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CobaltBlue64

I want to write some stories, hopefully good ones. Occasionally stuff will pop to my mind and I just want to write. Let's see how this goes eh?

CobaltBlue64 Joined 2nd Jan, 2016 · Offline

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The Derpy Division
The Derpy Division #1 · Jun 4th, 2016 · · 1 ·
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No more Mr. Asshole me, Darf has changed me i think, i hope...

Anyway this was ok, but i have to be honest and say there are lots of silly mistakes, and problems with the flow. A lot of the time it felt like a stop start. Some of the word choosing is very questionable and a lot of the time i found my wondering why on earth are those words there and what purpose they had.

The scenes themselves are what you would expect from a clop, the dialogue was actually really good and that's what have to praise you for, nice work there. Luna and Celestia felt connected and that's what i like to see.

Overall though it was an alright read but the mistakes really brought it down -

Score - 6/10

Editor is defiantly needed.

- Tha Derpy Division - Have a great day! - :twilightsmile:

CobaltBlue64
CobaltBlue64 #2 · Jun 4th, 2016 · · ·
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7273680

Yeah I don't have an editor. I really need to find one because I felt like this was bad for some reason. I'm good with clop but otherwise, not too amazing.

CobaltBlue64
CobaltBlue64 #3 · Jun 4th, 2016 · · ·
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7273680
And it looks bad because people keep favoriting the thing but not upvoting. So a 6/4 looks really negative

Base-Delta-Zero
Base-Delta-Zero #4 · Jun 25th, 2016 · · ·
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Just hoping to have a chapter out by the 28th (my birthday), if for nothing else than to have a fun little present.....

CobaltBlue64
CobaltBlue64 #5 · Jun 25th, 2016 · · ·
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7335421

I have a plan for something. Designing a goddess sort of character and setting. All I need is for life to not slap me and I can do things

CobaltBlue64
CobaltBlue64 #7 · Aug 27th, 2016 · · ·
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7515451

I swear I had a lapse in hope in this because it was my least successful story. I need idea

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