When she was young a misunderstanding caused Twilight to create a check list "Find out how to turn into a colt" She never did, and that checked box was never checked. Now she's older, and more powerful, and she's just re-disovered that unchecked box
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Something something it's alive. The joke is overused. Moving on.
Bit of both.
Ah the rake to the face. I love that gag. Also, I feel like the comma after Ouch should be an exclamation mark.
No b.
Not sure that's the phrase you're looking for, Dusk.
On your own, not our ownselves. But that's a smart move.
Macintosh.
And much like always, I'm more than happy to help.
Carridoon; Project Clocktower
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Actually, McIntosh is the correct spelling. But you can find sources that say it is Macintosh, but the apple variety for sure is McIntosh, so that is the one I use.
Thanks for pointing out the other typos.
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Not bad, though I do want to get Dusk Shine in the title. So maybe "Dusk Shine: Project Clocktower"?
Everyone get your votes and suggestions in.
7569919 hhmmn... Damn i wish there was a chancellor pudding head emoticon that looked spectical.
Carridoon, Dusk shines saga; project Clocktower
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Well, the description of the story will contain the fact that it is a Caridoon story.
7571077 mayhaps that one will do, it rings clear to me.
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Thanks I think. I find myself more comfortable with her being Dusk Shine, and doing the things he is going to be doing, if she had that repressed feeling that being a Stallion was more natural for her.
7746049 My Big Mac has total confidence in himself. That means he does not have to put on a tough guy facade to prove he is bad ass.
He has no problem displaying his emotions, well, in his own way. He's still laconic as hell for the most part.
He's fully capable of being gentle and considerate if that is what his partner wants. And even if they want it hard and rough he still feels affection and love for them.
7867551 The series is Anthro. Meaning he has hands. I try not to make an issue of it in the story so people who hate Anthro can enjoy it more, but sometimes there is no getting around it.
This story was...okish. A lot of the sexual scenes in skimmed because it wasn't the pairing for me and I'm not a big Dusk fan to tell you the truth. I also feel like you missed a big opportunity but it's far too late.
Before I read this, what is the Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
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Dark is not the primary aspect of the story.
There are certain elements that some people might find dark, so it's a warning in that regard. But my main goal was to try and create a situation with Kinky BDSM elements, but with a light touch.
I won't say I succeeded, but I was more intent on leaning more toward comedy than dark.
The pre-equal to this. "Applejacked" is for sure dark.
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Right, I feel ya.
If you haven't gotten anyone to look over this story specifically, I could probably go back over it some time.
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Thank you for the offer. I might take you up on that sometime. Would you be interested in looking at new material?
To tell the truth I'm having a hard enough time focusing on continuing the storyline without diving into a full-blown edit.
I recently downloaded an add-on called Grammarly I'm going to give it a try when going over my rough drafts. With any luck, it will spot the most glaring errors.
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I would be interested in seeing new stuff, but preferably I'd like to finish reading what I've got to get through right now.
And Grammarly is great, it'll catch a LOT of stuff (I use it just in case) but it's not perfect. They've got Grammarly for Chrome (as an extension) and MS Word as a separate *thing* so you can get both for free if you want.
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my problem is that I use word perfect, and I'm not sure if it works with that. I have it as an add-on to Firefox. But it tends to glitch a bit. The red line is usually several lines above the actual mistake.
Is my intent to load the story into the Grammarly text engine? and do the proofing there before transferring it to my google doc.
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Ah, I can't help you there. I don't use either of Word Perfect or Firefox. Good luck in any case my dude.