When she was young a misunderstanding caused Twilight to create a check list "Find out how to turn into a colt" She never did, and that checked box was never checked. Now she's older, and more powerful, and she's just re-disovered that unchecked box
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Methinks you meant 'ominous' there. Your errors are minor overall, but you should make sure to run spellchecker when you're done and you should catch little things like this.
Considering how this subject matter is often portrayed darkly, you are doing an excellent job of making it fun and interesting.
Some better roleplay would be cool, maybe have Roles reversed or Dusk playing the actual villain, using tech and sex to convert pinkie into her assistant.
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Thanks for pointing out ominous. I did run spell check, but with my spelling it could not offer a choice that fit. I knew the word, but the correct spelling was right on the tip of my tongue and I could not for the life of me get it. I meant to come back to it and forgot.
Thanks. I hope to have the various cast members engage in role playing in a much more believable fashion, with danger lurking if they mess up inside Caridoon. Or so they think.
6368456 The potential is there for some other member of the cast to go male, and top a female Twilight in some role-playing.
One such scenario, way down the road, would involve Rainbow Dash getting a male griffon body, and getting to use Twilight as a cat/eagle toy.
That would involve a version of the spell Twilight used to turn them into Breezeies.
Pleeease bring Rarity into this, that'd be so sexy.
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I think that's going to be in the sequel. Or another story in this series.
Edit: Refer to thtiger's reply.
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I think continuing this with Rarity stumbling across this
handsomeevil, stallion abusing poor Pinkie Pie might be interesting. If Dusk could keep in character for at least a few minutes.Or Maybe Rarity peeks for a little bit while they are involved with each other.
Of course while Dusk might be oblivious, Pinkie would likely be fully aware Rarity was there.
I think I'm going to do a little one chapter story featuring Applejack on the train home next before coming back to this. So any suggestions regarding Rarity would be welcome and might help once I get back to this.
No.
This amuses me.
Because she knows she can ham it up all she wants, as long as she's careful, nopony wil get hurt.
Ominous. Not onymous.
Low blow!
... Sure, let's go with that.
ExtenD.
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Thanks.
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No problem.
Will they be a 24/7 D/s relationship eventually?
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Likely not like you are thinking but there will be periods where they have to maintain the act for extended lengths of time. When they are in Caridoon, or attending the training hall that will teach them to blend into that culture.
If I get the story that far.
What I'm trying to do with this particular story arc is to give Dusk the background that will enable him to play the role if needed.
How into it he gets, will likely depend on reader input. Is it one hundred percent an act on his part, or is there a part of his stallion personality that responds to having a harem of slave mares? ^_^
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That's too bad. I always found part time D/s a bit hollow, especially with all the power the sub has. It always feels like a lack of commitment to your roles.
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Well remember I'm looking at a long time line here. It's very possible that there will be couples who become fully immersed on the life style over time.
Nothing is set in stone until I actually commit it to print, so to speak. I like to let the characters drive the story and a lot depends on how I feel their interaction developing. Reader feedback can affect that. I'd be more inclined to be swayed by people who show a genuine interest and are willing to put forward good arguments why this should or should not be.
Heh, well a harem of slave girls for Dusk could at least be a nice game for them to play if not live. Say the game is that while they destroyed Sombra, Dusk took up his dark magic and has enslaved the elements, in particular, to be his personal toys. Though this game would probably be best with multiple players I think it could work with just Pinkie if needed.
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That's not a bad idea. Or Twilight could be the Evil 'male' Twilight from a parallel dimension. Complete with facial hair.
Because everyone knows that evil twins from parallel dimensions have facial hair.
I think I can use that for the potential scene Rarity stumbles onto. ^_^
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But my evil twin doesn... err... ahem.
Or another game where Dusk couldn't stop his curiosity and just had to try out the Alicorn Amulet to 'unexpected' results.
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I could see Dusk putting on a fake, and pretending. Not experimenting with the real thing.
But again, someone stumbling on the scene would not know that.
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Of course. I didn't mean she would use the real one. I'm sure she could make a convincing copy though... or even replicate it if needs be but that isn't relevant here.
Loving this story and world, Thanks thtiger!
As for requests, did you mention that Rainbow may end up under Twilights control at some point? Sub Rainbow is high on my list of wants for this series!
Long term, i would like to see each of the main 6 join Dusk's harem, at least for a short time. I could see him teaching each of them something or fulfilling a fantasy. Fluttershy needs to learn some self control before she drives away discord. And after a short time they could move back to other relationships or forward to new ones. I am not sure who i would pair with Twilight/Dusk longterm.
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There is a bit of a surprise twist coming, though it may need to be addressed in a different story. Tempting as it is to have Dusk with a harem of the other five mares I have something else in mind.
But Rainbow Dash will end up property, just that her master will be very unexpected, I hope.
I'm taking a short break from this to do a one Chapter story with Applejack. Set in this Universe
"Flim, Flamed, and Flummoxed."
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If it were not for the events that are about to drop on them I could likely have fun detailing all the various games Dusk and the rest of the mares get up to. As it is this early introduction to the idea of role playing sex games will give them some experience when they have to do it in a more serious setting. And there they are constrained by the roles they have to play.
I do like the idea of Twilight/Dusk, taking inspiration from the various adventures they have had and using them to set up scenarios. It's almost a shame the other stuff is going on. I'd love for Luna to become Dusk's part time sex-slave when the pressure of ruling gets a bit much for her.
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Please Don't make it Fluttershy. Whenever Rainbow gets cast as a sub, she always has Fluttershy as the dom, it's way to predictable.
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Really? I was not aware of that. I may have to rethink things in that case. but I'll say this. I don't think my version of this has ever been done.
6421287 Fair enough, we'll see then. But you may want to have a look around at a few of the current stories so you can watch out for obvious clichés, like her using the stare to control Rainbow or Fluttershy possessing a completely repressed darkside that just bursts out unexpectedly.
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But isn't this a problem for using any of the mane six. They all have quirks that make them, them.
Fluttershy does have her temper and stare and both have been major plot elements in Canon.
All the other ponies have character traits that make for ripe fodder for a writer looking to twist circumstances as well.
6422962 That's true, and it is absolutely why these become clichés and used a lot. However, at least for me, there comes a point where these stories just become repetitive, even when they are just small parts of a larger story. I guarantee you if you were to look right now in some clop group, you would find at minimum, 1 story in which Fluttershy becomes Rainbow's dom.
We see this for 2 reasons. The first is Rainbow's strong willed boastful character type and Fluttershy's shy and quiet but silently strong character. If the roles were reversed here, and it was Rainbow as the dom, it doesn't have as strong of an impact, because canon already displays Fluttershy as generally weak willed (at least when friends or animals aren't in danger) and Rainbow is already a very dominating presence. The power of the story comes from us perverting that image, by breaking or controlling the strong willed character and by adding a an undertone of strength and control to the weaker willed one. It's just cliché because this choice in itself is so stereotypical of the theme.
Now that's not to say there isn't potential for it to work well. It's a popular pairing for a reason, but I think if you don't work it carefully, then it will lose a lot of impact. I think the best way would be to make sure you fully explore each character falling into their respective roles, rather then forcing them to or doing so at a rate that just isn't consistent with their established character growth. Rainbow has been dragged down before and come to accept it, but it takes a while for the message to sink in, and Fluttershy may have an inner strength, but it takes a lot to bring it out, and would need a lot of time to become easy for her to do at will.
Either way, it's your story here, so whatever you had planned, go ahead with it. Just be careful about how you do it, else it won't have the same strength you may have envisioned with the pairing.