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Welcome to another prelude story for my Caridoon Universe. Here Twilight and Pinkie will hopefully learn a few fun games that will stand them in good stead in the months to come.
Thank you for making this one a stand alone. I didn't want to read something like fall of Equestria. I HATE THE IDEA OF FALL OF EQUESTRIA.
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None of my further stories will be as dark as Applejacked. My whole intent was to create a universe where fun fetish play could be common, but to set up that universe I sort of got a little too involved in the world building and didn't really think about how dark it would read to anyone else.
I intend to keep a pretty light touch on further stories, and no pony is going to be enslaved against their will.
Though some of them might find themselves volunteering for things without thinking of the consequences until it is too late.
Trixie anyone?
6126805 well that makes me happy to hear it though can we get a pinky promise from you you know just in case lol
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Just to make it clear. This does take place in the same universe as Applejacked. But Applejacked was designed to turn the status quo upside down. Making Luna the primary Royal was a big part of that. It was also designed to stampede the Government into taking unjustified actions due to overestimating the threat based on poor intelligence. Of the spy variety.
Most of the Kinky stuff that is going to happen in this universe flows from that poor threat assessment.
But none of that has anything to do with the motivations in this story. None of the characters have any idea of what is happening to Applejacked who is away visiting Canterlot with her big Brother.
Referencing something are we?
6126805 Trixie deserves it.
6129401 mayyyybbbeeee
6130954 You Cheeky Dick Waffle!
6130213 Trixie definitely need to be include in this series more preferably as one of Dusk's girls.
6131787 That is not harsh enough. She needs broken in like the Doe in the previous story.
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Now now, if you want that to happen, you can't ask it of thtiger here. He already made sure his stories won't contain stuff like that. Anymore, I should say.
However, it's not a closed project. Perhaps you would like to make a suggestion in general for some other writer to pick up? Or maybe even offer to write a piece? You could join the group and give some input if you like!
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And just to make sure I'm not undermining you without meaning to: Is it still okay for other writers to delve into darker territory? Perhaps as long as they don't spiral into the level of overall hopelessness for Equestria that FoE thrives on?
6132594 Doesn't need to be in detail, just maybe a little easter egg with Trixie missing for about a month then finding her within Caridoon.
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Well... there is something interesting about the idea. I won't lie, I like it, but I'm a fan of FoE as well as Caridoon.
Is it Trixie specifically you want to see like that, or is Starlight Glimmer/Sunset Shimmer another option?
6132661 Specifically Trixie, her character has some redeamable qualities, however I tossed her to the way side as a character I could possibly like after the Alicorn amulet episode. Though Starlight Glimmer would make a Decent substitute.
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Alright! You see, some characters might already have something planned out for them, and I don't quite remember if Trixie's among those. And personally, the idea of Starlight Glimmer coming to Caridoon with the idea of turning everyone there "equal", aka useless and beneath her, and finding out the hard way that that's not going to happen is pretty funny.
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Other authors are free to be dark if they wish. There is a limit if the story is going to be considered Canon, however.
Someone could write something taking place further forward in the Time stream where Twilight has fully embraced her dominate male side and Trixie makes the mistake of challenging without knowing what is going on.
Or someone could just have Luna volunteer her to go through the Training Academy.
I like where this is going.
I must say, that chapter in the main story where you said Caridoon was created by the goddess of fluffy bunnies, it made my day. It was just too perfect.
I'm one of those girls who might, actually, like being at someone's mercy every once in awhile, so your stories are the best fetish fuel. Of course that means in real life I have to be super-duper careful not to let anyone take advantage of me, but here on the internet I can be honest about it.
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Well, hopefully I'll be able to provide you with some fun fetish fuel. Don't be shy to comment or suggest potential situations once you understand what's going on.
Really, five minutes after I post the second chapter and I get a thumbs down from someone who didn't even open the chapter? At least look at it if you're going to down vote, or give a reason.
I think the clothing idea is quite brilliant and I am eagerly awaiting more chapters. It was also a nice twist with Pinkie in this chapter.
Got lost on my way to my sister's house and got directions from a man drinking bear and without a shirt on. It was only noon. I also live in the south, so the whole clothes thing fits just fine
Uh, Pinkie? I think you may want to re-read the rules before trying your 'party games' again.
Poor Pinkie, did Berry deliberately lead her astray?
All right, you have my attention. Let's see where this leads me.
I think you may be confused, that, or you've been trolled by Berry Punch. Either or. Whatever the case, I was torn between fear and laughter.
Oh dear. Also, focused. One S.
Of course.
OK, you're planning something. That's bad.
Clever mare.
And for good reason.
... Yeah, she would like this.
Doubt that.
Okay, one second she's kicking herself for scaring Pinkie by strapping her down, the next she's coming up with ways to do it better. Pinkie was right, when she gets focussed, she gets focussed. Poor thing is probably going to hate herself after this though.
This for whatever reason reminds me of the Major's speech about War in Hellsing Ultimate. The original speech, not the Abridged version.
That's the idea.
Stallions. Can't believe I didn't catch that.
Damn right. *remembers Lesson Zero*
She's right.
Of course.
Tell him that, or rather try to convince him of that.
Yep.
Er, I don't think that'd end well.
Never change, Pinkie.
Very eloquent Miss Pie.
Thank you for addressing one big issue in Feeling Pinkie Keen.
Even geniuses can forget. And I do like the idea of Pinkie being a genius in her own way, she's not stupid, just a bit scatterbrained. And she derives enjoyments from almost childish things, but hey, to each their own.
Pinkie want?
A lot.
Neat.
got it thanks. For some reason Stallion's is my current glitch. I'll have to do a search and replace on the next chapter for that.
Wagh! The next chapter of Dusk Shine Rising and I didn't preread it!
I'm sorry I didn't get around to it last time. Had some serious RL stuff happen... well! No excuses!
Anyhow, I believe both the explanation for why Pinkie would like bdsm play and for why she would like Twilight/Dusk is very reasonable. I definitely think Pinkie would almost demand to get a chance to suck Twilight off. This is about immersing oneself into the setting, after all; plus Pinkie is somepony very much driven by her sense of taste. In fact, Pinkie has somewhat of a hedonistic streak, which could possibly make her more vulnerable to the Caridoon effect.
Pinkie would also want to be as close to the other pony as possible during sex. Pinkie hugs are like she's trying to squeeze herself into her friends, and I would expect this to carry over to sex as well. Hard, fast, close, pressing together as much as possible so that she can smell their scent, taste their coat, and nearly feel the other pony's heartbeat on her skin. I think she likes pressure and overwhelming sensations. Perhaps something like hot wax? Oh, perhaps something like predicament bondage, like having her nipples clamped and said clamps tied to her ankles or to another clamp in her nose, so that it tugs whenever she moves. She can squirm and writhe and it'll always hurt a little but in a good way, always giving her something to feel even when Twilight isn't actually doing anything to her.
Pinkie you are a troll.
Not what he had in mind.
Indeed.
Never change, Pinkie.
Methinks you meant 'ominous' there. Your errors are minor overall, but you should make sure to run spellchecker when you're done and you should catch little things like this.
Considering how this subject matter is often portrayed darkly, you are doing an excellent job of making it fun and interesting.
Some better roleplay would be cool, maybe have Roles reversed or Dusk playing the actual villain, using tech and sex to convert pinkie into her assistant.
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Thanks for pointing out ominous. I did run spell check, but with my spelling it could not offer a choice that fit. I knew the word, but the correct spelling was right on the tip of my tongue and I could not for the life of me get it. I meant to come back to it and forgot.
Thanks. I hope to have the various cast members engage in role playing in a much more believable fashion, with danger lurking if they mess up inside Caridoon. Or so they think.
6368456 The potential is there for some other member of the cast to go male, and top a female Twilight in some role-playing.
One such scenario, way down the road, would involve Rainbow Dash getting a male griffon body, and getting to use Twilight as a cat/eagle toy.
That would involve a version of the spell Twilight used to turn them into Breezeies.
Pleeease bring Rarity into this, that'd be so sexy.
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I think that's going to be in the sequel. Or another story in this series.
Edit: Refer to thtiger's reply.
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I think continuing this with Rarity stumbling across this
handsomeevil, stallion abusing poor Pinkie Pie might be interesting. If Dusk could keep in character for at least a few minutes.Or Maybe Rarity peeks for a little bit while they are involved with each other.
Of course while Dusk might be oblivious, Pinkie would likely be fully aware Rarity was there.
I think I'm going to do a little one chapter story featuring Applejack on the train home next before coming back to this. So any suggestions regarding Rarity would be welcome and might help once I get back to this.
No.
This amuses me.
Because she knows she can ham it up all she wants, as long as she's careful, nopony wil get hurt.
Ominous. Not onymous.
Low blow!
... Sure, let's go with that.
ExtenD.
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Thanks.
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No problem.
Will they be a 24/7 D/s relationship eventually?
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Likely not like you are thinking but there will be periods where they have to maintain the act for extended lengths of time. When they are in Caridoon, or attending the training hall that will teach them to blend into that culture.
If I get the story that far.
What I'm trying to do with this particular story arc is to give Dusk the background that will enable him to play the role if needed.
How into it he gets, will likely depend on reader input. Is it one hundred percent an act on his part, or is there a part of his stallion personality that responds to having a harem of slave mares? ^_^
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That's too bad. I always found part time D/s a bit hollow, especially with all the power the sub has. It always feels like a lack of commitment to your roles.
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Well remember I'm looking at a long time line here. It's very possible that there will be couples who become fully immersed on the life style over time.
Nothing is set in stone until I actually commit it to print, so to speak. I like to let the characters drive the story and a lot depends on how I feel their interaction developing. Reader feedback can affect that. I'd be more inclined to be swayed by people who show a genuine interest and are willing to put forward good arguments why this should or should not be.
Heh, well a harem of slave girls for Dusk could at least be a nice game for them to play if not live. Say the game is that while they destroyed Sombra, Dusk took up his dark magic and has enslaved the elements, in particular, to be his personal toys. Though this game would probably be best with multiple players I think it could work with just Pinkie if needed.
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That's not a bad idea. Or Twilight could be the Evil 'male' Twilight from a parallel dimension. Complete with facial hair.
Because everyone knows that evil twins from parallel dimensions have facial hair.
I think I can use that for the potential scene Rarity stumbles onto. ^_^
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But my evil twin doesn... err... ahem.
Or another game where Dusk couldn't stop his curiosity and just had to try out the Alicorn Amulet to 'unexpected' results.
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I could see Dusk putting on a fake, and pretending. Not experimenting with the real thing.
But again, someone stumbling on the scene would not know that.