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Test4Echo


"When the dust has cleared, and victory denied; a summit too lofty, river a little too wide. If we keep our pride, though paradise is lost, we will pay the price, but we will not count the cost."

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When on a royal visit to Ponyville, Luna spends a night at Twilight's library to play "video games". Enjoying the baubles, she proceeds to venture into the world of online video games, and the not always so fair realm of singleplayer worlds.

Cover image: Gamer Luna, by myminiatureequine (Check out his gallery, he has some other cool stuff, too.)

All ponified pun-names of consoles and video games belong to their respective owners. MLP: FIM and its characters are owned by Hasbro.

Chapters (11)
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Oh boy oh boy, wait... Who the hay downvoted this!? Okay let me just check the quality of this fic maybe they already read through all 5k words since the story was posted two minutes ago.

*Reads through a few passages*

Holy hay this is well written. Someone must hate Gamer Luna, damned prejudiced ponies. :ajbemused:

One minor problem: You didn't establish when Pinkie Pie and Applejack arrived. The only pony seen arriving is Rainbow Dash, and suddenly at the end Pinkie Pie and Applejack are there.

Other than that, excellent start.

Minor typo:

"OUTRAGEOUS!" Luna boomed, forgetting for a moment not to use the Royal Canterlot Voice. "YOUR PRINCESS DEMANDS A REMACTH!"

*rematch.

And like with Applejack and Pinkie Pie in the first chapter, we never saw when Fluttershy and Rarity arrived either.

Other than that, this is a very good story, but you might want to fix those issues.

2886048 Thanks for the tips! I believe I did tell that the rest of the main six entered the library and the basement, but perhaps I could expand that paragraph a bit more, rather than just saying, "They came downstairs".
Also, curse you Microsoft Word! You didn't show me my typo!:facehoof: I'll make sure to fix that later.:pinkiesmile:

this is one of the best storys i read it was short but good:twilightsmile:

2886560 Thanks! Don't worry, there is still more to come. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

Me in video games:
Dying? :rainbowlaugh:
Killing? :pinkiecrazy:
Camping? :ajbemused:
Trolling? :moustache:
Ponies? :derpytongue2:

2897517 Some days anyway. I don't know, I haven't played Starcraft 2's online games in months.

Wait till they try competive multiplayer online for mares of duty!

Sometimes this makes me cringe but other than that keep it up!

2923727 Care to elaborate on what makes you cringe?:twilightoops: If its something with technique, wording, or anything in the fic, I'd love for you to let me know so that I could improve.:twilightsmile:

2924469 it's not your techinigue it's just the awkardness of the story, don't worry though it's just me.:twilightblush:

2926335 Oh, okay. I trust that's a good thing?:applejackunsure: Regardless, thanks for the watch!:pinkiehappy:

Can't wait to see what PC games Luna will play!

Now she's going PC gaming........this is definitely going to end perfectly. Great chapter too.

When the bit about profanity was mentioned, I was half expecting a reference to Star Trek IV:

Other player: DUMBASS!
Luna: And a double dumbass to you!

(I don't actually know the full quote; I only remember Kirk's response)

Also, how much do you want to bet Ponymus Prime is Celestia?

...For that matter, is Test4Echo a pony from the show, by any chance?

2977093 Glad you enjoyed the chapter!:twilightsmile:

About the mentioning of profanity: I know that wherever you go on the internet (online gaming or not) its everywhere, but I find in storytelling, that if you can just replace the swear word with "X cursed/swore" it gets across the same message. Plus I don't like doing it too much to canon ponies (although I could Rainbow Dash doing it:rainbowhuh:).

Ponymus Prime's identity shall remain hidden, for a while at least.:trollestia:

2976620 Glad you enjoyed it.:twilightsmile: Yes, PC gaming, what could go wrong?:pinkiecrazy:

I knew that there would be a self-plug thingy ma-bob ID thing.:moustache:

Let the post-editing commence!:eeyup: I've gone back and fixed some grammar mistakes and a couple of missing words. Also chapter titles!:yay: Next chapter this Thursday!:pinkiehappy:

so far this story is sounding like a very interesting case of "Gamer Binge". :eeyup:

Now THAT'S a cover image. :yay:

let me guess she going to find ways to stay in doors and do her work and stuff like that and become the top gamer.

This is what i guess she'll do is in this list

shit bucket - mostly after being killed in the game after holding in her pee too long and when she run to the restroom she find the game to be over and say " your theme lost "

computers everywhere - so she can rise the moon and lower it without leaving her room and do all her work in that room

have a soda/food machine - so she can eat without ever going outside to do so.

making her room way bigger - so she can have all the games in the world to keep on playing

a factory to make new parts - she if any of her old video games broke or need repair she can sent it to them and keep on playing.

a sex toy - Hey a girl and guy got to have something right?

3051728 Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.:twilightsmile:

3051857 Those... are some interesting thoughts, especially the last one.:rainbowderp: However, no spoilers, you'll just have to find out!:trollestia:

3051910 beside it would be funny to see the face of the ponie that know her talk to her in the game to have that talk but hearing her taking a wee wee in her shit bucket will be pacheless

3051857

There's a thing called Steam you know, I wouldn't be suprised if there is an Equestria's version of Steam.

3102891 i know what Steam i have one too almost all pc or anyone into pc games at all have one.

like i say i would be funny as shit to see the face of luna frds and family to hear her taking a piss in her shit bucket.

Or having to frds new ways to get her out of her room but only failing at it so

We need some more strategy games! And i mean other than starcraft. maybe something like Canterlot 2 Total War? Or Crusader Ponies 2? i could love it if the CMC found Crusader Kings 2 , just saying.

3123463 Never actually played the Total War series. I have ideas for a couple of other strategy games though.:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

ponymus is really a hacker or pinkie pie

3124480 Got a bid that Celestia (:trollestia:) is Ponymus, and now Pinkie (:pinkiecrazy:). Who is this mysterious nemesis? Well, I know, but I'm not telling.:trollestia:

If you put DarkR in, I'm slapping myself, and giving you all my Pinkies.
:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::fluttershysad::pinkiehappy::derpytongue2::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Nightshine kinda act like a bitch am sorry girl but you need to learn to have fate in ponies or people or what ever.

3124582 well Nightshine learn the hard way that if you piss off a gamer noting good come of you in the end

3125664 Ehhh... Nightshine is just watching out for Luna (ya'know, being tasked by Celestia and all to keep an eye on her sister). It's not that she's just a confrontational pony, she's just overly wary of Luna's interactions with Resonance.

3127932 ya but she just give off that feeling you know that type of girl you don't want to say the worge word or you get kicked in the ball so hard that you met end up becomeing a girl....:twilightoops:

if you need more rts games, may i suggest one of the older and well loved frachises 'age of empires'? but with some kind of pony pun, i dunno.
and heres some other suggestions: maybe luna buys 'changlings: colonial marines' and goes on a psychotic rant about how horrible it is, or maybe 'pony-Oh! 5 p's' or some such nonesense.
im enjoying this fic and will likely continue to, regarless of what direction you take.
i would love to see your interpretation of the pony version of duke nukem forever

3132305 Glad you're enjoying it so far!:twilightsmile: Yes, Age of Empires was something I took into consideration before I started fully writing the fic. However, when I first began, I already was thinking "Okay, I want a three act sort of structure: introduction to characters, ideas, and rival/antagonist; more or less a darkest point of the fic; and rival is defeated, and Luna has some sort of character arc."
The problem is that I love so many games, it was hard for me to choose how many to do without the writing getting stale. I've enjoyed writing this, and I still have a bit to do. Perhaps I'll do some games that weren't in the main story as bonus chapters.:moustache:

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