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Interesting...I shall track this!
Extremely good potential, tracking
You'll want to use the horizontal rule to break up the text to show changes in scene and setting, like near the beginning where you switch from that flashback to present-day. It'll make it easier for your readers to keep track of things.
507998 use the what in the how?
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The horizontal rule is an icon up on the editing toolbar for your story. It places a horizontal line across the page to divide up the text. As for "when?" Here's what I was referring to.
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“HORSEFEATHERS!” She yelped, rocketing forward again, leaving the little mare ambling gamely along behind, smiling at her new friend.
That had been the day Rainbow had first met both of them in person.
...
You can use thehorizontal rule to show a transition between scenes, like this one between Rainbow's flashback and the present-day part. It can also be used to indicate a change in time, sort of like hitting the fast-forward button on your story. For example:
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That was the feeling she lived for, that one moment when there are no problems, no worries. There’s just her, and the endless blue sky.
“You were amazing sweetheart. You didn’t even use a Rainboom.” Spitfire murmered, face pressed hard into her lovers side. The orange yellow fur of her neck pressed into Rainbow’s back, rubbing softly along the blue mare’s spine.
...
You might already have some idea of what I'm talking about, but the horizontal rule just makes things a little easier.
sounds like a roll play on the Rainbow Dash page I admin. loved it. it was about as long as one of my fan fics but it was amazing. keep it going
i have no words to describe what i have read idk if thats good or bad
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Umm... Did you like it?
I'm scared now.
508001 the code for Horizontal rule is [ h r]
With out the spaces.
508851idk for once which is wierd usaly know if i like something oh well i know i dont dislike it
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509482TIS WORKS!!!
Tracking interested to see how this goes, also I think that this is a good fic for you to work on between Immortality. This story feels light and ultimately a good break from the unbalanced frame of mind that immortality must get you in when writing it.
You also get a watch on you profile.
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You get three happy Twilights!
509485 yes yes it does.
Insomnia, you are a heartless bitch. I hate you. A lot. At the very least, new chapter
Okay, I have a few things to say. First off, when does something go from teen to mature. I think my mental rating system doesn't seem to match up with others. I don't think that this is quite at mature, but what do ya'll think?
Other than that, I just wanted to say that I have absolutely no idea where this is going. So, unless you have suggestions.... nudge nudge hint hint... this will just ramble until it hits one of three conclusions I've thought up. Now I'm off to do my Zulu thing. It is amazing how fast you can make yourself pass out with a little training and knowing how to relax all your muscles one by one.
Hugs and Kisses
516048 This is nowhere near mature; it's only just barely a teen rating, at least to me.
The only suggestion I can think of for where this could go is a bit too cliché, so I'm happy to see your continuing rambles. Besides, they're well written and interesting
Oh goodness, Fluttershy X Dash X Spitfire? What a
ropes
okay this is where i slowly back up and then yell I HAVE NO WORDS TO DESCRIBE HOW GLAD I AM TO NOT KNOW WHAT THE HECK THEY ARE TALKING ABOUT!
516048two things first is rambling what insomnia ahh never mind google is my friend and 2 is my suggestions umm tommrow ill tell you
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I AM A IDIOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Why are you an idiot darling?
Oh hot DAMN! The Montessa bit was so much fun to write. In fact, blame that for this chapter not being up this morning, I got sidetracked trying to write more about her. Which failed miserably. So don't expect any of Magnetism's stories to show up. Yet. They will be coming back into this story thuogh!
All self pimping over with, I think that I should say that I at least have a rough idea of where this is going short term, if not the resolution.
Finally, I'M SORRY THERE'S NO SPITFIRE! *hides* Don't hurt me please.
521522 i went over what insomnia was Friday
That's good, there's a pop quiz on it tonight as well! Who's with me... your all asleep. I SHALL SLEEP WHEN HYRULE IS FREE! *digs around* AHA! *starts Ocarina of time on 3DS* toodles. I'll see yall later. DIE VOLVEGA! DIE!!!
Just think, if the government put up posters telling teens to go to sleep, and since teens never do what they're told, we'd end the drug war. I mean, I act like I'm high and drunk after about 36 hours without sleep.
We need a Vinyl emoticon...
Well, I figure I owe you some feedback for this delightful story.
Honestly this reads more like a collection of scenes and memories tham a story, but that in and of itself is not a bad thing. Not in this case. We just seem to get a parade of cute moments out of context, and while I can build up some sort of chronology in my head, it feels more fun not to.
I might have some complaints, but mostly I see them as invalid anyway. For example I think Dash and Fluttershy fell into each other's arms just a little too quickly, but then again I mostly read fanfiction where that is the end goal and not an incidental event. I'd also like to know how it all links together, but I get the impression you'll get us there eventually.
For now, know this: I am watching, I am waiting, and I am very much enjoying this.
Ok so I finally read the description (still need to read the story) and I immediately thought this is going to be a threesome.
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... um. Is that a good thing or not?
Not saying it isn't/won't be, but still...
523437 lol idk is it? I just think its funny a threesome with dash, spit, and shy lol
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Oh, so many dirty jokes in that shipping name.
523648 lol o what fun.
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You sir, have many reactions. Am I to assume that this is your face as you read? Are they in any particular order?
526672 NOPE!
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I ask this as a friend. Have you taken your medicine anytime this week?
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KILL CELESTIA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 
ummm no
:530762:translaction of course i ha oh wait no i havnt dont hurt me! wait ill just kill you! wait better yet KILL CELESTIA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ummm no hehe
>Sees Spitfire, Dashie, and Fluttershy.
I SHALL READ THIS
>
>Notices it's Romance + Mature
>Facehoof
I'll read this.. but.. ._. It'd better be more story-based than 'mature'.
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Umm, I hope it is. Its mostly fluff that I write because I've spent about three weeks mindfucking myself.
There's a shitstorm of innuendo, but nothing explicit.
Horizontal
Rule
Woopdewoop
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Neh?
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I don't know.
Wait a minute... is this in some alternate continuity where Dash never met the other Mane 4? Because it seems like she didn't recognize Mac and AJ. What's with that?
Other than that, good story. The various snippets are nice, even though there doesn't seem to be any dots to connect between them and the lack of context exposition makes things a bit confusing. For instance, is this a Future Fic or an Alt. Fic?
Anyway, your writing is very solid, the snippets themselves are good and the implications of a DashShyFire OT3 makes me eager for more
(this will end with that right?)
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Its AU, because part of what I want to happen technically can fit with cannon, but I would have to have them explain a lot of stuff, and since this is basically a fic I'm writing to amuse myself rather than for plot... I just didn't wanna.
The snippits will come together, mostly, by the end, and as for that end, I have no idea. I really have only one or two actual plot points, and neither of those is the end. I'll just keep going until I get to where it feels like it should end.
And next chapter will blow your mind. Just so you have some towels in the room.
While I do love the fanfic and all, I can't seem to shake a feeling of something being completly weird. Since, well, the character's personality was charactirised basicly the same as canon, I must ask....
What was Fluttershy doing in a bar in the first place?
Yah, I am REALLY lost right now. I have NO idea what just happened, or in which timeline.
I for one forseeably forsee how this could possibly, maybe, might fit into the canon timeline. That said... I was never particularly focused on that aspect in the first place.
Enjoyed this chapter, looking forward to the next one.
Oh wow.
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Really great job, Nadake!
Keep it up, I can't wait to see more.
heh, I'm still the one reading this in the corner and hoping for a threesome. and by Cthulhu if you dare toss Gilda into that I will find you and show you the error of your ways. i.e. hit you in the face with a plastic spoon. REPEATEDLY.