what we read here, she's pretty bad at this kind of thing. So you'd probably be safe. Probably.
Here's what I've got to say (spoiler alert): why a kiss?? I was about to cry at Pinkie's sadness, I really was! There would be not long, before tears started flowing
! I expected heart-wrenching... soul-shattering... breaking down...
...A cheesy romance interrupted my sufferings. No, I would've cuddled with Pinkie, myself... nuzzled her... squeezed her, until she had gasped for air... And that would have been totally OK: feelings must be deep and passionate. But are they?! No! Like Anon I would feel ashamed, and then just go for a kiss! And gone would be heart-wrenching feelings! The power of love would overwhelm all! Why?! No, why?? I don't think, that that would have happened! Have you ever heard of willing suspension of disbelief? It's been ruined.
You almost made me cry!.. I wish I could add this to something like "Almost made me cry"... but it failed me at the most important moment
! You may earn a special bookshelf add from me, because I think, your stories should be checked out... That's what I do, when a story disappoints me: hold my hope in their author! 👍
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Goddammit. Just...just...goddammit.