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This story is a sequel to Shadowbolts Adventures: The Sound of Silence
During a lazy night alone at Twilight Sparkle's house watching a movie, Sunset Shimmer feels the time is right to deepen her relationship with Twilight. But when she makes her move, Twilight is caught off-guard, and it could mean the end of their friendship if they can't figure out exactly where they stand.
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Hey your stories, your rules.
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It will ultimately be my decision, yes, but seeking feedback from others is less about wanting to be told what to do than it is about getting perspectives from others that I may not have considered on my own.
Once again, another great and heartfelt story. Just one more holiday story, and that would end these holiday stories. At least, for now.
For my opinion? As long as you stay away from Mature, I'm cool with that. As for genuine insight? You already have a couple stories on Teen, so straying into Teen once in a while won't be the end of the world, but treading in mature may make you lose readers who are cool with Teen but not with Mature.
I feel I should say, though. I love the series, partly because I like seeing any development on the Shadowbolts characters, but also because these are really GOOD developments on the Shadowbolts characters. So, kudos
These stories are really good. This entire kind of universe you've created is done very well and I look forward to the continued misadventures of our various heroines. As far as the rating of the stories, it would be cool to see two different versions (censored/uncut). Of course, this depends on how much different they would be and how much extra time it would take to produce. I believe I am in the majority in saying that I don't want to tamper with your personal process too much, as it has produced high-quality content.
I'm okay with the two versions idea.
Either way, I love these stories and hope you never stop making them, DragonShadow...
Here's my two cent on the T to M sitch.
If the situation feels natural, you give plenty of warning and don't go... massively extreme in one go, most readers will be fine with it. Most readers might mind, but if the whole series doesn't become like that and it's just some ideas then I see no problem in doing so.
Will some people be jarred by the change, yes. But if it's done in a natural way then I don't think people will be too annoyed
Very touching.
My vote is for posting it twice the uncut or censored headings.
AWWWWWW!
As to the poll:
I'm completely in favor of relaxing your censorship standards and telling the stories the natural way. These are teenagers. They're going to swear, they're going to be a bit raunchy. It's unnatural for teenagers to behave as squeaky-clean as they have to for the Y rating of MLP:EG.
There's no reason to censor yourself or tone down your stories to an E or light T rating unless you personally want to. Ultimately, it depends on what kind of story you want to tell.
Whatever you decide...we'll keep reading them.
I'm with Mythril, for the most part; if your gut is telling you that your stories should be more solidly falling under the "T" rating, there's probably a good reason for that. However you decide to proceed, though, I'll certainly continue to enjoy your stories.
Fantastic. I saw the title and description, and went in with hesitation. I am not one for romances, particularly since they hardly ever feel natural, but you have done something that I have kind of wanted to see for a while; have the romance not work. You continue to provide good stories, sir!
Never let somebody else dictate how you tell your story. If you're writing on commission, or for a contest, or something else like that then sure; you might need to play by some external rules, but you said yourself that you write these for your own relaxation and fun. If you want to turn an F-bomb into a #@&! and you feel like that works, then you just keep doin' yer thing, man.
If it were my story, I wouldn't bother with censoring at all and let the rating fall where it may.
... Then again half my family swears like sailors and the other half swears like Marines; so I may be a little biased,
I enjoyed it, through.. whats the comedy tag there for?
I'm generally against censorship, as I feel it has no place in the world. I am, however, deeply in the minority, so as with everything its more about what you want from your stories and what your characters want from you.
Nothing says the holidays like Netflix and Chill.
Poor Sunny.
One question, why is there no "Romance" tag?
Ouch can't say I haven't been there, Sunset will bounce back though ( T^T stay strong Sunny)
As for the poll I think if you feel like censoring the stories all the more power to you, but if it feels wrong to write it clean I'd say to write it more to your liking but be sure that the "M" rated versions don't have much impact on the story as a whole so the younger viewers won't have to read them. This is just me I'd avoid a full on gore feast, or an equal caliber adult theme, as for clop, if you have too, feel it necessary (or just want too) I think you should go the "University Days" route and publish a different story containing the scene/chapter. Good luck Mr. DragonShadow may the writers block be kind to you.
kind wishes,
Requiems-Bliss
I prefer a lack of censorship, but at the same time like to avoid gratuitous swearing and bad language, because it reaches a point where it just ain't clever. And as long as you don't launch into full on clop, which is unlikely, then a few adult themes aren't going to hurt anyone, especially since you're writing with fairly mature characters who would be all over this stuff in real life.
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The story may have a dramatic theme but it's still full of jokes and one-liners. I don't know, maybe it didn't need the Comedy tag, but I thought it was funny enough to warrant it.
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Because it doesn't feel very "romantic". I mean, the romance almost entirely centers around a rejection. I've never seen anything marked "Romance" where the romantic pursuer was shot down immediately and the two never even thought about actually becoming a couple.
6754081 Yay! You replied to me, I love your Shadowbolts Adventures series. Hope you keep on writing
This one was one of my favorites of the 12! Nice job!
And regarding your question, I honestly don't mind censorship. What I mean is, I hate sex scenes and stuff like that, but I'm fine with cursing, as long as it's not overdone. Maybe one word here or there. But yeah, I would really like it if you tried to stay away from gore and sex. Like, actual sex scenes, im fine with a sexual joke once in a while. I don't think that you should do two versions of the story, unless it is necessary. I really don't want you to have extra work with all that editing! So basically, just keep doing what you're doing, and I'll be happy. Hope this helped :)
Awesome story!! :D :D :D
First off, I'd like to say that unfortunately, I've never read any of these "Shadowbolt Adventures" stories before. It's quite obvious in this story that it is the latest installment of a series. There are references to previous events and stuff that Twilight has experienced with Sunset and Lemon Zest and Indigo Zap. That threw me off a little. Honestly, I clicked on it when I saw it in the Featured Box because I thought it was an Equestria Girls SunsetSparkle story, and I do enjoy SunsetSparkle. But then that quickly turned out not to be the case. Still though, I found myself becoming very much invested in Twilight and Sunset's friendship, and I was quite glad to see it survive this unfortunate misunderstanding. (But I admit, like Sunset here, I hope that the one day Twilight's feelings for her could change.
) Good on you for being able to do that even in just one story. The impact would have been much greater though had I actually read these other stories I guess. Perhaps, I will get around to them someday. (Unfortunately, I have a rather extensive and constantly growing reading list I still haven't gotten to.)
I don't know if I should comment on this matter of these stories going Mature. I might not actually be around if you decide to do Mature stories so I might not ever notice. I will say though that I have seen others do the two versions approach, and I have read the Mature versions. I'm not much of a fan of Mature stories, and I don't make a habit of reading them. Personally, the less Mature stories there are, the better it could be. But then again, I might actually be around to read these Mature stories if you decide to go that route. So what I have to say on the matter is probably moot.
Anyway, whether I go back and read these other stories of yours, you've gone a good job here. Keep up the good work.
I'm gonna assume that's just Twilight and Sunset misunderstanding the concept, because that really, really isn't how evolution works. Just saying.
I really liked this story otherwise, tough. It's a very even-handed and (based on my personal experience) realistic take on how this kind of situation tends to go down when you get the "good ending" to it. It's also nice to see on just the basis that there aren't nearly enough stories that actually deal with unrequited love stories. There's a serious dearth of them. People here love seeing their favourite "ships" hook up just a little too much a lot of the time, especially given how much of it just plain flies in the face of how the relationship between the characters actually works or even just basic realism, so that's always a nice breath of fresh air.
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I won't comment on the rest of your comment besides to say thank you for the kind words of encouragement, but the wait for future episodes of Shadowbolts Adventures won't be very long. The series updates with a new episode every Sunday, so if you want to jump in and join the crazy-train, I more than welcome you to give it a try. And if you don't like the rest of the already-existing episodes for some reason, thank you for enjoying this one, and I hope you enjoy whatever else you find to occupy your time.
Also the stories aren't going Mature, at least not for some time. Hard T at worst.
I'm surprised no one else has commented on this, but the scene with Lemon Zest was really sweet.
6754218 This. I agree with you completely.
6754081 Fair enough, I guess I just missed the jokes and got caught up in the interactions of sun and twi.
I think it should be uncensored.
SUNLIGHT! SO STRONG! AWESOME!!!!!!!
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What they said.
You gotta remember that part of the appeal of EG is that it's for children. We're just along for the ride. I've seen some good stories that handled mature stuff well, but those are rare and notoriously hard to do. The danger is the more maturity you introduce, the less appealing it may get. You also have to know what kind of mature stuff is at issue. Is it swears that concern you, sex, or do you want to venture into the topics of real evil?
If I were you, I'd either avoid heavy controversial stuff, or try to find ways to make it adorable. Case in point -- in the third one, when Twilight endangered lives of the students, Sunset yelled at her and let her know how it was, but without overemphasizing that death and suffering were things on their Earth.
Do what works, if a sex scene would help the plot along then you should do it.
About the poll thingy, I would prefer for you to not venture into more mature themes. As a child myself, I can only read mild teen and that is the limit. I think that very mild language is alright as long as it is presented as wrong. I do agree with you though that censoring can look silly, especially if it is overused but think you should try to make your fics at least appropriate for slightly younger viewers. I don't know if this is selfish but I feel like I wouldn't be able to read shadowbolt adventures anymore if they became more adult themed.
Btw , I do like shadowbolt adventures so far. They are written really well and are very interesting to read.
I realize it's two months after you asked, but I just caught up to this point in the series and figured I'd throw my two bits in.
I've got to say- I've been reading for a long time and have yet to encounter a story that was actually improved by the presence of foul language. That's not to say it's always harmful either but, in general, there are more linguistically interesting ways to convey strong emotions than simply writing out cuss words. Actively avoiding foul language even when you don't necessarily need to do so can actually result in stronger writing.
As for the the "symbol" censorship- I've never found it to look "silly", myself, but I do think it fits better in a comic book format than in prose. I'd object to it on the grounds that it's lazy more than anything. If someone wants to write censored dialog, straight-up word substitutions and invented swears are almost always the better choice as those at least contribute to the "flavour" of the story setting and make things more interesting overall.
I felt the heart break of Sunset and dang, it was shattered to a million pieces. But in the end, Twilight and Sunset are cool again.
Fucking hell this hits close to home. Only difference is my friend doesn't know about my crush on her. But FUCK it hurts knowing it wouldn't work out
"I'm bisexual. And I guess it didn't occur to me to say so because most mares in Equestria are."
"Really?" Twilight adjusted her glasses, her discomfort forgotten in a moment of scientific curiosity. "That seems like an odd evolutionary quirk."
I've seen some studies that indicate that most humans are bisexual to some degree or other, but to such a minor degree that most consider themselves straight or gay... it's also worth noting that the concept of orientation itself is a fairly recent one so I'm told, with belief before that being that, apparently, anyone might be capable of homosexual behavior.
Of course, I too have also headcanon'd that most ponies are bisexual...
We-
This is good. And also a breath of fresh air in a way. I like my shipping as much as anyone but got to admit sometimes things don't line up so well in real life. I mean going through everything they've gone through together is going to make them close and maybe open the door a little more then it might normally be to romance but seen it so often it's a bit of a tiered trend, at least in Sunset and sci-twi's cases. It's weird to say but it's nice things don't go so well for a change. Helps it was done well and doesn't draw out the drama of it too much like a lot of other stories do in similar situations.
https://m.I don't think that's even a real word.
Agreed
She's got a point.
I have so many questions right now why she's naked, and even answer the door without putting something on to not embarrass herself. 😨