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yay my favorite fetish author delivers the goods ayyy no regrets !!
happy 1000000000 likes :D
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Hurray!!!! Thank you for the wonderful chapter.
I think you're letting the comments... force you to write about how much you need to tell the truth or something... >_>;;; It just feels a bit off. Just write what comes from yer heart! :)
Other than that, I really like this chapter. So many wonderful word combinations. And the writing is really pretty. :3
Thank you for being you!!!
also loved the new chapter
Now to get hit with that magic tingly feeling!
“Twilight, as in Twilight Sparkle?”
Next sentence: "Sorry, Sweetie Belle, you're doomed."
That actually makes prefect sense for them. Given they have four hooves they probably use base 4 math. If you convert the Imperial System into base 4 it makes as much sense as the metric system. But since humans naturally like base 10, we prefer metric.
Hummm... this is getting interesthing by the second
Heh, I eat hot pockets too!
...that 2nd part, lol.
This guy has truly gone mad.
Another very interesting chapter, I feel addicted to this fic
5782552 Every time I see your icon, I think of this:
PINKIE SIREN!
5782872 I am addicted and the drug dealer keeps providing!
5782545 I am talking about what the author stated in his comment, not the character. Read his comment and it is obvious he shares some, if not all, of the protagonist's thoughts.
I weigh approximately 8.5 Sweetie Belle's.
Um, I would like to say that the main character's opinions seem a tad degrading to women.
*runs and hides under the bed*
*peeks out cautiously*
I just... look. My dad was like this. He had a very bad experience with a girl in high school who used him and led him on, and it made him kind of bitter towards women in general. He was kind of geeky, kind of nerdy, played D&D, that sort of thing. Then he met my mom, who was just as messed up and broken as he was in all the opposite ways, and they clicked. They helped each other. They took their broken halves and forged them together, and were able to cobble together a family more whole than anyone would consider normal.
I know there are girls in the world like the ones you described. But I also know that there are a lot more girls in the world who are like you, who are just... normal. The kind of people you wouldn't think twice about. The kind that you wouldn't even consider reaching out to help, because you have no idea how much they're hurting.
What I'm trying to say is: don't blame an entire gender for problems beyond anyone's control. Please. Try and work up the courage to ask for the help you need, because I guarantee there are people out there who would do anything they could to help you, if only they knew you needed it.
Doctor- "I'm sorry, but due to how much sheer insanity is caused by Twilight Sparkle, you need a special insurance for incidents caused by her."
I'mma guess the Doctor's asking because he's familiar with Twilight's antics.
Well, she can get physical therapy to walk again, and is about time she gets it.
-implodes-
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5783907 The main character is all kinds of messed up. That's what makes this a good fic... I think... Honestly, I'm not sure what it is that makes it so good, but the protagonist being so screwed up is part of it, I'm sure.
5786959 I know...
My family's all kinds of messed up. I'm all kinds of messed up. I love it when the story isn't afraid to show that, that relationships are difficult and messy and sometimes really screwed up. The broad generalizations about my gender rubbed me the wrong way, though.
5787193 Which one? The Author bashes both genders. Repeatedly. With a metal pipe to the face. In Japan.
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Thanks so much! I'll be sure to take your advice and stop taking advice from commenters wait
But no, I get what you mean.
Thank you!
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Indeed! (I'd love to represent all numbers in base 4 but, I think that would be a little too geeky even for me.)
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Not to mention anti-imperial-measurements, and anti-cantaloupe apparantly.
You have a really good point there. Maybe I am focusing on direct physical feelings too much, instead of abstract emotions. It's a little bit difficult to phrase though, because the character does not feel sad and pathetic from failing to walk. It's a hard emotion to pin down... it's sort of like that feeling you get when you're in line for the roller coaster, something between determination and dread. The character has no shame, and so is more upset by what they can't do, rather than what they fail at trying to do. Makes more sense for them to be feeling sad and pathetic when just sitting still, and then feeling better even when they do make a fool of themselves trying to walk.
Anyway I'll take another look at the trying-to-walk part.
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Be careful with that. Even in comments, I sometimes find myself inclined to play devil's advocate, rather than what I actually do feel passionate about. That being said, my comment was, in that case, heartfelt. On the subject of not devoting myself to things I'll never be able to enjoy, it really hurt when you said I was flawed because of that. It may make you feel good that people like me don't exist, but you don't have to be so smug about it.
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You can rest easy, knowing that I do not blame an entire gender for the problems those in it may cause. The protagonist may, but I certainly do not. What I would like you to understand about people like this, is not that they blame women undeservedly. I just want to point out that people like your father exist, who won't meet the girl of their dreams... ever. There are good people who just never happen to meet someone compatible with them. It's tempting to demonise them, and say that if they were good people, then they could find someone. I sort of want people to know they're wrong for doing that, whether they're jeering at "land whales" or "neckbeards." So, that's all I'm getting at really.
You might be surprised at how unenthusiastic people get about helping you out, when they start seeing you as a risk. I am trying though, so thank you for asking.
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Does being on the train count?
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A few more hints on that in the next chapter.
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omae wa mou genderiru
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I haven't even started on her madness yet...
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Thanks so much! It really lifts my spirits to see people enjoying this.
5788325 I do math lymrics and even I wouldn't do base four pony math.
5788325 Strangely enough, I actually do agree that you shouldn't change your story plan because of a few comments. You are a good writer, even if you drag on a bit with mundane things, and you should write what you want, even if others don't agree.
I know I seem to be contradicting my previous comments, but if you want to write a story about someone who has a tarnished view on humanity, well, there must be someone who likes that kind of character, so go for it.
I may personally hate the character, but the only thing writing wise that I actually think should be changed is how much detail you put into mundane things and how his mind goes to places that are out of context. Some mind wondering is great, but when the mind wanders for half a story it can get tedious, you know?
I now feel that I am contradicting myself a ton, even in this very comment! Explaining my thoughts is... difficult.
5788325 Oh and I really like how you refer the the protagonist as female in your comments, because your sex is what type of body you inhabit. When I think of her previous body I think of the protagonist as male, but as it goes she is a she now, so she should be referenced by what her biology dictates.
I will never see the point of calling someone the wrong gender just because their minds feel they are the opposite. It causes unnecessary confusion, and in essence is a lie. It is just a way to identify a person, and if you call someone the wrong gender, well, it ignores the entire point of having an identifying in the first place!
Ugh, now I am getting into another issue entirely, but I stand by my argument.
Probably one of your best chapters so far. Keep it up!
5788325 Perhaps... perhaps I am sheltered then. Or naive. Or you know more about the world than I do. But I was raised in a culture that celebrates those who never find a compatible member of the opposite gender, and even encourages people not to. A culture that celebrates helping others, where people give up their worldly possessions and devote their lives to it.
I am speaking, of course, of Catholicism. My apologies if that offends anyone. I don't know if every parish is like my parish, and the answer is probably not, but I've seen things. I can't... I don't have the words to describe the love these people hold for each other. Their willingness to forgive, and their endless desire to help.
I can't picture a single one of us making fun of someone because of their appearance, or how they spend their time. We do silly things that other people make fun of, after all. We're not exactly popular at the moment, even with other Christians. I've been so, so hurt because of what I am, because of what other people think of it, and I would never, ever, inflict that on someone else.
As for the help thing, one of the reasons this fic resonates with me so strongly is because I suffered for so long without the help I needed. I didn't realize that people didn't know, that I had to go out and ask for help. It was scary, and I didn't want to bother people, didn't want to admit how much I was hurting. But then the decision was taken away from me, and everyone found out, and... they didn't look down on me for it. They helped me. They're still helping me.
I don't know what your situation is. We may not be in the same boat, but if I'm standing in a boat surrounded by ocean, it doesn't take a genius to guess you're having trouble with the waves too.
5788325 The reference is strong with this one... Nice.
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Or maybe you're just your typical petty little spiteful bigot and are grasping for excuses to deny someone a little kindness that literally wouldn't cost you anything to just play along with, even if you disagree. There is nothing even in it for you except the satisfaction of kicking someone who's already down. I don't even personally care either way, but the sheer hateful vindication people like you get out of aping discredited right-wing talking points - without any provocation and in a completely unrelated conversation - just makes me nauseous.
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Well, thank you for your respect. I feel a lot better now. It's not exactly what I want with this character, so hopefully you can find yourself pleasantly surprised, if I can ever get to the part where they have to confront their past.
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Ah, yeah that'd do it. I've found myself unable to believe in any sort of higher deity, so I'm sort of not even allowed in those buildings. Or at least, asked not to return after I'm told that it's like talking to a brick wall. Glad to hear that your community is supportive of you, though!
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Your avatar really lends a terrifying flavor to that comment.
5789201 Is it so wrong that I believe in physical indicators, and that physical indicators shouldn't be changed because then it ruins the point of having said indicators?
For example, imagine a Mexican feeling that they are Japanese deep inside, so they try to legally change their ethnicity to Japanese. It makes no sense because your ethnicity is just a way to identity you, and changing it would make zero sense. This is exactly the same.
Why is it no one can talk about this issue is a logical way without being called a bigot by some asshole? I wasn't even saying it js wrong to feel you are the opposite gender, just that feeling that way shouldn't give you the right to legally change your gender, ethnicity, or species. In name only that is. If you actually manage to completly change your gender, ethnicity, and or species that would be an entirely different story.
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I'll let you in on a secret: I actually have no earthly idea what that thing even is. The sheer incongruity of seeing a mug like that in the comments to a story about happy little cartoon ponies just makes it too funny to stop using it, though.
Also SWALLOW YOUR SOUL SWALLOW YOUR SOUL SWALLOW YOUR SOUL SWALLOW YOUR SOUL
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Don't even bother, we both know better. You don't actually care, you just want an excuse to look down on a group of people who are already getting shafted in every imaginable sense of the word. "Facts" don't matter to you or people like you, and they never will, whether it's the "one drop rule" getting argued about or "physical indicators" of gender.
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Yeah! I really am enjoying it, thanks!
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Do you know the easiest way to lose an argument? Insult the person you're arguing with.
Also don't use bigot while at the same time decrying a specific way of thinking, because it makes you look like a hypocrite.
I'm just going make a list of all the things wrong with this if you don't mind.
1) "People like you" I love shoving people into predetermined groups, it makes hating them so much easier./s
2)"Right-wing ______" As someone who likes to stay in the middle of the political spectrum every time I've heard either this or "left-wing ______" it's one hundred percent without fail been said by a crazy extremist or someone parodying one. I've yet to decide which you are.
3)"discredited" How or when? How can you discredit an opinion?
It is more confusing to call someone female a male or vise versa. This is a fact.
The argument is a moral point that can't be discredited.
"Is it worth the confusion for said person's comfort?"
4)...
Fuck me, I actually just realized that you're a troll attempting to entice an argument for your own enjoyment. Carry on with the chaos then.
5790037 Well, no wonder if they drove you out! I wouldn't want to be part of a community that couldn't properly defend their beliefs under cursory questioning, much less one that told me to go away just because I didn't agree with everything they said right off the bat. Even fellow Christians within the same denomination disagree on how some things are interpreted, and don't even get me started on the range of denominations!
This may just be because I live in a college town, but folks of all beliefs and backgrounds are always welcome at my church. We have a Lutheran and a couple of atheists who come once a week just to debate with the apologetics club, not to mention all the non-Catholics who hang out in the study areas. Even if we never agree on doctrine, peace between people is literally what our purpose is supposed to be. "Blessed are the peacemakers, for they shall inherit the Earth." Matthew 5:9
It makes me very sad, and not a little angry at that church, that you were treated so disrespectfully. I would like to apologize on their behalf. We are very sorry. We strive towards noble ideals, but as humans we always fall short of perfection.
Wow this story is epic. Except for the parts where ya bad mouth God. Other than that it's shaping up to be a really good adventure. When's the next chapter coming out?
Well, it was certainly interesting, so far. I can safely say you pretty much got all of the characters from the show spot on. (I guiltily skimmed on each chapter... a bad personal habit of mine when a story has tons of FLUFF) The characters inner monologue were, of course, interesting, but he seemed to ramble on far too much for my liking. Probably why I skimmed so much... I'm not sure if it's just a personal fault of mine or an issue with the story its self. I couldn't really say, especially because I'm writing this at one in the morning. I always enjoy stories with unfair situations, such as the typical HIE story where they show up as a pony or animal or whatever. I certainly enjoyed this and I think I do want more.
A bit of an issue I noticed were a few paragraphs that contained multiple characters lines of dialogue. I'm actually not sure if those are okay are not because you followed them up by "she said in my ear" and then the human spoke (is it you?!) in his dialogue. So it's odd... just something I noticed.
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It's the character who forgot, but... it was something I certainly could have forgotten, had I been transported into pony world, instead of just sitting here writing a story about it, with all the episodes available to me. The character also forgot about the "8 foot candy cane" scene, at least consciously. I look for things I could have forgotten, in order to have things a human in Equestria forgets, or misremembers.
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It comes out on Wednesdays, weekly if I can manage it. (So far, so good!)
And don't worry. God has been either laughing, wincing, or facepalming at the protagonist over this whole story.
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So much fluff it turned Nightmare Moon back into Woona!
No, I don't mind if you skim that. Some people like reading it though, because though less exciting, it's easier to imagine Equestria if it's being carefully described. That said I really do need to cut out that stupid monologuing. I wish I could think of a better way to convey what I need to show is going on in that character's head.
No, I'm actually very bad at this. Sometimes I just miss it outright. Feel free to correct me! I may even agree to change it!
Could someone please point me to more stories like this one?
5805139 I think you have a good way of showing what's going on in his head already. Everytime "Sweetie" stumbles over something and becomes Awkward Belle, it tells the audience something without having to convey his every thought to us. Obvioulsy he needs say things sometimes, but non verbal things and maybe a short explination in his head can go a long way.
That being said, if you need any ideas for this fic, I can think of some. Often writers write themselves into a hole on these types of Fimfics. They have no way of ending it because they have no way of proofing to the ponies what's going on. Still, goijg to Twilight with the OCs issues is a nice start. After all she has the uncanny ability to over analyze thing... hehe
Wow, part of me wants the guy to come out with the truth but another part of me wants him to keep it a secret.
I still think a reincarnation plotline is your best bet with a plot like this one.
Know what? Author you should change the title of this story to Overcoming Hooficap: Sweetie Belle's Triumph. I feel like I'm reading a story about an amputee's poignant journey of recovery after stepping on a landmine. Or something.
This is like... the most profound and non-irritating thing I've heard this Protag say in this entire story so far.
So... he is... not thoroughly irredeemable.
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Wait are you saying transgender people are wrong about their self-identity? Hmm, and it seems you are...
Suffice to say, it's not a disease but rather a psychosomatic state of being. That is, the person does not choose to be trans, but grows up like that just like you know you grow up as male/female. Just because what's in his head does not match his body, does not mean he needs treatment or "correction."
I don't have any investment in this subject. I'm just letting you know that this is the opinion of medical experts and also the ppl who are trans. Your personal opinion is not informed, and frankly it's not your place. It's like saying I have the right to express my uninformed opinion that twins are freaks of nature. 2 guys being carbon copies of each other sure sounds a whole lot more unnatural to ignorant ol' me than a guy who feels like a woman, don't you agree?
Heheh, poor me if I ended up in his position (in Sweetie Belle's body). I've only seen... what, maybe 5 episodes at the max? And that was like, a forever ago? I would have practically no ability to know what a lot of events in the series, except for what I hear online and read in the Fics. The names I know all to well... but there are certainly a LOT of characters (background) that I don't know of. I can name Lyra and Bon Bon and Doctor Whooves, Derpy Hooves... uh... and that's where my list ends. May have to look into finding a 100% secretive way to watch the show. I caught a glimpse of an episode earlier this week, at my cousin's house during break. Well, a good few minutes of an episode... the one where the Diamond Dogs become victims to Rarity's whining. Whatever that one was called. That was the probably the first I'd seen the show since... years ago.
5782252 Heh! More like: "Oh, dear! You are so seriously frelled!"
"Nothing happens of course, because all I did was lift a leg and then put it down. It’s the other four I have to deal with, that are the problem at hand."
The five-legged outfit Sweetie made in 'The Show Stoppers' is starting to make more sense.
This was a awesome read It had my heart beating like a drame.And the decrpshon of ponyvillie was beautful.