This story is a sequel to Dashie's Relaxation
Rainbow Dash had quite the experience the last time she went to the Sweet Dreams Relaxation Center. Now, she's got plans to go back. And this time, she's making sure that she's not going alone.
WARNING: Once again, this story contains diapers and the use of said garments, as well as mental alteration and age regression. If you do not like these things, feel free to skip this one! I only ask that you don't downvote unless you actually read the story and disliked it. I'd give you the same courtesy
Thanks to Numeyu for prereading and Secret_Shadows for some suggestions!
Chapters (5)
YES!
Great, the sequel's up!
Rainbow Dash really should know that you can't trick Twilight so easily.
Love this when its the next chapter
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I'm hoping to start work on it today! But if I don't end up having the time to do so, I'll be starting work on it on Thursday at the latest.
So far its good, a great starting point for future chapters, I can't wait to see what you do with this. Twilight sure is in for an interesting experience lol.
If you need anything while writing this, anything at all drop me a message, I'd love to help and get to know you in the process :)
More, s'il vous plaît.
Hm, that's definitely interesting. I'm curious as to what exactly will change since Rainbow Dash will be treated like a 3 year old, and Twilight like a 2 year old.
Keep going. This is beautiful...
Oh, and why not have the rest of Twilight's friends get in on the fun in other stories?
I can just picture Rarity's initial reaction for her turn...
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I did consider it. But I kinda feel like I might repeat myself too much if I do stories/chapters for each of the Mane Six. I might want to move onto something new after this.
Though I might change my mind! Rarity and Pinkie in particular are two I'd like to see go through this.
So....flipping....CUTE!!!!!
Nice chapter! Apart from it seeming to end too soon for my tastes, its another great set up for what future events you have set to come! I wish I could upvote the story again lol.
5991457 Maybe you could make a sequel to this where Pinkie Pie and Rarity go to this relaxation center on their own. There aren't enough stories of Rarity and Pinkie Pie together in padded pony works, heck there's not enough stories of Rarity in padded pony works period.
Well, looks like my question was answered for me.
Everything about this is great...I'm dying from the adorable-ness.
This is absolutely wonderful to read, Readan. I can just see how cute the relationship with Dashie and Twily will get, and how much farther it will go.
This is a work of FimFiction gold, and you should be given more praise than you already have. Much like Twilight and Rarity Go To The Spa by The Conflicted Writer, none of this seems unreal or uninteresting, and you've made it truly stand out from other stories.
If you ever get the idea to take other Main Six characters, or other characters in general to Sweet's establishment, I'd read their stories and swoon over just how sweet they'd be as well...
Keep up the good work, Readan.
I've had a diaper fetish for quite some time, and this story (and the Dashie version) gets my approval.
6021106 Better hang on, the next few chapters might be more than you can handle.
Another great chapter, though as with my previous critiques it seems a bit short, but what can ya do?
My only critique (Since I don't count length as a real critique) is that it seems like at certain points in the chapter you rushed through it, well maybe not rushed through it, that's not the right way to put it, it just seemed a bit oddly paced at certain parts, not the whole chapter, just some parts. I dunno it's probably just me but it seems like certain aspects could have been fleshed out some more.
Aside from that critique though, still rating this as a 5/5 from me.
Great story and keep up the great work!
I was curious to see what sweet would do if somepony did something wrong
That was cute
Another amazing chapter as always. I liked the touch of adding in reason as to why there were more ponies there and not just adding them without explanation.
There were a few sentences that I noticed that could have been cut short, split into two, or worded differently but that's not really a concern since it was during the 'thought process' of the characters, not exactly run on sentences but just long winded. Excusable though since you're explaining the thoughts of the characters in the ones I noticed and it makes it more real. Following the rules of 'sentence length' makes it boring when you're doing thought and speech. . . and I probably just rambled that a bit but I'm tired and can't be bothered to make this a shorter paragraph.
All in all, so far the story is fantastic and I'm looking forward to see how you wrap it all up, I certainly can't wait to see what Twily thinks about the experience once she gets her adult mind unblocked.
5/5, Would read again, Have read again, Already thumbed up and fav'd so I can't do that again, but yeah! Lol. Keep up the great work!
This was very adorable. It was certainly a nice change of pace to include a new room, and a new playmate that weren't present in the previous installment.
I'm going to be honest I was hoping that there would be more talking then details like Dashies Relaxation but the story was well developed so I want complain.
I didn't expect to see bon-bon in this chapter.
I hope in the last chapter it explains why bon-bon came to Sweets Relaxation Center in the first place that would be very interesting.
Great stuff, good first chapter! Will read more soon :)
sooo how come there's no baby talk in this like there was in the previous fic?.....
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Huh, I thought I was doing a decent job of including it. I don't like to use the same kind of baby speak as others use, replacing R's and L's with W's and so on. I just try to simplify the characters' lines. Like Dashie just saying "Wanna bounce," Twily with "What you playing?" or Bonnie with "I making a pretty one!"
6095459 oh k....
Well done, Readan.
This was truly a wonderful story, and one I enjoyed every second of. Hopefully you can find the strength within you to do more stories like this...
I should've known Luna would find out about Twilight's dreams.
6099374 I second this
That was a great ending. 10/10 would read again.
*Potential Spoilers as I give feedback below*
I loved the way you wrote this, its significantly different to most stories in this genre, its getting rarer and rarer to fine unique stories like this, especially with Twi and Dash in them. I really enjoyed the way you captured their foalish minds in character and their adult minds at the beginning and end. Sweet was done very well as well and I really enjoyed seeing Bonbon make a cameo in this. It added more depth and life to Sweet's business. I also really loved that ending. . . oh I can only imagine the look on Luna's face when she saw those dreams.
Oh, Lord, Luna.
Bravo! Bravo!
can we see what the princess did it would be so funny
great story loved it
I kinda feel bad for Dash.
I mean that Sweet counted that painting as a strike seems very unfair. That wasn't mean at all, Twilight was happy with it. A toddler could never have known that isn't allowed. Would she also have counted if RD accidentally knocked Twilight over in a game of tag?
It just makes me feel like you cannot completely trust her. That you could be punished, even if you do nothing wrong. Not to mention that she also lied to Dash, she said she was off the hook and she was still punished for it after all.
How long lasted her time-out?
That strike system is also very stupid for this. Foals can't remember that far back and Sweet should know that.
(please reply on this, it's bothering me greatly)
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Well, true, foals might not remember that far. But it's not super-uncommon for a parent or guardian to punish a child for doing something wrong that they didn't know was wrong. Drawing all over another child isn't something she's supposed to do, so Sweet let her know. Twilight didn't mind, but that didn't make it less wrong that she did it. It wasn't the type of thing that Sweet was about to punish her straight away for, but it was enough to warrant a small reprimand and a strike.
As for the length of Dashie's punishment, I figure it was about 15 minutes at the most. I also chose that particular punishment because it was a rather lenient one. She wasn't able to play, but she was still rather comfortable in the carrier.
Sorry you felt that way about it. I thought it was a decently fair way of dealing with it, but I guess others can see it differently.
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If Twilight didn't mind it then what is the problem? I would think that if they had continued Twilight would have painted Dash's face as well and would that mean that Dash would get double punishment for allowing Twilight? (yes, this is a serious question) Also, if Twilight doesn't mind that why exactly is it wrong?
That Strike system is quite cruel, children that young can't think that far ahead. Especially that isn't a strike, just a reprimand because she didn't know. Strikes make playing very hard because you don't know if you might be doing something wrong and Sweet won't forgive you. She won't just tell you that it isn't allowed and just leave it with that.
Not punishing RD right away was actually a far more cruel thing to do, there is no way RD can get forgiveness? Is there?
It was the most cruel thing she could have done to RD. RD is very loyal and hates nothing more, also she really, really rubbed it in by forcing her to watch the softness actually make it even worse. If she was sitting on a hard wooden chair it actually be less cruel. I would expect RD to be crying loudly and begging sweet to be let out. A spanking would be lenient, just get it over with and say sorry.
However it's the strike system that really ticks me off, if Sweet had the punishment just for the pouring sand than she would be harsh but not cruel. However it's the lying to RD that I just can't take. Also the strike system; that you get a harsh punishment for 3 completely unrelated things that you did for 3 completely different reasons.
But my main question is: how can they know what they can and can't do? I mean hurting somepony doesn't matter nor do reasons or rather or not you say sorry. So what exactly can they do in safety?
But why did Sweet lie to Dash like that? You didn't answer that.
Punishment is also to give a sense of safety, that you can know what you should and shouldn't do and that you can be forgiven when you're sorry. However that doesn't seem to matter to sweet at all.
(again, please reply)
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I know that if my older sister were to draw all over me back when we were comparable ages, she would have gotten in trouble. Even then, Sweet didn't punish her directly for it. It was simply counted as a strike. And honestly, between pushing Twilight off of Sweet later and then dumping sand in her diaper later still, she probably could have deserved the punishment even without that.
For how they know what they can or can't do: they're being treated like foals, and are learning the same way that many children learn. They don't know that they're doing something wrong, so they're informed of it. Sweet didn't punish Dashie for drawing on Twilight, but she told her that she did something wrong. I don't see it as Sweet having lied to Dashie. She didn't do a thing to Dashie for what she did, except tell her that punishment is a thing that can happen if she keeps doing things she isn't supposed to. And Sweet would never not forgive her for doing something wrong, but I mean, she isn't just going to let her foals do whatever they want and only say "you shouldn't do that" when they keep doing things they aren't supposed to. Maybe we just differ in how we see a parenting role, but I personally feel that if the child is given no consequences other than being told to apologize, what they're going to learn is that it's okay to do bad things as long as you apologize afterwards. I thought I was having Sweet be lenient by not punishing Dashie for the drawing or for pushing Twilight, and then giving a punishment which, while it served its purpose of punishing, was still a comfortable punishment.
I know that when I and my sister (and we are actually 1 year apart) did that we wouldn't have been punished. After all nobody got hurt, that's how I've been raised, mom even did such things herself with us. However we did have to help her clean up afterwards. If you didn't do it on purpose then you just need to clean up after yourself and will receive no punishment. If somebody was hurt during it you apologize. Only when you did something that you know you shouldn't do are you punished. We were never punished the first time we did something wrong, just scolding. Only when we did the same thing again would there be punishment.
However it isn't 'naughty' at all, punishment should only be for 'naughty' things that they do on purpose. Those 2 other things were naughty though but that first thing was not. I don't even get why it's forbidden at all, I mean why isn't it allowed?
Also how can Dash know what she isn't supposed to do?
She doesn't forgive RD because of the strike system, forgiving means that there are no (more) consequences. She shouldn't say she forgave her when she still got back to it later on.
It's also that the 3 were completely unrelated to each other.
That strike system is something foals can't understand. If she had given warnings to RD it would fine. Also I don't see the difference between a strike and a punishment. It's just having 1 very harsh punishment instead of 3 smaller ones. So she did punish all 3 things.
Well she said she forgave her but she still counted it, so RD was still going to be punished for it.
it just makes things more confusing for a child. You need to punish them either immediately or not at all.
And with some things (like pushing someone off) it is okay. But that isn't my point. It's that strike system. You say she didn't punish her for them but she did, she just made it even more cruel by having Dash have no consequences so she kept doing it and then one really cruel one. Children of 3 can't think that far ahead or backwards so you can't punish them for something they did so far back.
Also, would RD have been punished if all 3 things were innocent things?
"lenient" I would call it real torturous. It would be more lenient if RD was sitting on a hard chair outside the room. It's actually torture because Sweet is rubbing it in like that. That seat actually makes it worse, it even more rubs it in. RD didn't deserve that just for pouring sand. It's not the time-out itself but the way Sweet (if you can call her that) is rubbing it in that ticks me off.
You still didn't answer a few of my questions:
If RD would accidentally push Twilight over in a game of tag, would she be punished? And if Twilight had drawn all over RD would RD be punished for that?
This was a simply and smashingly sweet story stuffed with satisfying sentiments. And it was cute too.
the story flowed well, it had some nice laughs, some nice character development and made me smile often. if you do one of thes in the furure.....
It's a thought. Either way, 5 points on the
itude meter!
hahhaha love the ending with Luna commenting on Twi's dreams.. That would be interesting lol. Great story and I anticipate more sequals.
6116999 you make an excellent point but reminders are all it takes for a young child to remember something, especially if they got some form of attention from it. The painting Twi's face also bothered me but I won't lie, when I was younger, I used to do that to my older sister and she was happy. Doesn't mean I didn't get off the hook.
6222668 I'd read it
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huh? just what are you saying?
Are you agreeing or dissagreeing with me? it's hard to tell.
"but reminders are all it takes for a young child to remember something, especially if they got some form of attention from it"
so are reminders good or bad?
My problem is that I don't see how painting on her face is bad to begin with. If it isn't allowed she would just say that, there is no way that Dash could have known that. You should only punish a child when they do something bad. That means that they hurt something/someone or break a rule. If RD had painted on her face again while she knew it wasn't allowed then it would have been okay to punish her but she didn't know.
Just how can they know when they are safe? Sweet is very vague.
Why is it that this one is rated Teen while the original story was rated Mature? Don't they contain similar content?
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I think I was being a little too cautious making the previous one mature-rated, and some other users agreed, so I went with teen for this one.