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JaydexTheShadowKnight


I'm an avid brony that enjoys writing human x pony romance stories.

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(2nd Person Story Starring You – A Human & Pinkie Pie)

What starts out as a peaceful morning is quickly shattered. You happen upon a human that's a new arrival to Ponyville and much to your horror, you witness him attack Pinkie Pie! Wasting no time, you quickly go to her aid, and in the process of helping her, you discover you're more of a friend to Pinkie than you ever realized.

Note - I've had a Pinkie Pie project in the works for some time now and have been wanting to do a story about her. A friend of mine told me about an anti-cuddle fic starring Pinkie Pie. After reading it, I was inspired to write this story. This also doubles as somewhat of an intro to the story I'm still planning about Pinkie Pie and a human. If this has a positive response, I will definitely look into making the story a reality. Just keep in mind, unlike this one, the actual story will be a mature romance. And, while this one may be lacking back story details, the main story will help take care of that issue.

Rated: Teen (as a precaution)

Dedicated to thesavior711

Cover art by: xPesifeindx

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 36 )

Wonderful My Friend. As Usual You Deliver A Wonderful And Amazing Story.

I approve of this very much.

I approve of this very much.

This was nice.

This was certainly well worth the wait, and proper justice has been done to Geo's.... unsavory story. This story came to be because a lot of people like Jaydex and I were disgusted by the Geo's anti-cuddle fic, and wanted to see a different outcome. Thank you Jaydex, there was no one else more suited than you in regards to making this story. :pinkiehappy:

SO very cute!!!

I loved the story but I don't know why you used Luna instead of Celestia. I though Celestia would've been more likely to teach her the spell as she is Tilights teacher.

I kind of want a sequel, while i prefer those storys, which doesn´t start with something like love at first sight, he at least lived already in Ponyville for a while now, and it was kind of sweet to have a different Pinkie here.

Don´t know why some people think that Pinkie isn´t able to be like this, well more normal in certain situations.

If you should do a sequel, please make it a longer one, not just a few chapters, i just don´t like one-shots as much as bigger storys.

However good job.

I liked this! :twilightsmile:

I hope this gets a sequel, its been some time since I've read a really good story on this site. That didnt have some world saving plot or horrible consequences. Something nice and simple that just makes ya fell all fuzzy inside, is a nice change of pace.

6280640 I Give This A Ten Outta Ten.

Ahhhh! The sweetness! It's over 9000! Seriously this is s really sweet story and a really great lead in too.

So sweet! :pinkiehappy:

Anyone who would attack Pinkie Pie...well, I don't know what to say! He would have to be a soulless automaton with a heart of stone.:fluttershbad:

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Glad you enjoyed the story. And, for some reason, when I thought about interdimensional magic, Luna just seemed to come to mind. I admit Celestia, as Twilight's teacher, would seem the more likely choice, but, I made my decision and...I regret nothing!! :scootangel:

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I am definitely going to plan for a sequel to this story, and don't worry, it will be longer than a one-shot. It will be a lot like my Twilight Sparkle story "For Whom She Sparkles", which is a multi-chapter story. :twilightsmile:

Don´t know why some people think that Pinkie isn´t able to be like this, well more normal in certain situations.

I agree with you, Pinkie doesn't always have to be so overly hyper and random. There have been plenty of times when she's not so random and out of control in the series, granted those episodes tend to be a bit on the rare side.

To address this part of the description:

And, while this one may be lacking back story details, the main story will help take care of that issue.

I never see it as an issue to not have 'back story details,' things are usually the same in my eyes whichever way it happens. (can't recall if I told you of this yet or I haven't :twilightsheepish:)

But I do enjoy this entrée before the main course, which I'll surely enjoy reading as much as or slightly better than this one. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you for the feedback. I have a sequel in the works, and since this story is doing quite well so far, I'll see about making it a reality. And simple will pretty much be the name of the game. The sequel to this story will have a similar feel to my Twilight Sparkle story "For Whom She Sparkles". It'll be more of a Slice of Life/Romance than anything. :eeyup:

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Seriously this is s really sweet story and a really great lead in too.

That's what I was hoping for when I started working on this.


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Yeah, I couldn't agree more. Who would do such a thing to Pinkie? :pinkiesad2:

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This may be the first time you told me, but I'm glad you did. I know back story isn't critical to everyone, but I know to some readers out there that it's a big deal.

With the positive response to this story so far, I'm definitely going to make the sequel, it just may be a little ways off. I would like to work on my other four main stores before hand, but the sequel is something I hope you'll enjoy when the time comes! :yay:

This was really cute. I really wanted our hero to bop that jerk in last week, but it was all resolved in the end.

Sequel please?

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Thanks for reading and commenting. I think a sequel is definitely in order. :pinkiehappy:

6284735 All too true. It does get to me a bit, as do the people who regard it as necessary, but I do maintain a genuine respect of it all regardless of whatever happens. :twilightsmile:

And in the spirit of things to tell somebody, that Magic Sheep episode has resulted in me having a greater appreciation for Luna than I used to feel! I now declare she is best princess after all! :yay::eeyup:

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Thank you, i don´t want to ask for to much, but the usual more then ten chapter storys would be interessting, or shorter storys, but maybe more sequels if you feel like it, just please don´t do to much timekips, or at least not to long, like two years later....

If i remember it right she was a bit fast with showing affectiinn

“Mwa.” She giggles as she pulls away; still staring at you half-lidded. She faces her bed and turns down the sheets and blanket, before carefully laying down.

I think that was a rare moment where i asked myself if she wasn´t a bit to much interessted in him for probably one of their first "real" meetings, so i would like it if the romance could still be slow paced.
Maybe Pinkie could even ask herself why she suddenly acted so...foward?, not exactly but i am not sure how that moment was meant.

How much interessted in him is she already? Well i just like it if Pinkie/Vinyl/Rainbow have some rare shy, maybe unsure, or even calm Moments, or even want to cuddle a bit, rather than straight to the sex, like we said. It just makes them more normal i think.

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You've given me plenty to think about and valuable feedback. And have no fear, I'm not planning any big time skips like 2 years later. That would be a lame cop out to what I have planned. I will note that when the sequel begins a little time since this story will have gone by, but nothing too major. And you'll find out what was behind Pinkie's kiss, and remember the summary:

you discover you're more of a friend to Pinkie than you ever realized

Remember that, it will play a part in all of this. I have things coming together nicely for this.

I just can't say when exactly the sequel will be coming out. I've a good deal of planning to do and I have other stories in need of updates as well.

Thanks again for your feedback. :twilightsmile:

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you discover you're more of a friend to Pinkie than you ever realized

Remember that, it will play a part in all of this. I have things coming together nicely for this.

I just can't say when exactly the sequel will be coming out. I've a good deal of planning to do and I have other stories in need of updates as well.

Thanks again for your feedback. :twilightsmile:

no problem, and well while it would be a bit odd for me at first, since i am not sure how Pinkie interacted with him till now, i think it would be maybe make sense in a while, if Pinkie would have a secret chrush, maybe she was really to "shy" to make a move befor now

You know i am just very carefull if i had a rare version of Pinkie like this, and then i well want to make sure it doesn´t change to fast, but i guess since you share my view i don´t have to think that those two rush anything.

However if i remember it right, The Human really wanted to be friends with Pinkie, and everyone else, since he probably doesn´t have much "real" friends, i mean friends that rather go to him, than to visit other ponys. I like how much the Human cares for his friends.

6287628 glad that stupid piss man got send home

Not sure why a human is swearing in Celestia's name, but other than that its not a bad read.

All of my likes. FOREVER!

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He's been living in Ponyville for nearly a year, I'd say he picked it up from the other ponies. :twilightsheepish:

actually, isn't this a semi-sequel? the guy who headbutted Pinky to stop her
from embracing/kissing him? (Cuddle This!) at least he's home now.

6852572 ...I'd have broken his face. Slowly. And his ribs!

Another very nice story with a fairly simple plot, much like The Beat of Her Heart. This one being pretty short and straightforward is certainly not bad though; one of the things I appreciate the most about your stories is that they don't need unnecessary complexity to be good. People seem to think that there always needs to something big riding on the outcome, whereas that doesn't have to be the case.

I found myself anticipating the point when it would be revealed what happened to the angry human described in the very beginning, so that element was worked in very well. In fact, finding out how he was sent back was probably one of the most satisfying moments. Although I would have liked to see him be punished strongly, being that his memory was wiped anyway, I guess there wasn't anything more extreme that could be done. The other thing I liked was the use of additional supporting characters which appear in your other stories, namely Nurse Redheart, Twilight Sparkle, and Princess Luna. I can see it's no coincidence that you chose them, since I know those are among your favorite mares.

Pinkie Pie is definitely an interesting character to see in a story like this, and while she isn't one of my all-time favorites, if you do end up writing a full-length story about her, I would happily read it. However, I would suggest taking the advice at least one other person has already given, which is that you should take time to build up the romance gradually, instead of just having the characters be all over each other from the get-go. While this is appropriate in For Whom She Sparkles, given the characters' experiences together behind the scenes for years before the story, a slow approach is more suitable in this case, where Pinkie Pie and the human have no real prior connection.

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